[Coke1]

(Original post by alj123)
It's about quality not quantity, clichéd, I know


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2 and a half pages is more than enough. That is how much I wrote.

Come on we had 45 minutes for the first question. Including reading through the poem again, planning, and actually getting down to writing it.

So when you think about it, 2 and a half pages is a lot for that amount of time. The examiner understands we are under a big time limit. Honestly, you will be fine.

For my controlled assessment which I had FOUR hours for, I wrote about 6 pages and got an A*.

[Lizy]

(Original post by jwf13)
Compare the way the authour presents relationships using language to present relationships in Praise Song for my Mother and one other poem from relationships. It wasn't exactly that, but that was the idea

Also, does anyone know for the questions that ask about language do you need to talk about structure and form, and will you lose marks if you don't? Thanks :-)

Thanks! I completely forgot:O and you don't have to talk about them all..because in the mark scheme it states:
Analyses language AND/OR structure AND/OR form

So if you do just one TOTALLY fine

[Shakz]

(Original post by LilJoh)
I did the second one with Clown Punk. Clown punk wasn't really about power but i tried to make lots of connections which did you chose?

Yeah your right, clown punk isn't really about power. I chose the river god,,,they are very similar because they aren't modern and they both have power.

[sophieking]

(Original post by flyhigh99)
I mostly associated negative feelings in quickdraw and positive feelings with hour,
so intense love
with intense pain,
i remember writing (really messily) that how hour was the beginning and quickdraw in the end,

but personally i felt like i rambled too much on language and structure!
and i even compared language techniques but i still stayed with the question about "strong feelings"
so constantly i put this show ... feelings

i said vulnerability in quick draw (power imbalance) whilst in hour it was equal,

I can't remember much now :/

I see, I also basically talked about negative and positive feelings.
Ahh really? I felt like I hadnt written about structure enough so I tried to add stuff in anywhere possible so hopefully that should be alright..
I can't remember much either! haha

[steviep14]

For the Unseen, I came out with some really weird points:

Each line is off different lengths which could have multiple connotations:
1) - Imitating the sound of the siren rising and falling
2) - Different Line Lengths could be showing the irregularity of war and how it is never the same
3) - (Very Ambiguous) - Different Line Length representing the fact every child is affected differently by War..

"Ripped Open" - I mentioned the affect on the child's ears but then went on to say it could be representing families being ripped apart during War...

Also wrote about innocence and potential homelessness and that it isn't how a child should live.

[Shakz]

(Original post by jackkme)
i seemed to of wrote different from everyonelse too, i kept mentioning how there wasnt a rhyme scheme nor a pattern and this is because it creates uncertainty with the poem, just like a war, you never know whats gunna' happen

There was one major point:
Did you say that there was hardly any pauses which suggested that war was horrific ....and also the variation of short and long sentences shows the sounds of thunder?

[ArtisticFlair]

(Original post by jackkme)
AO2
explain how language, structure and form contribute to writers’ presentation of ideas,
themes and settings

Unit 2 Mark Scheme, January 2012: 6.3 evaluation of writers’ uses of language and/or structure and/or form and effects on readers

[Shakz]

okk so everyone iz baffled about there exam...dont worry- WHATS DONE IS DONE!! No poiiint now

[flyhigh99]

Hopefully we've done well!

[alj123]

(Original post by Madzia)
i did Mametz Wood with The Falling Leaves and i wrote only 2 and 1/2 pages is that okey for higher tier ? i have a feeling that i failed this one !!!

That should be fine!
My teacher says aim for a side per 15 minutes, so, including the time looking for quotes, you will have written sufficient


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[holly12345]

(Original post by alj123)
No haha
I thought it was a good one to compare to be honest, how much did you write for part a?


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Urmm 3 pages I think :L You??

[bobbricks]

If you write 3 or more pages, does that mean you've gone into enough depth for an A/A*?

[Coke1]

GUYS, we had 45 minutes! I am sure with a page you could probably get an A* if you were analysing well enough.....

[Revision-]

(Original post by Tweaky)
I did Mametz wood with Belfast confetti - for the effects questions.

how did people find the unseen? I thought it was really easy compared to ones we've done in class and mocks?

woo thought I was the only one who compared them lol!

[Smarticus]

(Original post by multiplexing-gamer)
No, I twisted Bayonet Charge to show Hughs's is also showing bravery. The soldier was "sweating from the centre of the chest" where the heart is, the soldier's are being praised for for their bravery and they're truely patriotic as their heart is sweating. Regardless of their mediocre training and hapharzardness shown through the emjambement they carry on, showing nationlistic qualities,

I dont think it matters what you write as it's a personal interpretation. Also, some people also did these poems on here!

Same I also manipulated my poem next to of course god America I by saying the bravery of the soldiers are seen as bad because of their patriotic love


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[Smarticus]

(Original post by bobbricks)
If you write 3 or more pages, does that mean you've gone into enough depth for an A/A*?

You could do even 1 and a half pages, if you answer the question well enough.


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[meeow]

(Original post by Jalhuligan)
I did ozymandias to the river god as well, found it easy how they both have/had power over people, how they dominated them. I also picked up on the 'king of kings' in ozy and made a religious reference which linked nicely to the river god and how they both have god like 'power'? I also said how they use their power to rule over humans by creating more power, comparing it to our society and how those buissnesses with CEO's employ people to build huge sky scrapers (compared to how huge the great statue was) I referred to this as the deeper meaning?

The unseen poem I picked up on emotive language, imagery, loss of innocence and dreams/nightmares?

What do you guys think?
Sorry it's so long haha

Yeah, i talked about power over people but said that their structures contrast showing how Ozy lost his power (short lines, quick end to his rule) but the river god's is eternal, as his lines flow with enjambent showing an unstoppable flow
Your points are good, wish i'd thought of them! I also said how ozymandias has an almost sonnet structure shows how he refuses to be defined etc. so is powerful.
For unseen i said basically what you did

[LilJoh]

(Original post by Shakz)
Yeah your right, clown punk isn't really about power. I chose the river god,,,they are very similar because they aren't modern and they both have power.

I know! I'm so stupid sometimes! I still managed to make quite a few (desperate) connections and when I told my teacher about them she said they were good. I just hope it will be enough to get an A*! I kind of doubt that now

[zezima]

(Original post by holly12345)
For the Unseen I wrote some of these points:
The fact they were woken from the 'silk' of sleep could show that sleep was rare and cherished to them, so maybe they were used to going to the shelter and waking.
There was lots of space imagery which would show the bigger picture of war and how big the situation was.
The fact that the giant was playing bowls could show that they're remembering their father maybe, as bowls is/was a common sport for men. Also, because the word 'giant' is used it could link to something bigger controlling the situation, maybe God, which could show religious imagery.

I wrote more but I can't remember anything else :')!
What sort of grade are points like this (I explored them a lot more than this obviously!:L)

i really liked the religious imagery there, that is very good point, i wish that point could have came up to me in the exam! i think as long as you related to the question you would be fine.. well i wrote how the word 'playing bowl' is ironic because it is describing 'dust bowl' which was used in the war, which effected the children. in addition, the verb 'playing' shows how the children have lost their playful childhood because of this war. also, the verb 'playing' allows the reader to think about their childhood and sympathies with these children who have lost this necessity of childhood in the war.

[Adriennet]

i was soo tempted to compare nettles in parts with the unseen. cos i kept writing about how the adults try protect the children because they are so innocent believing in stories as they cant understand nature with thunder and how they told it was a storm but they kept repeating 'they knew'. Also they both were written in one verse and it felt like i was repeating myself as i wrote about the structure in the last one but i think i included other points too. i wrote their was no rhythm and rhyme which can show how serious it is, how honest it is because there is no deliberate or forced lexical choice to fit a scheme and having rhyme can make the tone lighter which will take away the seriousness and the depth of emotion there is. then i summarised with it affected the children badly and explained why to make sure it went back to the question but god i wrote crap. I really hope i did well, it's only 35% of the lit but i did well in the mocks and im hoping to do it for A level. fingers crossed!