Original post by methewthomson
The passage describes Jane’s flight from Thornfiled in a grievous tone, evident from the very first word in the passages ‘Drearily’ which indicates that Jane was feeling immensely miserable. The fact that she did everything ‘mechanically’ means that Jane’s moral standard was very high [Does it? I would actually suggest the opposite, there's an implied reluctance]due to which she could not remain in Thornfield after knowing that Rochester had already got a wife. She did not need to think what she would do now; her mind already knew that she had to leave Thornfield.[How is this presented to you? Consider the 'list' style that follows, and how it displays this lack of thought you've mentioned]
She was devastated but nevertheless determined in her intention. Thus[Try to stay in academic form]she left Thornfield quite prepared for her journey, so that her ‘strength, sorely shaken of late’ would not ‘beak down.’ That she did everything ‘without one sound’ and shut the door ‘softly’ indicates that she actually wanted to leave Thornfiled without Rochester stopping her.[Very good] She knew that if Rochester were present, he would beg her to stay with him. She also had an idea that his misery when he saw her going would be unbearable to her and could perhaps even persuade her to stay in Thornfield.[Very good again. Consider what this might indicate in terms of Jane's character/status]
Jane’s heart-wrenching [If you say it's heart wrenching, you have to say why] flight is contested [Did you mean contrasted?]with the ‘Dim dawn’ that ‘glittered in the yard.’ Whereas the view of dim dawn is soothing to the senses, Jane’s flight is portrayed as its the complete opposite: saddening and agonizing. The dim dawn also presents the general idea of a birth of a new day. This appears in stark contrast to Jane’s leaving Thornfield, which, metaphorically speaking would be tantamount to the death of Jane and Rochester’s love. These contrasting points emphasize the disturbing nature of her flight. [Worth saying more on this, perhaps what exactly is disturbing? Such as a feeling of it being unnatural.]
The second paragraph of the passage focuses on Jane’s thoughts and actions immediately after getting out of Thornfield. She took that road about which she had often ‘wondered where it led.’ The road symbolizes new circumstances and new opportunities which Jane is to face later in the novel when she would meet her cousins and come to know of her uncle’s will.[Why would the author choose to foreshadow events? Consider this in terms of conventions of Tragedy]
The paradoxical description of her past as ‘heavenly sweet’ and ‘deadly sad’ and its metaphorical description as a page whose even one line ‘would dissolve’ her ‘courage and break down’ her ‘energy’ depicts the tragic nature of her past which had fist given her the experience of profound love but had afterwards revealed the evil element in it. Her future is presented as the ruined place which remains after a flood. This simile signified that her future without Rochester would be terrifying and gloomy.[You could stylistically link this very good point to your past points by pointing out the repeated imagery of nature/weather, which would also flow nicely to the next point]
Again the contrasting presentation of the natural world’s beauty as opposed to Jane’s desolate condition serves to emphasize how painful and depressing her flight was. However, she did not look at the morning scene since she knew that the beautiful morning was contradictory to her inner condition which was weak and tense. The fact that she imagined Rochester expecting her back and that she also ‘longed to be his’ makes her flight look even more heartrending, keeping in mind that they both loved each other yet she had had to distance herself from him. Her longing for him is underpinned by her panting ‘to return’ and the thought that ‘it was not too late.’ The weakening in her determination was partly due to her own longing and partly due to the fear of ‘the bitter pang of bereavement’ he would feel at the revelation of her flight. This fear is metaphorically described as ‘a barbed arrowhead’ tearing though her. This metaphor indicates the extremely sharp nature of the angst she was experiencing, having left Rochester in Thornfield.[Worth mentioning that it has implications of being 'inflicted' rather than natural like the beauty around her]
The faithfulness of birds to one another compels Jane to contemplate her own loyalty to Rochester through the rhetorical question ‘What was I?’ Though she knew that leaving Thornfield and Rochester was the morally right thing to do, she felt guilty about having left her ‘master.’ Her feeling of guilt leaves the reader in no doubt regarding her extreme faithfulness to Rochester.[Whilst again contrasting with natural imagery]
Her immense suffering is underscored when she falls to the ground and both fears and hopes to die right there. The fear stems from the thought of departing form that world where she could, by some coincidence, still meet Rochester; the hope arose from the unbearable pain she was facing after leaving Rochester, thinking how much hurt he must be when he would learn of her flight.
Her progressively getting up from the ground and collecting her shattered determination very effectively shows her confused state of mind which had resulted form the prospect of parting form the only person she truly loved in her life. First she had left the house ‘mechanically.’ However, when she vividly imagined his dejected condition at her loss, she wanted to return to him immediately. But very soon she decided again to turn a deaf ear to her heart and instead listen entirely to her logic and her principles.[What implications does this have with the natural imagery in the passage?]
She sat in the coach because the coach was going to ‘a place a long way off.’ It means that she wanted to get as much away from Rochester as she possibly could in order to forget his memories and the related grief. Her condition, due to the enormous sorrow and perhaps also owing to the fall she had faced earlier, was probably very weak, both physically and psychologically, which the coach driver must have pitied, for he agreed to twenty shillings instead of the thirty he had originally demanded. Thus her condition indeed seems very deplorable.[What is this aimed at? Perhaps building an empathic response in the reader for Jane and making it clear she is the victim?]
In the last paragraph, which seems to be the most moving of all, Jane’s directly addressing the reader as ‘Gentle reader’ and her wishes that the reader ‘may never feel what’ she then felt highlights the enormity of her affliction. It indicates that her grief had increased so much that, unable to contain it, she was compelled to directly address the reader. [Very good]This feeling of Jane’s helplessness engages the reader’s sympathy the most. Her good wishes for the ‘Gentle reader’ actually hint at the suffering that she was undergoing due to the guilt of hurting Rochester whom she loved with all her heart.'}