Hi! So, I'm going to tell you this off the top of my head (for revision purposes!)
1)Firstly, and I've been told by my teacher this today: write in third person preferably! Whilst you are able to write in first person (sparingly), this is less formal. So, it's best to, if you're aiming for top grades, write in third person ("he, she"
2)Use subheadings! This will look MUCH more professional!
3) FOCUS ON ONE TOPIC!. For example, if the question was: 'Write a report on the facilities on offer in your area', perhaps choose to write about a Leisure centre, as opposed to every single facility within your area. Otherwise, this will take far too long to write!
4) Be to-the-point with your title. For example, for an example from the question above, simply write: 'A report on the facilities within ----"
5) Intro! Again, try and make this as concise as possible. An example for the above question could be: 'This report will highlight the facilities on offer in ---- Leisure Centre, how these are positively impacting the community, but also areas in which improvement could be made. In order to construct this, vast primary research has been conducted, which has then been compared to previous data from over the years.' (I just kinda made that up- not sure if it's good
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6) Main body (2 points would be best rather than 3 as far as I'm aware as it makes your writing much more concise!)
Point one: Subtitle first!; could literally be 'Range of facilities on offer in ----- Leisure Centre'Undoubtedly, there is a plethora of activities on offer at the ---- Leisure Centre, ranging from table tennis, to novice karate classes. Within the multiple questionnaires undertaken, the most striking comment was "I made myself believe I was born talentless, until I stepped into ---- Leisure Centre." Another added "My partner told me I was useless at dancing, and now, when we go out with friends, I show him up with my 'Dirty Dancing'-like dance moves". This shows how formative the ---- Leisure Centre has been on numerous individuals' lives. This is promising to hear.
Point two: Potential improvements:Not everyone is in agreeance with this. Whilst the range of activities is infinite, at --- Leisure Centre, a prominent identification in the questionnaires was the "extortionate prices in the cafe." Customers of the cafe have also mentioned how they are "dissatisfied with the quality of customer service", and how the staff are "insolent" and "disheveled- looking". This is dissimilar to last year's comments, which in fact prided the friendly manner of the cafe's staff. Perhaps the Leisure Centre should invest in some staff training, to rejuvenate this imperfection, and get it back to last year's standard! It's only minor; these are, however, minorities which make all the difference.
Conclusion: Overall, there is certainly an abundance of formative activities on offer at the --- Leisure Centre". This simply cannot be faulted. However, lingering in the background are some slight imperfections, whilst although may not appear grave, are actually dragging down the quality of the Centre from what it formerly was. It has been suggested that on-the-job training should be executed to improve the poorer levels of customer service that have unfolded this year. Being on-the-job will ensure that the training does not drag down the profits of the cafe(since off-the-job is far dearer), and thus can only improve things for ----Leisure Centre. Optimistically, this will bring what's known to the community as "The ---- talent-provider" back to its impeccable standard.
I hope this's helped. Also, please may someone comment on my above report. I kind of got carried away writing this, sorry, haha!