I've written a personal statement for next year, hoping to study Japanese Studies at University! I wanted to catch the readers attention in the opening by saying something kinda funny but also genuine. But I don't know if my opening is just completely stupid and a bad idea! I know that you should lay low on the jokes, but I wanted a light one to get the ball rolling.
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Let me know if you think this is a bad move, or if you think it's fine and they'll enjoy it. Maybe give me suggestions on how to alter it too if you think it's necessary.