[CyclopsRock]

I had a cat
It died.
I had a dog
It survived.
A had a girl
She's alive
In my basement
She's trying to hide.
I come after her
With a gun.
Soon she'll be eating
My cum.
My name is big Danny G
I am so pleased
To meet thee.

[SoNottingH]

I had a thread
It died on its arse.

[CyclopsRock]

Crippling criticism.

[SoNottingH]

(Original post by CyclopsRock)
Crippling criticism.

LOL, yes!

You sound a bit wierd.

[CyclopsRock]

I am creatively challenged, I'm trying to get across my meaning and my point.

This may be used in my trial.

[CyclopsRock]

Why can't I like my own post?

[Reale]

For what it is, it's simple and has a good structure. Not a masterpiece.

Although, it's a bit disgusting and disturbing, dontcha think?

[SoNottingH]

Do you think maybe you should hand yourself into the police, you know, to confess something....?

[xoxAngel_Kxox]

You are a charming young poet, aren't you?

[ForensicShoe]

Another student still drunk from the night before I see

[VannR]

A powerful piece of poetry, definitely emotive. The use of simple language and short sentences to convey such a dramatic message adds to this effect. There is a clear persona in this poem - the bad man who abuses a girl he has locked up in his basement. It is not common for a poem such a clear narrator as in this one.

I don't know if this is a masterpiece, but this is definitely a very interesting poem.

[I Like Turtles]

To be honest, I like it. I think it is creative exactly.

[VeniViciVidi]

I'm using this poem for when porn is down.

[SoNottingH]

(Original post by VeniViciVidi)
I'm using this poem for when porn is down.

Does it go down sometimes then? I thought webporn was always on.

Rape fantasies aren't generally considered fun though, esp. not by decent guys I know.

[Lizbut]

Some people get sectioned for less.

[buildalegohouse]

Dude. You're going places.
*coughs*

[the bear]

They should put this on the GCSE syllabus

[SoNottingH]

(Original post by the bear)
They should put this on the GCSE syllabus

We're already studying it in AS, in Criminology.