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Starting a new folk-pop/rock EP, could I get some feedback?

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    Hi all! Just starting a new EP this week, and below are four of the tracks I'm planning on putting on it. I'm always looking for constructive criticism as to what make the songs more memorable and appealing etc., so any advice or feedback you could give me would be much appreciated. You spend so much time creating a song that it gets under your skin and makes it impossible to hear it objectively at some point. Make sure to watch in HD



    Waiting here is wasting me to death
    How could I have known that you were there behind that door?
    I'm sorry for what I said
    The streets are cold here; I can always see my breath
    I was way too high to say goodbye
    I ran away and I don't know why

    Still hiding in London
    So no one gets hurt when it all comes undone
    Getting back to my apartment
    Or flat or whatever you bastards call it
    I just up and left; didn't realize what it meant
    You called me out
    What began in the hall...I'll be damned if it all works out

    Still hiding in Bristol
    Thinking it could help, but my thinking's wishful
    Nobody could stop it
    Everything I never felt has been shoplifted, tattered, torn
    Things that I'd tried to ignore (and with success)
    Barely here in the flesh; I'm a shell in my Sunday best

    Oh, I'm sorry that you're sore
    Has no one ever talked to you like this before?
    I'm sorry that you're sore
    Has no one ever talked to you like this?




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    I’m reading Matthew by day and then Hitchens by night
    Don’t think anything can save me; nothing seems right
    And I don’t believe everything I read or that I hear
    But if it kills me I will find a way to shake off this fear

    You’re a son of a bitch but a hell of a son
    Nothing like blood to make you proud of someone
    And nothing like no expectations to exceed prediction
    Those that have known pain know damn well how to inflict it

    All of your explanations
    They just give us questions
    Thinking is our best chance

    When you’re twenty-two you think you’ve seen it all
    You’ve got no idea hun just how far you can fall
    Oh, but I’m a fast learner and anything good I’ll fix it
    Those that have known pain know damn well how to inflict it

    You’re a son of a bitch but a hell of a son
    So I’ll only ask just how fast you can run
    There’s nothing for you here but Friday paycheck addiction
    We say we’re doing just fine but we say it without conviction
    And those that have known pain know damn well how to inflict it

    All of your explanations
    They just leave us questions
    Thinking is our last chance



    Is it cold where you are?
    I cannot say for sure; it must be late
    We talked for hours
    Reflected in the ripples of the lake

    The helm is for the thickest of skins
    I'm a scared little kid
    And I'll be stowed away by nightfall
    Missed the ice; I never will learn
    As I slipped off the stern, I thought
    "This swim will be without you..."
    My last one, my darling

    Is it cold where you are?
    I cannot feel a thing; I would not know
    We walked for hours
    The proof in shallow tracks upon the snow

    We're falling down and we must hold our ground
    We're all falling down and it's the best we can do to just...



    The fear is real and I'm not
    Sure I'm not to blame
    I am sure that I'm insane

    Never been to a wake in the winter
    Never been to a wake in the...
    Near paralyzed, I am drunk and I am cold
    But oh, it's nice to be home
    They say, "Isn't it nice to be home?"

    When you get to the point that you know
    What you can and cannot prove
    Then you've solved it, haven't you?

    This bottle's real and I've got
    This slowly swelling rage
    Sole the sufferer, sole the blame,
    So they...

    Never been to a wake in the winter
    Never been to a wake in the...
    Near paralyzed, I am drunk and I am cold
    But oh, it's nice to be home

    Home, coming home, coming home, coming home

    Paralyzed with fear, I am drunk but I am here
    And oh, it's nice to be home
    They say, "Isn't it nice to be home?"
    Oh but don't
    Don't wake up...
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    Went back and tweaked Questions so that the harmonies build a bit more gradually and there's more bass presence.
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    First video is private.
    Also you are in my itunes so I must have downloaded the EP at some point.
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    (Original post by Manitude)
    First video is private.
    Also you are in my itunes so I must have downloaded the EP at some point.
    Oops! Uploaded directly from iVideo, it loves to do that. Sorted. And yeah, back in November I put out Bonnie's Pantsuit for free download. This one's gonna be another 5 or 6 tracker called "Saturday Night Palsy" and over the summer I'm throwing myself headfirst into the music with my band, we're gonna get back into a proper studio. I couldn't be more excited.
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