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Medical Biochemistry Personal Statement

My fascination with Science developed at a young age owing to the fact that both my parents and brother are employed in the medical industry

Both my parents are registered nurses and my brother, a biomedical scientist. But it was my brother's profession that most enthral me, thus enthused me in his area of expertise. Hence, I am encouraged to follow my brother's footsteps and resolve to take Medical Biochemistry

Since coming here in England in 2001, I became more proficient in the use of English language to communicate verbally with others. Although I was very well trained to use English language in verbal and written communication when I was still in the Philippines, being here in the United Kingdom gave me the opportunity to practice what I have learned

But, not only was I able to practice English language by studying here in England, I also got the chance to take 'A' levels in Chemistry and Maths which I confidently believe will help me in my chosen career

Also, I have taken AS Business Studies and Psychology as I feel it is important to have a wide understanding of the diverse behaviours and thoughts of people. This year, I have decided that I will re-sit some of the modules I have taken in AS Chemistry and Maths to make my qualification even higher. It is good to mention that I have achieved a grade of 'BB' for my General Certificate of Secondary Education (GCSE) double award sciences and a grade of 'A' for my Maths, which reinforced my aspiration to pursue the course

To broaden my horizon, I have indulged myself in other fields such as basic computer programming. Having my own computer facility and Internet access at home has not only allowed me to search for topics concerning Maths and Chemistry but also to develop my computer skills

My work experience in Career Town Centre as one of the administrative aides has enabled me to meet and work effectively with various people

And though I never had the chance to undergo any training regarding medical practice, I do believe that I would be able to cope with whatever challenges I will meet while pursuing the career I've chosen to obtain

I believe that my being practical and reasonable, as well as being punctual and organised will be advantageous in studying in the University. I also do believe that I am self-motivated, committed, patient and creative and have personally proven that fact very early in life when I taught myself how to play a guitar and master piano playing, thus proving that I love diversity as well. Though I am at times timid and quiet, I usually overcome my shyness when I learn more about the people I meet. But all in all, I know that with my qualities, beliefs and experiences, I am equipped to go through the university with flying colours.

Comments

General Comments:

The statement repeats itself several times, spends most of it's time going on about the applicants ability to speak English which is far from a unique selling point (although being bilingual is certainly worth a brief mention.) It also talks about grades which are covered elsewhere in the application, doesn't go into nearly enough scientific depth and ends with a cheesy cliche.

Comments on the statement:

It needs a lot of editing, punctuation isn't quite there and some of the phrases used are a bit odd. You need more scientific depth and expand on areas relating them to the subject. Say why certain things make you good for the course and why you enjoy them throughout.