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For a start, where would you be placing your evidence? I'm assuming this isn't an actual excerpt from an essay, as I see no quotes. Make sure you imbed your quotes.
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Ensure you focus on the question, it seems some of your response is just re-telling the story. Ask yourself why the author chooses to make that happen, rather than just saying it happens.
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Make it clear to the examiners that you know the characters are constructions of Ian McEwan. This is easily done, for example: Ian McEwan has Joe Rose's character have a rationalist attitude to ensure the reader perceives him as a reliable narrator. (I have no clue what the book is about, so that sentence may be utter rubbish)
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I have always been taught to structure my essays using PEEL: Point Evidence Explain Link. In your excerpt you are lacking any clear purpose, especially with your last sentence!
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Your sentence structure is a bit jumbled, I would try and make them more concise:
In Enduring Love, Joe Rose's character normally occupies a rationalist attitude, yet this seems to change during the library scene. His once consistent attitude is broken as he makes a misjudged decision. I'm not saying that sentence would be an A grade, as it's lacking everything I have mentioned above, but you could just work on making your points clearer.
I hope that helps. I'm not an expert but just telling from my previous experiences!
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For a start, where would you be placing your evidence? I'm assuming this isn't an actual excerpt from an essay, as I see no quotes. Make sure you imbed your quotes.
•
Ensure you focus on the question, it seems some of your response is just re-telling the story. Ask yourself why the author chooses to make that happen, rather than just saying it happens.
•
Make it clear to the examiners that you know the characters are constructions of Ian McEwan. This is easily done, for example: Ian McEwan has Joe Rose's character have a rationalist attitude to ensure the reader perceives him as a reliable narrator. (I have no clue what the book is about, so that sentence may be utter rubbish)
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I have always been taught to structure my essays using PEEL: Point Evidence Explain Link. In your excerpt you are lacking any clear purpose, especially with your last sentence!
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Your sentence structure is a bit jumbled, I would try and make them more concise:
In Enduring Love, Joe Rose's character normally occupies a rationalist attitude, yet this seems to change during the library scene. His once consistent attitude is broken as he makes a misjudged decision. I'm not saying that sentence would be an A grade, as it's lacking everything I have mentioned above, but you could just work on making your points clearer.
I hope that helps. I'm not an expert but just telling from my previous experiences!
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