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Thats a good valid point. However there was an exclamatory to emphasis he was controlling and demanding.

Thanks and yeah I completely agree... wish I’d added that in.

I ran out of time most people in my school said it was good but i didnt write enough for q5 and q2 and 3 were too short one paragraph

Thanks and yeah I completely agree... wish I’d added that in.

Ok but remember quality counts not just quantity!

Excellent spot- missed that valid and pertinent language feature!

Spot on with your comment there. However adjectives and verbs if suitably contextualised will bring home the marks for you! Nice spot of rule of three( triple) at the beginning of the text- should gain good marks for all these points - well done!

for q4 i said yes he was cruel but also another reason why he's cruel is that they are poor and they need alice to get money and stuff as they live in a van

Spot on with your comment there. However adjectives and verbs if suitably contextualised will bring home the marks for you! Nice spot of rule of three( triple) at the beginning of the text- should gain good marks for all these points - well done!

For the statement one, I wrote. His colloquialism through ‘d’ye’ and ‘eh’ highlight a lack of manners, further emphasising a lack of outward values and I basically extended on how that protrudes him as an opposite to ‘stoic’ and a man who perhaps is lost in himself and splurging with self-hate and insecurity, thus projecting it onto others. I added how this of course leads to an empathetic reaction. I wrote a paragraph on how the incessant and perpetual commands thrown at her via the repetitive questions shows him as pedantic. I mentioned how humans will psychologically relate to this with empathy due to it being regarding a father and daughter relationship, working as a tactic by the writer. I wrote a paragraph on the imperative “move yourself!” but I can’t really remember all of my points. I integrated an opposing idea, saying that although some may debate that his love is out of protection and the cliche ‘hard love’ she ‘agreed’ with her ‘fathers’ commands, insinuating that perhaps she does not want to return to a point of disobeying him; that he is not lenient whatsoever, and Alice is completely aware of this through experience. Aiming for a 7, I don’t think I did brilliantly but hopefully my response should get along 15/16 out of 20 as it was conceptualised.

For the statement one, I wrote. His colloquialism through ‘d’ye’ and ‘eh’ highlight a lack of manners, further emphasising a lack of outward values and I basically extended on how that protrudes him as an opposite to ‘stoic’ and a man who perhaps is lost in himself and splurging with self-hate and insecurity, thus projecting it onto others. I added how this of course leads to an empathetic reaction. I wrote a paragraph on how the incessant and perpetual commands thrown at her via the repetitive questions shows him as pedantic. I mentioned how humans will psychologically relate to this with empathy due to it being regarding a father and daughter relationship, working as a tactic by the writer. I wrote a paragraph on the imperative “move yourself!” but I can’t really remember all of my points. I integrated an opposing idea, saying that although some may debate that his love is out of protection and the cliche ‘hard love’ she ‘agreed’ with her ‘fathers’ commands, insinuating that perhaps she does not want to return to a point of disobeying him; that he is not lenient whatsoever, and Alice is completely aware of this through experience. Aiming for a 7, I don’t think I did brilliantly but hopefully my response should get along 15/16 out of 20 as it was conceptualised.

could you say that the write used listing to describe the man at the beginning?

I really like how you answered this question. I would say it's at the top grade.

Anyone else write about the repetition of the imperative ‘Go’ in question 4? Because it kind of shows how he’s controlling/demanding and the fact that he still said it after Alice got the flowers of the roof shows how his demands are continuous and he’s unappreciative of what Alice did..

Spot on with your comment there. However adjectives and verbs if suitably contextualised will bring home the marks for you! Nice spot of rule of three( triple) at the beginning of the text- should gain good marks for all these points - well done!

For the statement one, I wrote. His colloquialism through ‘d’ye’ and ‘eh’ highlight a lack of manners, further emphasising a lack of outward values and I basically extended on how that protrudes him as an opposite to ‘stoic’ and a man who perhaps is lost in himself and splurging with self-hate and insecurity, thus projecting it onto others. I added how this of course leads to an empathetic reaction. I wrote a paragraph on how the incessant and perpetual commands thrown at her via the repetitive questions shows him as pedantic. I mentioned how humans will psychologically relate to this with empathy due to it being regarding a father and daughter relationship, working as a tactic by the writer. I wrote a paragraph on the imperative “move yourself!” but I can’t really remember all of my points. I integrated an opposing idea, saying that although some may debate that his love is out of protection and the cliche ‘hard love’ she ‘agreed’ with her ‘fathers’ commands, insinuating that perhaps she does not want to return to a point of disobeying him; that he is not lenient whatsoever, and Alice is completely aware of this through experience. Aiming for a 7, I don’t think I did brilliantly but hopefully my response should get along 15/16 out of 20 as it was conceptualised.

would it have been ok to say the writer used listing at the beginning to describe a member of his family