AS Geog Exam Question

Are you referring to AS Geograpgy or A2?

Could someone who's good at Geography tell me if this answer is detailed enough as it has to be handed in for tomorrow. I still think there's something I've missed out. Cheers!

a) Outline the consequences of rapid urbanisation within the LEDW (10)

New migrants cannot afford housing in LEDW cities which means they have to build their own. These are known as Shanty towns, favelas or squatter settlements. These areas can become very overcrowded with residents which can increase the risk of spreading of diseases such as Aids.
In cities such as Sau Paulo for example, many people are unemployed; the ones which are work in factories as these are located to the periphery or the urban-fringe where these Brazilian favelas are usually located. Many of these very poor Shanty towns or favelas are situated in close proximities to the more upper-class areas of LEDW because the favelas become so expansive from the increasing number of new residents. Some of these residents will have no electricity or even tap water. The local authorities can do little to help them because the speed of urbanisation is greater than the speed of which they can resolve these problems.
Environmental pollution is also another major consequence from factories and vehicles and can cause major health risks. The huge amount of waste that is deposited also relates back to the risk of spreading diseases.
There are however, some benefits of urbanisation in the LEDW. The city has many services to offer such as education and training, this will help to create a better skilled workforce in the future. The economy will also benefit from the increase in employees and the government is also able to help people more in urban areas rather than rural areas.