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Some lyrics i've wroteJust wondered what though? i'm to embarressed to show my familly/mates. This is my first ever attempt at it BTW.
Roll a dice, toss a coin I'm your lover
not your fighter. In the dark
shadows of night you're a juggernaut of feelings that I can't
fight.
I fought the law, but i'm winning the war.
I fought the law, but i'm winning the war.
I believed you when said it was
blue, but really its red. Its all black
and white now, in the dark shade of night
but in the morning it seemed
alright, but you still gave me a fright.
I fought the law, but i'm winning the war
I fought the law, but i'm winning the war
The birds Peck at the Juggernaut
wreck in my head. You made me
feel like I needed some Meds. But
in reality you just went over my
head.
I fought the law, but i'm winning the war
I fought the law, but i'm winning the war
Its all over, but ill just have to
move over. Like chalk on the cliffs
of Dover. In the end I'll listen to the Roses, but itll all end up like
moses. Not the bed of roses I feel.Last edited by TheCasual; 12-05-2012 at 10:29. -
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Re: Some lyrics i've wroteThis is good! I write some songs too and I love doing it, I express myself in a special way... at the beginning I was embarrassed to show some lyrics to my friends but I did one time and the response was awesome they made me feel special, so I had to write to everyone songs... but I'm still embarrassed to show some lyrics I wrote that I keep very very private for the moment :P
For you lyrics, it's good, I like it! It's a good start, keep writing, you'll do better and better
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Re: Some lyrics i've wroteIts alright, youre kinda doing a pitbull by rhyming two words that are the same. Try to not vary the syllables within two sentences i.e.
Yo my homie
Please dont phone me
I am having me some poon
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That's not bad! I'd avoid using words like juggernauts as its a bit harsh and ugly sounding, that's just me personally though, but you could definitely make this into a decent song in my opinion
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Re: Some lyrics i've wroteNice! Don't be shy about sharing lyrics with your family, they're really good and the more you write, the better you get.
Do you play an instrument? I just got my guitar out and started strumming with some of your lyrics, it sounds really nice!
If you ever put it together with some chords, or make a youtube vid, let me know! -
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Re: Some lyrics i've wroteAwww thats really is a big complement. I'm looking at buying a electric guitar soon, so i'll probaly have a go at writing some guitar parts for it. But I won't be singing, I have a awful voice(Original post by Zaddie Caso)
Nice! Don't be shy about sharing lyrics with your family, they're really good and the more you write, the better you get.
Do you play an instrument? I just got my guitar out and started strumming with some of your lyrics, it sounds really nice!
If you ever put it together with some chords, or make a youtube vid, let me know!
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Was there really any need? We all clearly knew what he meant.(Original post by katyness)
*I've written.
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Re: Some lyrics i've wrote(Original post by Robbob16)
Was there really any need? We all clearly knew what he meant.
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So true! Grammar is for understanding, not for humiliating people who don't want to read over there posts a few times before posting on a creative forum. *VLOG BROTHERS -
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I couldn't have said it better myself.(Original post by Zaddie Caso)
So true! Grammar is for understanding, not for humiliating people who don't want to read over there posts a few times before posting on a creative forum. *VLOG BROTHERS
Back on topic though haha, don't worry about your voice, there's loads of awesome song writers who have bad voices but can carry a song all the same cause it's from the heart, I mean look at Bob Dylan.
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Re: Some lyrics i've wrote(Original post by Robbob16)
Was there really any need? We all clearly knew what he meant.
(Original post by Zaddie Caso)
So true! Grammar is for understanding, not for humiliating people who don't want to read over there posts a few times before posting on a creative forum. *VLOG BROTHERS
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I couldn't have said it better myself.
LOL. Imagine if everybody thought like that. In a few years you wouldn't be able to understand anyone!
Come on, I'm Portuguese and I know it. It can't be that hard
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That's not necessarily true, I mean wrote may not be a word but it's clear what its meaning is. Like worser, it's not a word but it makes sense. This is how new words are formed and languages evolve, you could say this guy is a revolutionary linguistic thinker as well as a decent lyricist.(Original post by katyness)
LOL. Imagine if everybody thought like that. In a few years you wouldn't be able to understand anyone!
Come on, I'm Portuguese and I know it. It can't be that hard
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Re: Some lyrics i've wroteI know they're singers like Axel Rose and Mick Jagger who aren't technical great singers, but still write and perform great rock songs.(Original post by Robbob16)
I couldn't have said it better myself.
Back on topic though haha, don't worry about your voice, there's loads of awesome song writers who have bad voices but can carry a song all the same cause it's from the heart, I mean look at Bob Dylan.
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I've started another set of lyrics now. Its amazing on how you notice words and sayings when you start to write. -
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Re: Some lyrics i've wrote(Original post by Robbob16)
That's not necessarily true, I mean wrote may not be a word but it's clear what its meaning is. Like worser, it's not a word but it makes sense. This is how new words are formed and languages evolve, you could say this guy is a revolutionary linguistic thinker as well as a decent lyricist.
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No. His lyrics may be good but that simply wasn't the right word.
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Re: Some lyrics i've wroteThis is a casual forum, we aren't displaying how the English language is generally or the extent of everybody's linguistic ability.(Original post by katyness)
LOL. Imagine if everybody thought like that. In a few years you wouldn't be able to understand anyone!
Come on, I'm Portuguese and I know it. It can't be that hard
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Fight? I was trying to lighten the mood a bit haha(Original post by katyness)
No. His lyrics may be good but that simply wasn't the right word.
I'm not having this fight -.-
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