proof read my cv anyone please (image)

Sorry, I actually thought you were a troll. I don't understand why only my version is blacked out in the PDF form. Must have done something weird with it.

Can someone check this new version and tell me if it has the blacked out parts?

Yeah that version is blacked out

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I'm a little confused about how you've laid out your qualifications. You start with a section saying what you have achieved, and an A* in ICT is listed there. You then have a section for what you will achieve later this year. In this section there is a mix of GCSE and BTEC qualifications. So are you studying GCSE and BTEC at your sports college right now? You should also make it clear that these grades are predictions if you have yet to achieve them.

well i am in year 11 so i finished the ict and the teachers said they received the qualifications so i have got A* finished and the rest is below is predicted
but someone suggested not to use

Predicted grades
to look more dominant in the cv as i am very confident of achieving those grades.

But your employer will not be pleased if they think they are hiring someone with high grades and then you actually come out with lower.

Instead of Predicted, try Expected?

have to be selfish here,
well the chance of me being turned because of getting lower grades,
this grade are the grades my teachers predicted me during the parent evenings and looking at the effort i put it i think i will be able to a get them easily,

I find the current format of your CV quite confusing, but that might be because of the way it's been uploaded and the arrows. Honestly, in order to show off your key skills and experience I would just start again from scratch.

To start with, I would keep your personal profile - like the rest of your CV - short and concise. A lot of the information you included in there could be used in a cover letter instead. In your cover letter, you can demonstrate a bit of awareness about the job you're applying to and make your skills relevant, e.g. "I understand that your company ... and my experience in/passion for ... would help me to adapt to this". Don't speak for your previous employers as they'll find that information out when they contact them for a reference. Also, don't say that you love working in a team as well as independently, as it's not only expected, but is a bit of a cliche.

Instead, you want to aim for a couple of sentences for your personal profile that sum you up. Here's a couple of examples I found online...

"A highly motivated and hardworking individual, who has recently completed their A-Levels, achieving excellent grades in both Maths and Science. Seeking an apprenticeship in the engineering industry to build upon a keen scientific interest and start a career as a maintenance engineer. Eventual career goal is to become a fully-qualified and experienced maintenance or electrical engineer, with the longer-term aspiration of moving into project management." (source)

"I am a college leaver who is looking for an apprenticeship in business administration. I have good IT skills including word processing, email and desk top publishing, and can create databases and spreadsheets. I am willing to work hard, gain qualifications and build on the general office skills developed through my work experience." (source)

"An adaptable and responsible graduate seeking an entry-level position in public relations which will utilise the organisational and communication skills developed through my involvement with Kent Rag and promotional work during vacations." (source)

And if it helps, although I don't consider my own CV to be the gold standard by any means, here's mine:

"Recent honours graduate with valuable mentoring and personal experience with individuals who have specialised needs. Qualifications include chartered membership with the BPS and the ability to drive. Currently seeking a career within psychology."

I was applying for a learning support assistant role at a specialist college. I didn't specify the course because it's listed later, but I felt the BPS membership was important to include early on as it's a required membership for practising psychologists and shows that I'm commited to this area. If you have a full driving license then I was told by my careers advisor at uni that you should always include it in either your personal profile or 'qualifications' section, as it's something that a lot of people won't have.

Moving on...

Have your education/qualification section next. I prefer it to be labelled 'qualifications' as it means you can list all of your relevant qualifications in one place without needing a separate section for things like first aid etc. Start with your most recent qualification at the top.

For example:
Sept 2013 - June 2015------XYZ Specialist Sports College (GCSE)
---------------------------------A*

----------------------------------XYZ School (Predicted GCSEs)
---------------------------------(your grades as listed in current CV)

----------------------------------XYZ School (BTEC)
---------------------------------(listed grades)

2014---------------------------ASDAN
---------------------------------Level 2 ...etc

Then you want your 'relevant experience' section below this. Again, I prefer 'relevant' to 'work' experience because it opens it up to voluntary and other kinds of experience. I think if there's any way that you can expand on your experience as a computer administrative then that would be helpful. Even something like "...and developing the current documents to a better standard, which I did by..."

I think that as you don't have a lot of work experience, it's fine to also have a 'key skills' section, but you need to expand on the bullet points you've already given. Where do you use HTML? How did you learn it? What kind of videos do you make, what software do you use to edit them? You're familiar with Microsoft Office - does that include Excel? Are you familiar with spreadsheets? What aspects of IT do you use every day? How would being able to type fast help you in the apprenticeship?

Finally, I would remove the 'awards' section as there's nothing in there that would really be relevant to an apprenticeship in IT.

Hope this was useful!

And you say things like "I have over 600 fans on Facebook". So what? Why would your future emloyer care about this at all? How does it help you do the job? If your potential employer thinks you could be a distraction to those around you, they will not hire you.

This. The only time a statement like this could be useful is if you were going for a PR or Marketing position, and you had over 6,000, not 600.