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  1. sammy-lou's Avatar
    1 27-05-2012  00:00
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    Lilies - a poem
    The doorbell rings:
    It’s him again.
    Stranger at my door:

    “Afraid they’ve sent more…”

    Burdened with Lilies,
    cards with sympathies.
    And the Living Room –dead-
    Parades flowers in vases, glass vases.
    Glass vases that you bought me, in Sweden.
    Pollen stains on the carpet uneven,
    Drops of yellow blood fall,
    please stop bleeding.

    Smile at me angel from your photo frame.
    Haunt me with whispers that I’m not to blame.
    I dreamt of you spreading your wings, flying.
    Earth was too small, so why are we crying?
    But still Lilies break me unwillingly,
    It kills to fill your vases with Lilies.
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  2. Ehsan007's Avatar
    2 29-05-2012  05:15
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    For some reason, I imagine Private Ryan's mother when she started crying about losing her 3 sons (Saving Private Ryan)... But what is this poem about?


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  3. sammy-lou's Avatar
    3 29-05-2012  09:51
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    (Original post by Ehsan007)
    For some reason, I imagine Private Ryan's mother when she started crying about losing her 3 sons (Saving Private Ryan)... But what is this poem about?


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    That's such a brilliant interpretation of it; I love that film and I almost prefer that to the original meaning I had in my mind while writing it!

    I was actually writing about a mother who lost her son (so you were right in that sense) while he was away travelling - I was thinking gap year for some reason.
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    4 29-05-2012  18:04
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    Well to be honest you can just delete your last post and just say that's what I meant haha! But then again you don't need to because it's very similar... Her son could be travelling to war! But really nice anyway!


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    5 29-05-2012  18:20
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    (Original post by Ehsan007)
    Well to be honest you can just delete your last post and just say that's what I meant haha! But then again you don't need to because it's very similar... Her son could be travelling to war! But really nice anyway!


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    Haha yeah, just take credit for that inspired interpretation Na, it is what it is, I'm happy enough at that

    Thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment!
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    6 29-05-2012  18:46
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    Haha... Fair enough... You're not evil! I've seen other poems posted around creative corner as well... How long have you been writing for?


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    7 29-05-2012  19:25
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    (Original post by Ehsan007)
    Haha... Fair enough... You're not evil! I've seen other poems posted around creative corner as well... How long have you been writing for?


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    Seriously writing, about 4 - 6 months. But I've been writing on and off for literally as long as I could write a coherent sentence down

    I just enjoy it so much more now, because I focus more on short stories and poetry rather than starting a multitude of epic novels that are doomed to fizzle out after the first chapter! haha.
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    8 30-05-2012  02:17
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    Hey, I can relate to that... I've also been writing since I could write a coherent sentence too... But I just wrote... Like my home works and such lol :P but it's good you've taken it seriously!

    And you could always go for an epic novel... Just have a REALLY good first chapter (like shows like Dexter or Game of Thrones... Which are on Tv but they too were books... At least game of thrones was) so then people are bound to carry on reading... Reading the very good first chapter and it finishing the book is like picking out a really nice flower and not smelling it! (I'm really not good with these stuff!)


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    9 30-05-2012  02:18
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    *Not finishing the book


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    10 30-05-2012  02:35
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    (Original post by Ehsan007)
    Hey, I can relate to that... I've also been writing since I could write a coherent sentence too... But I just wrote... Like my home works and such lol :P but it's good you've taken it seriously!

    And you could always go for an epic novel... Just have a REALLY good first chapter (like shows like Dexter or Game of Thrones... Which are on Tv but they too were books... At least game of thrones was) so then people are bound to carry on reading... Reading the very good first chapter and it finishing the book is like picking out a really nice flower and not smelling it! (I'm really not good with these stuff!)


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    Yeah, you're absolutely right. I think it's just the thought of "right, I'm going to sit down and write a book today(!)" that kills it for most writers. But, like you said, taking each chapter at a time seems to be important.

    A bit of shameful self-publicising here, but I post chapters on TSR of a story I'm writing called The Decider. Was originally meant to be a short story but I've just continued it - if you want to check it out it's on the creative forum. I'm sort of taking the approach that you are talking about I think!
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    11 30-05-2012  02:52
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    you know i really like that poem it's wonderful!
  12. sammy-lou's Avatar
    12 30-05-2012  02:56
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    (Original post by Sammy95)
    you know i really like that poem it's wonderful!
    Thank you lovely!
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    13 30-05-2012  03:02
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    your poems are pretty cool :yy:
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    14 30-05-2012  03:07
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    (Original post by sammy-lou)
    I just enjoy it so much more now, because I focus more on short stories and poetry rather than starting a multitude of epic novels that are doomed to fizzle out after the first chapter! haha.
    This has happened to me so many times that I think I've lost count You have so much energy and anticipation and ideas all bundled up at the start of it, and then by Chapter Three it's like 'aww, crap!' Writing novels is much more difficult than I ever imagined when I was little; I think I've only ever finished one!

    Anyway, sorry for going off on a rant there I love this poem - it's very poignant, for want of a better word. I've seen some of your other poems on here and all I can say is: don't stop writing! School kills so much creativity, so you have to keep it alive some way
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    15 30-05-2012  03:16
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    (Original post by sammy-lou)
    Thank you lovely!
    no problem! do you have any more poems?
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    16 30-05-2012  03:37
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    Re: Lilies - a poem
    (Original post by Skaði)
    This has happened to me so many times that I think I've lost count You have so much energy and anticipation and ideas all bundled up at the start of it, and then by Chapter Three it's like 'aww, crap!' Writing novels is much more difficult than I ever imagined when I was little; I think I've only ever finished one!

    Anyway, sorry for going off on a rant there I love this poem - it's very poignant, for want of a better word. I've seen some of your other poems on here and all I can say is: don't stop writing! School kills so much creativity, so you have to keep it alive some way
    Yes! It's so easy to get carried away with this amazing idea you think you've had only to realise 'awh shucks - this is going no where!' :P

    Aw thank you - I'm glad you like them! In all honesty, and at risk of sounding totally naff, I love posting my poetry on here because I always get genuine useful and kind feedback from everyone. I don't think you guys understand how much I appreciate it!




    (Original post by Sammy95)
    no problem! do you have any more poems?
    Oooh there's lots - I can post you a full comprehensive list of links if you want?! haha
  17. sammy-lou's Avatar
    17 30-05-2012  03:57
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    Last edited by sammy-lou; 30-05-2012 at 19:22.
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    18 30-05-2012  09:00
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  19. sammy-lou's Avatar
    19 30-05-2012  10:31
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    (Original post by Sammy95)
    thanks! i'll check them out when im free
    that's great thank you
  20. catherine12345's Avatar
    20 30-05-2012  11:43
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    I like it :') well done


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