Greeting, could you please check my answer to Q5, tell me approximately what grade I would get with it and how can I improve?
The question:
'Cars are noisy, dirty, smelly, and downright dangerous. They should be banned from all town and city centres, allowing people to walk and cycle in peace'.
Write a letter to the Minister for Transport arguing your point of view on this statement.
So here's what I have written:
Public transport to save the day!
TW12 2QN
14 Rock Road, Richmond, London
Dear Mr Hopkins,
Greeting sir, today I am writing this letter to you to voice my concerns about the growing problem of air pollution in our town. I believe cars to be one of the main causes of such a problem; in my opinion, way too many people have cars, partially this problem is linked to a widespread belief that you should own a car, and if you don't you will waste your entire life on a bus trying to get from point 'A' to point 'B'. But I, on the other hand, think that it is just pure nonsense and an exaggeration, public transport has never been as fast and reliable as now.
In recent years using public transport has gained many advantages over owning a car: speed, reliability, safety, and low carbon-pollution rate.
High safety and low carbon emission compared to a car being the main arguments. Statistically, owning a car is a lot more dangerous than using public transport. Buses are a great deal safer than cars because drivers of those buses are professionals, who have driven buses for years, they always follow the strict word of law which is one of the main reasons why buses are safer than cars. Also, unequivocally everyone agrees that if we are to prosper as a society in the future, we should lower carbon emissions now. It's not a secret that extensive usage of cars is one of the main carbon contributing factors to our atmosphere; banning cars would be a logical step to not only help various species on our planet but to also ensure our own survival in the long run.
Yours sincerely,
Monkey with a pen
Could you please also check if I am using correctly ; and :