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Describe and Evaluate the Behavioural Approach to Treating Phobias
(8 Marks)

The behavioural approach identifies two different treatments for phobias; systematic desensitisation and flooding. Both of these treatments are based on the principles of classical conditioning. Flooding involves exposing a patient to their phobic stimulus without a gradual, strategic buildup, using an anxiety hierarchy. One limitation of flooding is that, regardless of its cost effetivness, it may be classified as quite ineffective to those with complex phobias, such as social phobias. This may be due to cognitive aspects, which the behavioural approach fail to acknowledge. For example, those with agoraphobia are more likely to experience unpleasant thoughts as opposed to a traumatic event. This is therefore a weakness of flooding as this suggests that it is not an universally effective treatment for all phobias.However, a strength of flooding is that it is quite a cost effective treatment. This is because, flooding can typically cure someone of a phobia within one long session. This therefore portrays flooding as a more cost effective alternative treatment as opposed to other treatments, such as cognitive therapies.Therefore, although flooding is quite a cost effective behavioural treatment for phobias, it lacks efficiency in providing an universally effective treatment for every single phobia.

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