What I noticed about your pencil work was the style you have going on would work really well with more definition. I was thinking maybe using ink or marker pen?
Maybe even trying some black paint with sponges and a skewer to pull the paint out into long lines?
I think it just looks like your line work isn't being shown off enough.
If you don't like the sound of any of this, perhaps a softer pencil? This will make your work more darker and contrast with the white of the paper.
Also, just experiment with different things, this helps developing artists. (it's helping me XD)
Last edited by LittleMissNoface; 14-11-2012 at 20:12.