does this make sense? please help

Personally don't understand the point of what you are trying to say...sometimes fancy wording is unnecessary and you're better to use simple English and better structure to get your point across clearly! Good luck

Personally don't understand the point of what you are trying to say...sometimes fancy wording is unnecessary and you're better to use simple English and better structure to get your point across clearly! Good luck

It would only make sense if you explain why you think that medicine is a perfect manifestation of science. I kinda know what you are trying to say, but science is not just animal/human biology and chemistry; there are also physics, geology, plant biology etc. Many people, probably even the admissions tutor would disagree that medicine is a perfect manifestation of science.

thank you all for your replies what about "the perfect application of science" since it's science being put into practice?

What's 'perfect' about it?! I do not think this is phraseology reads as you intend it to.

'Application' is much better than 'manifestation' though.

thank you all for your replies what about "the perfect application of science" since it's science being put into practice?

I'd be careful about using perfect. In what sense do you mean it? If we're talking application of scientific concepts and techniques, medicine is pretty flawed really. Massive human element both from patients and doctors/nurses etc. Talk to any old school surgeon or nurse and they will have a list of things they do because "thats the way I've always done it", or "I just know it works". We do plenty of things that we know work but can't prove how or why they work.

That is probably a little beyond the point but it just reads as a little naive. Talking about it as a way of using science... great. Using terms such as perfect, not so much..