Mcdonalds rejected application

I am very sad that mcdonalds rejected my application, they asked me 'What do you like to do in your spare time? (include details of any interests or membership of clubs and societies) (max 500 words)' and i answered

'In my spare time I like going out with my friends and enjoying myself. In the summer I like going to the beach and maybe even playing a few ball games. I like talking to them and telling them how I feel about things.

Sometimes I have to cook for my family because my parents go out, I enjoy doing this because it allows me to develop some skills and knowing what ingredients I need to make for different types of food. I know how to make fruit scones because I learned this in school and I enjoyed making them and giving them to my friends to see if I could make them any better next time.

Singing is a main interest for me, even though I am not good at it I sing because I believe it makes you healthier and it is a great way to keep your lungs and heart healthy. Watching too much TV is boring, but I do watch soaps such as Hollyoaks when I have time. When I was at school I decided to take part in a University summer school, over the holidays I learned about university life and finances. I also took the job as a paper boy and delivered newspapers few years back, I enjoyed doing that because then I could do something during my spare time.

During my spare time I go out with my friends and socialize with them and I enjoy being around them, going to the cinemas and eating is the stuff I enjoy most as well as lending my friends money. In college when I have my free time I play football with my friends, I am not that good but I try to play alongside my friends because I enjoy it.'

then 'What is your proudest accomplishment to date? (max 500 words)'

i answered
'My proudest accomplishment to date is achieving good grades for my GCSE's and I am proud of this because I can then find a better job and study in higher education compared to not having good qualifications. Spending 2 years of studying for my GCSE's and then getting the results I wanted I am proud now I can study my A-levels and do more.
Another thing that I am proud of is having good friends around me when I am upset or have a problem they are always there for me.

I am proud that I have a nice caring family to look after me and my big brother who is able to help if I have any financial difficulties.
I recently passed my driving test on the first go and this is a major achievement for me because I thought I would not pass the first time, this has motivated me more and now have more confidence doing test etc.

Relating back to me working as a paper boy I have gained some experience, such as keeping accounts of customers because I had to learn which streets/numbers to deliver as well as handling money in an accurate timely manner.'

isnt that okay?
will someone give me ideas on how i could improve please

should i go and hand in a cv personally to manager?

'My proudest accomplishment to date is achieving good grades for my GCSE's and I am proud of this because I can then find a better job and study in higher education compared to not having good qualifications.

I am bitter about maccy d's myself

They rejected me and my boyfriend. I applied a couple of years back and my bf applied this year. I know it was probably due to being 'overqualified' (we are both already graduates etc.) but I needed money and I'm so bitter! Let me flip burgers!!!!

As for constructive advice... try Subway.

I am very sad that mcdonalds rejected my application, they asked me 'What do you like to do in your spare time? (include details of any interests or membership of clubs and societies) (max 500 words)' and i answered

'In my spare time I like going out with my friends and enjoying myself. In the summer I like going to the beach and maybe even playing a few ball games. I like talking to them and telling them how I feel about things.

Sometimes I have to cook for my family because my parents go out, I enjoy doing this because it allows me to develop some skills and knowing what ingredients I need to make for different types of food. I know how to make fruit scones because I learned this in school and I enjoyed making them and giving them to my friends to see if I could make them any better next time.

Singing is a main interest for me, even though I am not good at it I sing because I believe it makes you healthier and it is a great way to keep your lungs and heart healthy. Watching too much TV is boring, but I do watch soaps such as Hollyoaks when I have time. When I was at school I decided to take part in a University summer school, over the holidays I learned about university life and finances. I also took the job as a paper boy and delivered newspapers few years back, I enjoyed doing that because then I could do something during my spare time.

During my spare time I go out with my friends and socialize with them and I enjoy being around them, going to the cinemas and eating is the stuff I enjoy most as well as lending my friends money. In college when I have my free time I play football with my friends, I am not that good but I try to play alongside my friends because I enjoy it.'

then 'What is your proudest accomplishment to date? (max 500 words)'

i answered
'My proudest accomplishment to date is achieving good grades for my GCSE's and I am proud of this because I can then find a better job and study in higher education compared to not having good qualifications. Spending 2 years of studying for my GCSE's and then getting the results I wanted I am proud now I can study my A-levels and do more.
Another thing that I am proud of is having good friends around me when I am upset or have a problem they are always there for me.

I am proud that I have a nice caring family to look after me and my big brother who is able to help if I have any financial difficulties.
I recently passed my driving test on the first go and this is a major achievement for me because I thought I would not pass the first time, this has motivated me more and now have more confidence doing test etc.

Relating back to me working as a paper boy I have gained some experience, such as keeping accounts of customers because I had to learn which streets/numbers to deliver as well as handling money in an accurate timely manner.'

isnt that okay?
will someone give me ideas on how i could improve please

should i go and hand in a cv personally to manager?