Guys, I am currently doing the WJEC English syllabus and we had to write a descriptive writing about a market . so can you read my work and check it, please!
Red nosed and sanguine cheeked, the sea of people wait impatiently. The Lilliputian manager elbows his way through the crowd, casually making his way to the gate. The swarm of anxious crowd unites in silence as he turns the final click on the double padded lock. The door burst open and the overflowing crowds bustle and jostle, everyone eagerly vying and straining to see the latest offers.
As the people slowly scatter into different areas, enormous parties of business men make their way to the greasy spoon, hoping for a quick slap up breakfast. The aroma of pasties and welsh cake emits from the bakery. It tickles the taste buds of bystanders. As the first customer approaches; behind her, a tickle of people begins to stream. The indulgences are stack perfectly from one shelf to another, blanketing the diamond patterned tissues. Delicately handle by the skinny shop assistant which is clearly enjoying the challenge
Whilst business men pile into the bakery, women make their way to the Fishmongers and butchers, where banners of ‘half price’ and ‘buy one, get one free’ lines across the ceilings. It causes a tailing queue. Patiently waiting, the custumer clench their precious cash in their sweaty palms
As the market fills, the air hung thick and greasy. The distant clinks of coin, passed from one hand to another; the clanking of knives and roar of anticipating customers echoed from one corner to the next.
The cafeteria pulsates with screams and laughter. Infants can be heard crying, teenagers shriek and howl, absorbed in the sheer suffocating torridness from the morning sun, causing beads of sweat trickling down people’s head. The smell of the greasy, fatty burgers and sizzling bacon are overpowering.
The serpent of smoke drifts into the jewelry stall, mystifying the rings into grand jewels, causing women to stare helplessly, their eyes sparkle more than the diamonds embedded in the rings and necklaces. In a distance, a cacophony of noises fill the air, as fishmongers and butchers desperately pleading for attention.
Finally, as the crowds ceases from its peak, Old and young alike stretch tiredly, after a morning worth of shopping laden on their arms.
SO WHAT DO YOU THINK?
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