Hi! International applicant from Malaysia applying to Trinity (Oxford) here
I chose Eating Out by U.A. Fanthorpe and Picnic at Hanging Rock by Joan Lindsay, and talked about the portrayal of gratitude towards food. My essay was pretty simplistic to be honest and I had a messy conclusion. I felt like I didn’t back up my points well enough and I only had enough time for two main body paragraphs.
I can’t remember exactly how I wrote the essay but in the first body paragraph I talked about how both writers used juxtaposition. I talked about how Lindsay juxtaposed the nonchalant, casual attitudes of the picnickers with that of the ants, to whom food is associated with hard work and effort, talking about the connotations of “Heaven-sen crumbs” and “crystallized ginger” and how those highlighted the worth of food to the ants. I also talked about the use of oxymoronic language in “miniature Saharas”. To contrast the ants, I talked about the way the food eaten by the picnickers is described, as well as the way they ate their food (the verbs used) e.g. “helping herself lavishly to cream”. As for Eating Out, I talked about how Fanthorpe’s use of juxtaposition in the first two lines highlighted the poet’s gratitude towards their food, how they view dining out with their parents as an exciting adventure despite the fact that it is a routine to them, how their attitude towards food is directly related to the memories of their parents. I remember this paragraph being extremely long and I probably should’ve divided it into two.
In the second body paragraph, I compared and contrasted the use of the third-person POV in Picnic at Hanging Rock and the first-person voice in Eating Out. I talked about how the POV used by Lindsay connotes detachment, yet spreads the reader’s attention between the human beings and the animals, equally drawing the reader’s attention towards both differing attitudes towards food. For Eating Out, I talked about how the first person voice bears the connotations of intimacy, how it echoes the way dining out is something near and dear to the poet, as it is closely associated with fond memories of their parents.
I initially planned for a third main body paragraph focusing on the structure and form of both but I ran out of time so I just hastily wrote my conclusion, reiterating my main points and relating them back to my thesis statement.
Overall the test wasn’t a disaster but it definitely could’ve gone better. My essay ended up not being very in-depth analysis-wise but what’s done is done I guess, no point moping about it now haha