Quite good.
They were a couple of shots which could have been framed better, and you could have cut it down further as it seemed to stall. Also the title was too long, and it would have looked better against a black background. but I do like the font.
Also, in your intro rather than use a fade, and straight cut would have been better. At the 01:02 point, your edit jumps.
In terms of narrative, he doesn't really need as her permission to sit down, and we don't see her holding the iPod see the shot after you cut looks rather odd. I like the shoulder shot, but in the next shot, you should have gone closer into the writing. If you're going to use a close up, always make sure there's a big difference in terms of distance with the previous shot.
It would have been fun if you added an antagonist (someone better looking to steal her off him), because you're setting it up as though she likes him.
Don't be afraid to go closer in on her face.
Invest in a better tripod, as it was too shakey, and always use manual focus.
Pretty good overall.