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PLEASE GIVE A GRADE ON THIS PIECE OF WORK:
What do you think the importance of the inspector is in the play and how does Priestley present him? Remind yourself of the opening of the stage directions. In the rest of the play, how does Priestley present and develop some of the ideas shown here?
Before the arrival of inspector Goole, Mr Birling gives his precious and all important speech to deliver a message to his family, but in the arrival of inspector Goole things immediately change, as he’s approaching to where they are sitting, it shows his character of one that fulfils its responsibility and shows he’s fulfilling his duties and meeting the needs of his presence. We see him when he enters the house of the birling, when entering the house of Mr birling he’s asked if he wants to drink something, his answer is a blatant ‘’no thank you Mr birling, I’m on duty’’ which is used to allow priestly to show how inspector Goole fulfils his duty and isn’t interested to know anything but meeting the needs of his job and abstains from things that aren’t related to work. Furthermore priestly shows his politeness at the same time because he says ‘’no thank you’’, his politeness might demonstrate that the birling’s family are about to hear pleasant news about something, but clearly an inspector isn’t there to hold jokes amongst people, and we realise straight after that he says ‘’I’m on duty’’ this shows the sense of clarity that he has for his job and that he might probably hold the most vital information, but at the same time, most serious information for the birling’s family to know. The usage of this not only demonstrate a lack of happiness at this very beginning of inspector Goole arrival but clearly shows that something very accurate and true is about to happen.

Furthermore priestly again has developed a sense of clarity for inspector Goole’s character but this time openly saying what needs to be said because earlier on he was introduced to the family and now he mentions why he’s there not actually what he’s going to do but what he’s about to say or do. ‘’ it’s the way l like to go to work’’, one person and one line of inquiry at a time’’. This shows his feelings towards his job and that he’s a person of responsibilities but at the same time he’s organised, and we see that he’s recently being transferred and that shows that something very disturbing has taken place for him to appear at Mr birling’s house, and therefore he has had to visit the birling’s to ask questions regarding what could’ve happen or what could have they to cause problems to someone. Priestley has used this character to perfectly control the atmosphere in the entire play but at this particular scene we can think of a different way that priestly has presented because this time, inspector has being defined as probably being the most peaceful and simple character in the entire play because he thinks that it’s important that something should be sorted out amongst the birling’s and him and Priestley might be showing this to negotiate with the birling’s to own up to what they might have done as well.
When Priestley shows him as (‘’looking hard at him’’ )shows his frustration towards Eric because he might be responsible for most of the things happened to Eva smith, his frustration might even foreshadow the scene because he’s trying to this calmly, the reason why this has been used in such a limited phrase or sentence and Priestley hasn’t complicated things and hasn’t included anything more to the character in this particular stage direction is because he wants people to realise this preferably towards the end of the inquiry or maybe not want us to know and let us think for ourselves for the purpose of conveying his message. Although he has done this at the commence of the play, the reason why this has been done is to show the importance of the inspector at that particular moment and the inspector through looking ‘’hard’’ at him might be also be analysing and seeing of what Eric might be like and how he possibly might be different in the play to the inspector.

PLEASE GIVE A GRADE ON THIS PIECE OF WORK:
What do you think the importance of the inspector is in the play and how does Priestley present him? Remind yourself of the opening of the stage directions. In the rest of the play, how does Priestley present and develop some of the ideas shown here?
Before the arrival of inspector Goole, Mr Birling gives his precious and all important speech to deliver a message to his family, but in the arrival of inspector Goole things immediately change, as he’s approaching to where they are sitting, it shows his character of one that fulfils its responsibility and shows he’s fulfilling his duties and meeting the needs of his presence. We see him when he enters the house of the birling, when entering the house of Mr birling he’s asked if he wants to drink something, his answer is a blatant ‘’no thank you Mr birling, I’m on duty’’ which is used to allow priestly to show how inspector Goole fulfils his duty and isn’t interested to know anything but meeting the needs of his job and abstains from things that aren’t related to work. Furthermore priestly shows his politeness at the same time because he says ‘’no thank you’’, his politeness might demonstrate that the birling’s family are about to hear pleasant news about something, but clearly an inspector isn’t there to hold jokes amongst people, and we realise straight after that he says ‘’I’m on duty’’ this shows the sense of clarity that he has for his job and that he might probably hold the most vital information, but at the same time, most serious information for the birling’s family to know. The usage of this not only demonstrate a lack of happiness at this very beginning of inspector Goole arrival but clearly shows that something very accurate and true is about to happen.

Furthermore priestly again has developed a sense of clarity for inspector Goole’s character but this time openly saying what needs to be said because earlier on he was introduced to the family and now he mentions why he’s there not actually what he’s going to do but what he’s about to say or do. ‘’ it’s the way l like to go to work’’, one person and one line of inquiry at a time’’. This shows his feelings towards his job and that he’s a person of responsibilities but at the same time he’s organised, and we see that he’s recently being transferred and that shows that something very disturbing has taken place for him to appear at Mr birling’s house, and therefore he has had to visit the birling’s to ask questions regarding what could’ve happen or what could have they to cause problems to someone. Priestley has used this character to perfectly control the atmosphere in the entire play but at this particular scene we can think of a different way that priestly has presented because this time, inspector has being defined as probably being the most peaceful and simple character in the entire play because he thinks that it’s important that something should be sorted out amongst the birling’s and him and Priestley might be showing this to negotiate with the birling’s to own up to what they might have done as well.
When Priestley shows him as (‘’looking hard at him’’ )shows his frustration towards Eric because he might be responsible for most of the things happened to Eva smith, his frustration might even foreshadow the scene because he’s trying to this calmly, the reason why this has been used in such a limited phrase or sentence and Priestley hasn’t complicated things and hasn’t included anything more to the character in this particular stage direction is because he wants people to realise this preferably towards the end of the inquiry or maybe not want us to know and let us think for ourselves for the purpose of conveying his message. Although he has done this at the commence of the play, the reason why this has been done is to show the importance of the inspector at that particular moment and the inspector through looking ‘’hard’’ at him might be also be analysing and seeing of what Eric might be like and how he possibly might be different in the play to the inspector.