AQA A2 HISTORY: The Triumph of Elizabeth, 1547-1603 Offical Thread. 2nd June 2014.

hey was wondering if anyone knew what structurally was necessary to get an A* -or near full marks- in this exam (as really need it to pull up my AS ) is there a sort of set way to do a 'level 5' conclusion?
thanks guys!

Just wondering if you people would mind suggesting improvements for my essay-If you can read my writing lol

"The rebellions in the reigns of Edward VI and Mary I were mainly religious in origin" assess the validity of this view



How could I improve do you think?

The grade my teacher gave:


Do you think this is accurate?


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Not so sure about the conclusion but for an A* paragraph the structure I've been taught is:

Topic sentence and link to previous paragraph
Explanation
Synoptic link
Evidence
Historian's interpretation
(Evaluation + evidence for the other side if this paragraph is arguing against your view)
Link back to question

What do mean by synoptic link?


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How would we make a synoptic link? Do you mean just linking a new paragraph to the previous paragraph?

No, my teacher would grade that a C. 24/45 or perhaps 27/45. I'm not sure, i may ask her. But she definitely would not give that even close to an A, no offense. My teacher might be too harsh of a marker though. I struggle to get over 30 with my teacher and my essays are usually more well written.

By synoptic link I mean linking the point you're making in that paragraph to a time period outside the immediate demands of the question e.g. in an essay about Elizabeth, if you were discussing her religious reforms you could make a comparison to Edward's or Mary's (e.g. how Elizabeth's 39 Articles were based on Edward's 42 Articles)

Hmm.

i thought that that would just be conceptual knowledge

i thought that synoptic it's meant making links between different areas. If you were talking about the parliaments in the final years for example, you would bring up the war with Spain (link to foreign policy) and how parliament were pissed at E using monopolies which E needed to pay for the war against Spain

i must be wrong

My teacher seems to thing foreign policy in relation to France is a strong contender, as it's never come up and there's so much to talk about.
She also said religion is a possibility, more spefically MQS - which would be ideal as this allows you to talk about internal problems, foreign policy with France and Scotland and MQS herself. Really hoping government doesn't come up, it's so dull compared to everything else.
Also, I trust her judgement as she successfully predicted both my AS exams for Russia

I write about 3 and a half. What about you?


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I am gonna not do well in this.

I posted an essay earlier and I would be really grateful for constructive criticism

If you would like to offer some help but don't want to have to deal with my hand writing, I could write the essay up onto TSR if you thought that would make it easier-let me know if you want this


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