proof read please, How does this read.

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Read it out loud in front of a friend or a family member. If you trip over what you are reading, or if your listener sniggers or grimaces, you've got it wrong.

I am a highly self-motivated and hard-working individual. For example, I am teaching myself programing using online sources. This is my ambition to solve problems involving technology.

I am really passionate to start from a blank screen of a phone and build something really amazing that is beyond what I thought of my capabilities, for start I am teaching myself how to make apps using kivy.

Programming comes with a lot of problems but I see problems as an opportunity to me. Recently I struggled with a part of coding where something was missing after multiple retries and researching the web about similar problems and how to tackle it, it have taught me many things as how simple the mistakes was and I have to focus deeper when coding as it is very sensitive of what we input.

I produced videos in collaboration with a small team of my friends for social media.

I am Fluent in Persian and Urdu.



Something about this last 2 small paragraphs doesnt look right to me.

I am a highly self-motivated and hard-working individual. For example, I am teaching myself programing using online sources. This is my ambition (My ambition is to) solve problems involving(that involve) technology.

I am really passionate to start(about starting) from a blank screen of a phone, to build something really(Sounds informal, so does the word amazing) amazing that is beyond what I thought of(Take out) my capabilities, for start I am('Such as' would be better) teaching myself how to make apps using kivy.

Programming comes with a lot of problems but I see problems(Try not to repeat the word problem) as an opportunity to me. Recently I struggled with a part of coding whereby something was missing after multiple retries and researching the web about similar problems and how to tackle it, it have(has) taught me many things as(about, or such as) how simple the mistakes was(were) and I have had to focus deeper(This word sounds slightly misleading, perhaps say think in more detail concerning..?)when coding as it is very sensitive of input.(This sentence could be broken up into shorter ones, perhaps.)

I produced videos in collaboration with a small team of my friends for social media.

I am Fluent in Persian and Urdu.

The last two sentences seem somewhat random and abrupt. Try developing those points more?



Something about this last 2 small paragraphs doesnt look right to me.

come on be real.

Not sure whether you wanted this kind of feedback, but I thought I would anyway

Thats is really great.

I really appreciate your time.

Well that's how the professionals do it, but you can keep on being a muppet all over the internet if you want

Not if your from another country and your family speaks fluent english. Thats why my grammar is week and its my second language when i can speak another 2 languages.