Prefect Application URGENT!

My prefect application needs to be submitted tomorrow and I was wondering if anyone could check it quickly, it would be such a great help!

Dear Ms -------- ,
I am writing to you to convey my interest for the position as a prefect in Year 11. Throughout my time here so far, I feel that the school has provided me with so much and I would love the chance to contribute back to the school. I believe that I have developed a variety of skills, as well as my confidence, over the past four years and I really think that the role of a prefect will allow me to really develop these skills further, whilst gaining some new skills.
When I joined the school, I was quite shy and wasn’t very confident in myself, but I feel as I have gone through the years at school I have really developed my self-confidence and tried new things that I wouldn’t have when I joined. I feel that my willingness to participate in school activities would help me suit the role of a prefect, as I am an enthusiastic person. I have really enjoyed helping out during events like Open Evening, Parent’s Evening and Curriculum Evening, as I feel that there’s something good that comes with helping someone else. Another role that I have really enjoyed taking on this year was being a Sound Technician for assemblies, as not only did I gain a new skill but it was also nice to experience the variety of roles that people can take on.
Throughout my time here, I have kept a high standard of uniform, attendance and punctuality, by never receiving a uniform slip, late slip or detention, which I believe makes me a good role model for the rest of the school. I feel like I have a good track record of contribution to the school. In Year 8, I was a Form Captain and in Year 9, I got the opportunity to become a Buddy, which involved helping new students settle in the school. I really enjoyed mentoring the younger students, especially when I got the chance to help some of them read, and felt that I had achieved something at the end of this. I also had the chance to take part in the Eco-Committee, and I am really passionate about the work they do to help improve our school environment, as well as locally. I am also currently taking part in the Duke of Edinburgh Scheme, where I have got the chance to volunteer at the Brownies that I used to attend and have gained my Bronze Leadership Award. I am currently working on a Climate Change project for my Silver Leadership Award, which will help to raise awareness about the issues.
I currently attend piano classes, dance classes, the School Magazine and Badminton Club weekly. Outside of school, I have got the chance to be a representative on my local community panel and helped out at several different work places, where I have matured my skills dramatically.
One of the main experiences that I have loved during my time at ---------------has been being a representative on the School Council for the past two years. This year I was elected to be the Chair of the School Council, and whilst I have faced some challenges with this role, I have really developed my skills in terms of organisation, leadership and creativity. I am always willing to learn and improve. I love the fact that we are able to organise events, like the Senior Citizens Party and Red Nose Day, that not only help improve the school but our wider community. I feel like this is a good example of my commitment and shows that I can work with others, as well as independently.
I really appreciate the idea that small actions can make large impacts, and I feel like this is something I strive towards in life. I would like to be someone that makes an impact on people’s lives and I feel like becoming a prefect, although it is only a small step, will help me to do this.
Thank you greatly for taking the time to read my application.
Yours sincerely,

Sarina Shah