[sammy-lou]

I know this feeling.
Eyes like darts find you
In a crowded room where I know you’ll be.
And I smile because you’re looking for me.
Wonder where you’ve been?
Three long, lonely years,
When scar tissue grows on a dying heart.
Me, just me, in my inadequacy.
Have you felt this too?
Is it strange, being scared?
Scared you’re loving someone, loving you too?

Is it just me you speak to how we do?
No ‘how do you do’s’
No small talking blues.
I’m frightened of time wasted not with you.
It’s been a while since this feeling took hold.
Scared that I’d grown old…
But I’m young, you’re young, we’ve got years to come;
Maybe,
I’ll learn how to love.



[A level Az]

Better than most of the **** I had to analyse for A level English.

[FloydHead]

Very nice poem. The simile "eyes like darts" doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me though.

[winning11]

sounds like a script song

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by A level Az)
Better than most of the **** I had to analyse for A level English.

hahah I'm not sure I'm on a par with Wordsworth but I'm glad you thought it was OK!

(Original post by FloydHead)
Very nice poem. The simile "eyes like darts" doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me though.

Thanks sweet. Um I sort of took that simile from when you say someones eyes are 'darting', and also just the idea that they're really obsessively searching for this person.

(Original post by winning11)
sounds like a script song

This makes me happy!

[Tedaus]

Sweet little poem. Did you have a specific rhyming pattern? I couldn't spot one but I like the way it sounds

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by Tedaus)
Sweet little poem. Did you have a specific rhyming pattern? I couldn't spot one but I like the way it sounds

Thank you! No, I opted for free verse here, so the rhyming is a little erratic. I find it tends to work fine as long as the meter has some sort of structure to it as well!

[the bear]

Very lovely poem Sammy

Nice pussy too !

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by the bear)
Very lovely poem Sammy

Nice pussy too !

Thanks Bear!

I change it every now and then, too many pussies to choose from

[I Like Turtles]

(Original post by sammy-lou)
I know this feeling.
Eyes like darts find you
In a crowded room where I know you’ll be.
And I smile because you’re looking for me.
Wonder where you’ve been?
Three long, lonely years,
When scar tissue grows on a dying heart.
Me, just me, in my inadequacy.
Have you felt this too?
Is it strange, being scared?
Scared you’re loving someone, loving you too?

Is it just me you speak to how we do?
No ‘how do you do’s’
No small talking blues.
I’m frightened of time wasted not with you.
It’s been a while since this feeling took hold.
Scared that I’d grown old…
But I’m young, you’re young, we’ve got years to come;
Maybe,
I’ll learn how to love.



How much do you want for this poem?

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by I Like Turtles)
How much do you want for this poem?

huh?

[I Like Turtles]

(Original post by sammy-lou)
huh?

I'm willing to buy the ownership off of you.

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by I Like Turtles)
I'm willing to buy the ownership off of you.

Haha, I'm flattered but why?
I'm not selling it though, they're just there to be enjoyed!

[I Like Turtles]

(Original post by sammy-lou)
Haha, I'm flattered but why?
I'm not selling it though, they're just there to be enjoyed!

Because it's awesome and could be made into a good song.

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by I Like Turtles)
Because it's awesome and could be made into a good song.

Really? I have no idea about production of music at all so wouldn't know - do you write music? and wouldn't it need to be longer?

[I Like Turtles]

(Original post by sammy-lou)
Really? I have no idea about production of music at all so wouldn't know - do you write music? and wouldn't it need to be longer?

I write music, and record music.
The wording might need to be longer, but if it's a club banger it could stay how it is with maybe a few rap or rock vocals in it.

[InternetGangster]

(Original post by sammy-lou)
I know this feeling.
Eyes like darts find you
In a crowded room where I know you’ll be.
And I smile because you’re looking for me.
Wonder where you’ve been?
Three long, lonely years,
When scar tissue grows on a dying heart.
Me, just me, in my inadequacy.
Have you felt this too?
Is it strange, being scared?
Scared you’re loving someone, loving you too?

Is it just me you speak to how we do?
No ‘how do you do’s’
No small talking blues.
I’m frightened of time wasted not with you.
It’s been a while since this feeling took hold.
Scared that I’d grown old…
But I’m young, you’re young, we’ve got years to come;
Maybe,
I’ll learn how to love.



I have to say it's pretty damn good. Please check out my first poem.

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by I Like Turtles)
I write music, and record music.
The wording might need to be longer, but if it's a club banger it could stay how it is with maybe a few rap or rock vocals in it.

I really can't see it myself - not being rude at all. PM me if you are bothered enough to try to convince me though, ahaha.

[sammy-lou]

(Original post by InternetGangster)
I have to say it's pretty damn good. Please check out my first poem.

Thank you. Sure, can you link me it?

[I Like Turtles]

(Original post by sammy-lou)
I really can't see it myself - not being rude at all. PM me if you are bothered enough to try to convince me though, ahaha.

Well most people will buy it if it has an emotional connection with them.