Physics personal statement structure critique

Hi, finished writing the first draft of my personal statement. Just got the general structure down, there is still a lot of refinement to go. Just gonna post what I've spoke about in each paragraph to give a fair idea of my PS structure:

Paragraph 1
I open with a little explanation of what Physics is to me, and how its been an interest throughout my life. I name two books I read, and I talk about a chapter that particularly interested me in one of the books.

Paragraph 2
I talk about my work experience placement at Durham University - what I did, and also a talk I attended by a NASA scientist that was there. I then go onto talk about another lecture I attended by the first Briton in space.

Paragraph 3
I say a little about a summer school I did at the University of York, and what I learnt about during a physics lecture whilst there. I then go onto talk about a summer school I did at Newcastle University, and what I did in a practical physics session there. I conclude this paragraph with a sentence on how doing these summer schools have been beneficial in choosing Physics as a degree.

Paragraph 4
I talk about how I enjoy travelling and a recent school trip to a country in Africa, which involved fundraising before the trip. I then talk about what skills I have developed from this particular trip and also skills developed from travelling in general. I conclude with how these skills combined with other named skills make me the right fit for a university Physics degree.


How is the structure of my personal statement? What things should I add, remove, or reshuffle? Thanks.