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A poem I wrote...

it's 12:24 and you can't breathe,
When you think of what you won't achieve.
The incessant pounding in your head,
reveals the monster on the bed.
When your nails scratch your pale flesh,
porcelain skin turns blood raw fresh.

the moon's soft glow turns blue eyes grey,
You know they divert to hide your shame.

The lack of air to your lungs is tight,
A tenseness, knock-on state of mind.
But you know the morning sun will rise,
And on will come your day's disguise.

Reply 1

PrincessBO$$

Great poem
But it is very deep and quite distrubing it makes me worried about you :redface:

Reply 2

Legendary Quest

Still 37 days until results day

Reply 3

Anonymous #1

Original post by PrincessBO$$

Great poem
But it is very deep and quite distrubing it makes me worried about you :redface:

Haha oh. I didn't think of that

Reply 4

Anonymous #1

Original post by Legendary Quest

Still 37 days until results day

Me thinking of what I won't achieve !!

Reply 5

PrincessBO$$

Original post by Legendary Quest

Still 37 days until results day

Why u counting down :redface:

its 47 for GCSE :frown:

Reply 6

Legendary Quest

Original post by Anonymous

Me thinking of what I won't achieve !!

And on results day you'll probably write a poem about all the A*s you achieve :tongue:

It's a lovely poem. :h:

Original post by PrincessBO$$

Why u counting down :redface:

its 47 for GCSE :frown:

Me? Counting down? Never...

:u:

Reply 7

Anonymous #1

Reading this back I seem like a very messed up person. (I'm fine)

Bump

Deep.

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Reply 10

Wolfram Alpha

A well written poem. Nice read. Thanks for sharing.

Reply 11

perspectives

Original post by Wolfram Alpha

A well written poem. Nice read. Thanks for sharing.

Thank you!

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Reply 12

Wolfram Alpha

Original post by perspectives

Thank you!

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Ahh...what made you reveal your identity?
Or was it unintentional?

Reply 13

perspectives

Original post by Wolfram Alpha

Ahh...what made you reveal your identity?
Or was it unintentional?

It was an accident -.- but oh well.

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Reply 14

champ_mc99

I remember for my GCSE Romeo and Juliet English Lit coursework I did some really extreme analysing.

One of them was about Romeo constantly talking about the sun whenever he was flirting with Juliet. I accused him of straying away from the boundaries of courtly love in Christian tradition and said he knew this and hence was feeling guilty.

Back in the olden times before around 500 AD people used to worship the sun. I said since Romeo wanted to remove this guilt, he wanted to flee away from the God of Christianity because of his sins and started imitating these sun worshippers.

My teacher must have thought I was crazy but I still got an A* for the essay. :biggrin:

Reply 15

Anonymous #1

Original post by champ_mc99

ok but this is me for every essay I over analyse everything. I did Romeo and Juliet too and loved it, think I made similar points to yours regarding Christian tradition.

Reply 16

champ_mc99

Original post by Anonymous

ok but this is me for every essay I over analyse everything. I did Romeo and Juliet too and loved it, think I made similar points to yours regarding Christian tradition.