[matty123]

What do you think of George and the way he is presented to the reader? (20 Marks)

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Throughout the novel, George is presented in a few different ways and has a mixed personality. This continually affects the readers opinion of him. In this essay, I am going to write about how George is presented throughout the novel and how this affects the readers opinion of him.

Throughout the novel, George has been looking after Lennie and has always had his best interests at heart. George may do things to Lennie which Lennie finds "mean", like alaways taking away dead mice from him, but unlike Lennie, the reader can understand why he does this. If the mouse's body was infected, then it would do damage to Lennie as the mouse "ain't fresh". This clearly shows that George cares about Lennie. George also cares about Lennie physically and can't stand to see him hurt, as he tell Lennie to "get him [Curley]" when Curley is attacking him, and also immediatly defends Lennie when Curley verbally attacks him - "Lennie didn't do nothing to him". All of this shows that George is a caring person who is loyal to Lennie and can't stand to see him bullied or hurt. The reader respects George for this as they understand how hars it must be for George.

However, we also see that George has an aggressive side. He frequently snaps at Lennie - "George exploded." and often threatens to "sock" him. We also learn that George used to be a bad person in the past to Lennie when George confesses to all ti Slim. George used to tell Lennie to "jump" into a pool, even though he "couldn't swim". He also used to "beat the hell out of him". The reader can see that George used to be like Curley currently is in the novel. However, we learn that George has changed and regrets his past and is now a better person, but he still sometimes abuses Lennie and orders him around. The reader can sympathise with George as they realise it must be frustrating to be constantly be looking out for Lennie and staying with him through all of the trouble that they land in.

George is also occasionally presented as a slightly cold and callous character when he says things to Lennie which clearly hurt him. When George claims that he "goes nuts" when thinking of the time he could be without Lennie. This clearly hurts Lennie as he will offer to go and find a cave and leave George to be free. However, George counteracts this as he is also presented as a sorrow and thoughtful character when George admits that "I have been mean". This shows that George sometimes regrets his harsh words, which makes the reader forgive him for sometimes being cruel to Lennie. George even gets Lennie a "pup" for being mean to him.

Steinbeck also presents George as an intelligent man with "sharp features". This suggests that George is quick to pick up on things. Slim complements George for being a "smart guy" suggesting that it isn't only the reader who picks up on George's intelligence. George's intelligence is also shown when he gets mad when inspecting his new bed and finds a "repellant" that kills "ticks". He clearly cares about his personal hygene, which is more than can be said for others on the ranch, which shows George's intelligence.

As I have shown in this esay, many of George's traits are shown through his actions and dialogue with Lennie. Steinbeck presents George as someone who is reliant. George clearly relies on Lennie, because without Lennie, he would be "lonely" and "become mean". Also, George knows that he is safe when Lennie is around, as no one would "tangle" with George if they had to face Lennie. The reader admires this as it shows that George is a trusting person. He trusts Lennie to support him (though he doesn't trust his memoary). George also instantly trusts Slim, which suggests that George is a good judge of character.

George is also presented as a realistic person. He may recite the dream to Lennie, but he "always knowed we'd never do her". George did however have some hope when Candy was involved. George's main dream was to be alone with Lennie so that he knew that Lennie wouldn't get into any trouble, whic hshows how much George considers Lennie a big part of his life. George's care for Lennie is clearly shown at the end of the novel when George shoots Lennie. George is clearly upset at his actions as "he stared at the hand that held the gun". George clearly did it for Lennie's oen good, a selfless act. This emphasises to the reader how caring and considerate George was.

In this essay, I have written about how George is presented in 'of Mice and Men' and the readers opinion of him.

Thank You!

GCSE btw.

[GreenLantern1]

(Original post by matty123)
What do you think of George and the way he is presented to the reader? (20 Marks)

Spoiler:

Show

Throughout the novel, George is presented in a few different ways and has a mixed personality. This continually affects the readers opinion of him. In this essay, I am going to write about how George is presented throughout the novel and how this affects the readers opinion of him.

Throughout the novel, George has been looking after Lennie and has always had his best interests at heart. George may do things to Lennie which Lennie finds "mean", like alaways taking away dead mice from him, but unlike Lennie, the reader can understand why he does this. If the mouse's body was infected, then it would do damage to Lennie as the mouse "ain't fresh". This clearly shows that George cares about Lennie. George also cares about Lennie physically and can't stand to see him hurt, as he tell Lennie to "get him [Curley]" when Curley is attacking him, and also immediatly defends Lennie when Curley verbally attacks him - "Lennie didn't do nothing to him". All of this shows that George is a caring person who is loyal to Lennie and can't stand to see him bullied or hurt. The reader respects George for this as they understand how hars it must be for George.

However, we also see that George has an aggressive side. He frequently snaps at Lennie - "George exploded." and often threatens to "sock" him. We also learn that George used to be a bad person in the past to Lennie when George confesses to all ti Slim. George used to tell Lennie to "jump" into a pool, even though he "couldn't swim". He also used to "beat the hell out of him". The reader can see that George used to be like Curley currently is in the novel. However, we learn that George has changed and regrets his past and is now a better person, but he still sometimes abuses Lennie and orders him around. The reader can sympathise with George as they realise it must be frustrating to be constantly be looking out for Lennie and staying with him through all of the trouble that they land in.

George is also occasionally presented as a slightly cold and callous character when he says things to Lennie which clearly hurt him. When George claims that he "goes nuts" when thinking of the time he could be without Lennie. This clearly hurts Lennie as he will offer to go and find a cave and leave George to be free. However, George counteracts this as he is also presented as a sorrow and thoughtful character when George admits that "I have been mean". This shows that George sometimes regrets his harsh words, which makes the reader forgive him for sometimes being cruel to Lennie. George even gets Lennie a "pup" for being mean to him.

Steinbeck also presents George as an intelligent man with "sharp features". This suggests that George is quick to pick up on things. Slim complements George for being a "smart guy" suggesting that it isn't only the reader who picks up on George's intelligence. George's intelligence is also shown when he gets mad when inspecting his new bed and finds a "repellant" that kills "ticks". He clearly cares about his personal hygene, which is more than can be said for others on the ranch, which shows George's intelligence.

As I have shown in this esay, many of George's traits are shown through his actions and dialogue with Lennie. Steinbeck presents George as someone who is reliant. George clearly relies on Lennie, because without Lennie, he would be "lonely" and "become mean". Also, George knows that he is safe when Lennie is around, as no one would "tangle" with George if they had to face Lennie. The reader admires this as it shows that George is a trusting person. He trusts Lennie to support him (though he doesn't trust his memoary). George also instantly trusts Slim, which suggests that George is a good judge of character.

George is also presented as a realistic person. He may recite the dream to Lennie, but he "always knowed we'd never do her". George did however have some hope when Candy was involved. George's main dream was to be alone with Lennie so that he knew that Lennie wouldn't get into any trouble, whic hshows how much George considers Lennie a big part of his life. George's care for Lennie is clearly shown at the end of the novel when George shoots Lennie. George is clearly upset at his actions as "he stared at the hand that held the gun". George clearly did it for Lennie's oen good, a selfless act. This emphasises to the reader how caring and considerate George was.

In this essay, I have written about how George is presented in 'of Mice and Men' and the readers opinion of him.

Thank You!

Firstly Of Mice and Men is a novella rather than a novel - minute detail but thought i might include it.

You use 'throughout the novel' too much and it gets repetitive making it boring.

These are all minute details; other than that it is excellent. I would give 19

EDIT: Why was i negged for giving the guy feedback!

[matty123]

(Original post by GreenLantern1)
Firstly Of Mice and Men is a novella rather than a novel - minute detail but thought i might include it.

You use 'throughout the novel' too much and it gets repetitive making it boring.

These are all minute details; other than that it is excellent. I would give 19

Thanks

I wasn't expecting that high of a score lol

[Miracle Day]

9/20

Not much depth, you could explore the points better.

I marked it as I would an A Level answer though.

[matty123]

(Original post by Miracle Day)
9/20

Not much depth, you could explore the points better.

I marked it as I would an A Level answer though.

This is for GCSE though. What mark do you think I would get at GCSE level?

Thank you anyway!

[Miracle Day]

(Original post by matty123)
This is for GCSE though. What mark do you think I would get at GCSE level?

Thank you anyway!

An A.

What's this for?

[matty123]

(Original post by Miracle Day)
An A.

What's this for?

Just essay practise for my exam lol (WJEC). What parts could I improve on?

Thank you!

[IslandMan]

You need to embed your quotes better not quite seamless yet and beginning an essay with "In this essay, I am going to write about" is not the best way to start its unnecessary the examiner can see what question your answering and never end an essay like you did its just clunky. If you want to structure it add a conclusion which brings new evidence to support your idea of George and how he's presented.

12/20

[Miracle Day]

(Original post by matty123)
Just essay practise for my exam lol (WJEC). What parts could I improve on?

Thank you!

I did WJEC.

In the exam.. if you don't want to learn any quotes just do the empathy questions where you pretend you're a character and write about events. For example I was Atticus Finch from To Kill a Mockingbird and came out with an A. We're lucky in WJEC because we don't really have to learn any quotes

P.S.

I got an A by just by reading To Kill a Mockingbird twice, watching the movie once, and doing the same for Inspector Calls Didn't even learn much quotes, besides the basics that were engrained in my memory that stood out. For example say if I was Lenny and I was reciting what happened, I would talk about say I remember George saying "I want to tend the rabbits" etc..

Easy A

Also not many people chose the empathy questions, so whereas markers will be reading the other question and setting the bar high.. they tend to mark higher the questions people don't chose.

[matty123]

(Original post by IslandMan)
You need to embed your quotes better not quite seamless yet and beginning an essay with "In this essay, I am going to write about" is not the best way to start its unnecessary the examiner can see what question your answering and never end an essay like you did its just clunky. If you want to structure it add a conclusion which brings new evidence to support your idea of George and how he's presented.

12/20

Cheers . My teacher advies my me to have them sorts of introductions and conclusions though?

[matty123]

(Original post by Miracle Day)
I did WJEC.

In the exam.. if you don't want to learn any quotes just do the empathy questions where you pretend you're a character and write about events. For example I was Atticus Finch from To Kill a Mockingbird and came out with an A. We're lucky in WJEC because we don't really have to learn any quotes

P.S.

I got an A by just by reading To Kill a Mockingbird twice, watching the movie once, and doing the same for Inspector Calls Didn't even learn much quotes, besides the basics that were engrained in my memory that stood out. For example say if I was Lenny and I was reciting what happened, I would talk about say I remember George saying "I want to tend the rabbits" etc..

Easy A

Also not many people chose the empathy questions, so whereas markers will be reading the other question and setting the bar high.. they tend to mark higher the questions people don't chose.

We are unlikely get empathy questions on our exam though , its a new spec.

[Miracle Day]

(Original post by matty123)
We are unlikely get empathy questions on our exam though , its a new spec.

It's changed since last year? Can you show me an example past paper?

[matty123]

(Original post by Miracle Day)
It's changed since last year? Can you show me an example past paper?

http://www.wjec.co.uk/uploads/publications/8323.pdf

[Miracle Day]

(Original post by matty123)
http://www.wjec.co.uk/uploads/publications/8323.pdf

Oh my god I'm so glad I did it last year.

Okay just learn asmany quotes as you can.

Make sure you have an intro, a conclusion and 5 developed paragraphs in between.

Make sure you have a 'Signpost sentence' at the start of every paragraph which refers to the question and leads the way through your paragraph.

For example

"To what extent is Lenny gay?"

"The novel also shows Lenny is gay the way he looks at Lenny "he looked at Lenny, his eyes filled with love", this shows ....."

Sorry I couldn't think of a better example

[matty123]

(Original post by Miracle Day)
Oh my god I'm so glad I did it last year.

Okay just learn asmany quotes as you can.

Make sure you have an intro, a conclusion and 5 developed paragraphs in between.

Make sure you have a 'Signpost sentence' at the start of every paragraph which refers to the question and leads the way through your paragraph.

For example

"To what extent is Lenny gay?"

"The novel also shows Lenny is gay the way he looks at Lenny "he looked at Lenny, his eyes filled with love", this shows ....."

Sorry I couldn't think of a better example

LOL, thanks, but the one I wrote was worthy of an A? Thank you!

[Miracle Day]

Also get rid of the "I am going to" "I think" .. speak as though you're certain "George is" not "I think George is.."

[Miracle Day]

First paragraph start with "George is presented as gentle and caring, the way he always looks after Lenny" etc..

Make sure you always include Signpost sentences. My A Level teacher drills it into me!

[Millyshyn]

(Original post by matty123)
Cheers . My teacher advies my me to have them sorts of introductions and conclusions though?

It's very bad style to write in first person in an essay like this. Make sure it's always in third person and you are likely to get better marks because it will read better to the examiner.

[Quick-use]

This was a fantastic essay especially in GCSE. Very well done kiddo, I'm proud of you. You should be getting top marks, B or A, for this I think.

The only pointers I would give is to avoid 'I', instead maybe say 'It will be discussed' - third person. Also, your conclusion is really small. For your conclusion, summarise, reword and connect all the last sentences of your main body paragraphs - George is intelligent, regretful etc. And then, answer the question: George is a man that has experienced many difficulties in life, and the way he is presented allows the reader to sympathise with him, as he still has to put up with these problems, whilst becoming a better person.

In order to get your A*, you're looking at how George represents the themes. Talk about George in relation to the themes. Introduce your themes in the introduction. This can range from loneliness, isolation to the great depression etc.

Also, try to include in techniques. Techniques include: characterisation, key incident, symbolism, climax etc. You analyse the techniques and what they mean which = analysis = top marks.

Very well done still. Just remember though, third person, themes, techniques, conclusion.

[Shadowcake]

The use of english and sentence structure is rather simplistic I'm afraid, you wouldn't score very high on that, sorry, but it needs some work but its difficult to write up everything online, get someone else to read it with you, not of the same age, and ask if it makes sense to them; what I'm trying to say is that the english is not formal, and an essay like this needs to be.
Speaking as someone who studied this novella for my own GCSE English for WJEC only 2 years ago, I have to say that you're developments are not always detailed and sometimes very simple. The easiest way to fix this would be to pick out some better quotations, unfortunately I cannot help you there as it has been a long time since I have read this book
Nevertheless, the overall quality of the essay is quite good for exam standard, i.e. written within the time allocated for the question, so from my experience I would say that the essay would be a B, with the potential of a good A (If you added a bit more to the conclusion as well)
At this time of the year, it is a very good attempt so keep up the good work and practice! All the best