Boastful personal statement?

Hi, I am writing my UCAS personal statement and my teacher told me to remove a reference to me having been the only person in my school to achieve 11 A*s at GCSE in my year. I think that puts my achievement in perspective, but he thinks it is overly boastful. Should I remove it? Is there a way to say this without sounding arrogant?

Reply 1

Ze Witcher

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Original post by loja

Hi, I am writing my UCAS personal statement and my teacher told me to remove a reference to me having been the only person in my school to achieve 11 A*s at GCSE in my year. I think that puts my achievement in perspective, but he thinks it is overly boastful. Should I remove it? Is there a way to say this without sounding arrogant?

Put it in your reference, not personal statement.

Reply 2

gdunne42

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Original post by loja

Hi, I am writing my UCAS personal statement and my teacher told me to remove a reference to me having been the only person in my school to achieve 11 A*s at GCSE in my year. I think that puts my achievement in perspective, but he thinks it is overly boastful. Should I remove it? Is there a way to say this without sounding arrogant?

I can understand why you are pleased with the achievement but .......
You will have entered your GCSE results and they will know you have them, they are impressive whether you're the only person who got them or not. If it's a really impressive result from your school then it can be mentioned in your reference.
What relevance does it have to why you want study your chosen degree or why you'd be a success? It does sound a bit boastful and doesn't add to your personal statement.

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Reply 3

999tigger

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What the Dunne said. The results speak for themselves and the reference would be a better place. Btw depending where you are applying then there will likely be others who achieved the same, so you might not be as unique as you think.