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  1. ChloeBelle's Avatar
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    I would love some feedback on a story?
    Hello

    I'm sixteen, and I've been writing these things called fanfics since I was eleven. Dorky, I know. It's where you take a pre-existing TV show, novel, movie, play, cartoon etc. and write your own story based on the characters. I post mine on a website called fanfiction.net. Basically, I could really do with some reviews, and would be eternally grateful for any feedback (especially anything positive and encouraging, )

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    http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7684338/1/Little_Lady
    ^^ There's the link. It's based on Coronation Street but is COMPLETELY AU, so even non-fans will be able to understand it. Remember, I'm only a baby, so I'm nothing special yet :P To review on the site, you don't need an account, and as I said I will be very grateful for any feedback I receive on the site!

    Chlo x
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    Re: I would love some feedback on a story?
    I'm not a big reader of fanfiction myself, but I had a quick read through the post and you do have an obvious natural ability with words that doesn't come easily to everyone. So keep at it! I'd be interested to read anything else you write outside of fanfiction! (Not knocking it, just doesn't do much for me as I said :P )
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    Thank you so much!
    I've never really tried anything outside, though this story in particular is very AU and is quite unrelated to the original.
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    Not sure what AU means... please explain
  5. Above.The.Empyrean's Avatar
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    Re: I would love some feedback on a story?
    (Original post by the bear)
    Not sure what AU means... please explain
    I'd postulate "Anally undecided", but after a prompt browse, in FF it means "Alternative Universe". Albeit, the former seemed more apt. :rolleyes:
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    (Original post by Above.The.Empyrean)
    I'd postulate "Anally undecided", but after a prompt browse, in FF it means "Alternative Universe". Albeit, the former seemed more apt. :rolleyes:
    Thanks for that helpful exposition !!

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    Thanks for that helpful exposition !!


    Anything for the fraternal "AU". Oh, and I'm not conversing in the paradigms of Fan Fiction.
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    Lost completely.


    This was posted from The Student Room's iPhone/iPad App
  9. Above.The.Empyrean's Avatar
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    (Original post by ChloeBelle)
    Lost completely.


    This was posted from The Student Room's iPhone/iPad App
    Fanfaronade and supercilious penchants m'wench! :cool:
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    (Original post by Above.The.Empyrean)
    Fanfaronade and supercilious penchants m'wench! :cool:
    the poor girl is only sixteen :rolleyes:
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    Re: I would love some feedback on a story?
    (Original post by the bear)
    the poor girl is only sixteen :rolleyes:

    1 + 1 = 2. :rolleyes:



    Seems as if someone loathes Mathematics.
    Last edited by Above.The.Empyrean; 09-07-2012 at 16:17.
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    (Original post by Above.The.Empyrean)
    Fanfaronade and supercilious penchants m'wench! :cool:
    Pretentious git :rolleyes:
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    (Original post by Straight up G)
    Pretentious git :rolleyes:

    The world's a pretence. :rolleyes:
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