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    I hate to interupt but can we please continue the story
    It's memomomeoeoeoto's turn... i have to go to a car boot sale
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    (Original post by sharkbate633)
    I hate to interupt but can we please continue the story
    i feel stifled :unimpressed: ..let the spontaneous flow of creativity guide the nature of this thread :ahee:


    here's a short animation of Karen's new boyfriend from Nigeria

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    "Ben it is good to see you. Your mother has told me so much about you. How are you getting on at school then ?"

    "I have been suspended by that big fat lesbian. She hates me and makes me do things i do not enjoy "

    "I am sorry to hear that Ben. We must sort out this problem for you. You must have an education to be a successful businessman like me. When you have lots of money you can do anything you want."

    "Do you know what is a 419 scam Albert ? My friend Stephen says that you are a scam artist. "

    "Hahaha it is true that many bad men in my country are fraudsters and carry out this 419 trick. I am a genuine businessman and have offered your mother the chance to make a wonderful fortune without any risk at all !!"

    "Mama says that you have been contacted by her great-Uncle who is the chief of the Ibonga tribe and who is dying of a fever. He found a fabulous collection of golden elephants buried in the bush and wishes to pass them to Mama who is his only living relative ! Sounds legit Albert !"

    "Please call me Bertie. Yes you are quite right. Chief Lobombo is desperately ill and asked me to help him find your Mama so his wishes could be fulfilled. He has only a few days left so your Mama must quickly help to expedite this special transaction. With a valuable treasure like this it is so important to have insurance and a specialist shipping agent. Fortunately my brother Kenneth is most experienced in these matters and is willing to charge only half of his normal fee. So your Mama only has to send a banker's draft for £45 000 and the golden elephants will be on their way to South Norwood."

    "Wow Bertie that sounds very reasonable for a collection of solid gold Elephants. Even one elephant would be worth in excess of £4 million pounds Mama tells me. I had to miss the lesson on percentages because i had been partying the previous two days and was still off my tits on cider. But she will be making at least 99% profit.
    We are so fortunate to have found an honest businessman like you. A rogue would not hesitate to take the £45 000 and disappear without sending the Elephants."

    "Yes there are many scoundrels who would cheat your mother out of her hard-earned cash. With me you have no worries. Now I must ring my brother to make sure he has prepared the export documents for the finance ministry. May I use your phone please Ben ?"
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    i know that this has nothing to do with the story and i'm asking memomemootoo this you know that pic of the woman resembling karen and the one resembling her and her son ben I was just wondering are there anymore pics, now this bit applies to everyone i think that karen could break up with this bloke cause i want it to continue which is a bit that i rewritten for my own entertainment combining some of your ideas starting form this bit

    suddenly Karen was snapped out of her day dream, as she turned round and saw that ben who had decide to come inside after he'd finished playing in the garden and was now standing next to her wondering what his mum was doing with his toys,


    Ben was furious when he saw his favourite synthetic friends canoodling with his mother. In a moment of rage, Ben snatched Mr Changeable away from Karen. But Mr Changeable held on so tightly to Karen that her synthetic breast also became detached. Once Karen recovered from the shock and realised what had happened, she put her top, bra, ring and bangles back on and she told him


    "Ben I have something to tell you" said Karen as she tossed her flaxen locks. Her hairdresser had told her only the day before that her hair was blunt cut for easy maintenance and blow-waved to add waves to the ends for bounce and movement. The roots are teased at the crown making it a great hairstyle to frame a round face and will need a small amount of product for hold and shine.



    "What is it Mum?” Ben asked” “well darling mummy has always had this intention to breastfeed cause when you were little and every time that you were due a feed you wouldn’t latch on to my breasts, The second thing is that, Well Ben you know I said that your Daddy was kidnapped by aliens shortly before you were born and that he has been teleporting money to us from Alpha Centauri each month?"

    "Yes Mum... it sounds strange but it must be true if you said so" Ben said to which Karen replied "Well Sweet pea he actually works as a carpet fitter in Luton. He is living with an Internet Moderator called Jeff."

    "Mum that’s disgusting... my Dad... living with a Moderator! "Ben asked "I knew you would be upset Honey bunch so I waited until you were 7 before breaking the news to you... now here is £10; why don't you pop down to the shops and buy us some Genuine Cider ?""Thanks Mum you are totes awesome! I will get some Doritos as well” Ben asked” “Yeah I see why not, and don’t forget to get some Irn Bru, “Mum” “yes Ben” “I am sorry about your breast btw ... that was just an accident" ” I know” Karen replied back as she smiled at him, then gave ben a motherly type hug



    Later that day and as soon as ben had got back from the shops, not long after he'd popped the bag down by the door suddenly he heard crying so he went into the living room and saw his mum crying on the sofa ben walked over, sat down next to her and asked what was wrong, so she told him,



    "you know that I told you about your dad, well the thing is darling the real truth is that, both daddy and I split up just before you were born and the reason why is because daddy didn't want to have a child in our relationship and he was angry, not only that but he wanted me to get rid of you, But I refused, so he decided to leave me to have you on my own and I never heard form that stupid man ever again, But we don't need anyone else do we darling cause me and you get along fine don't we



    “Oh Mum please don't cry" said Ben, anxiously fingering his shoulder-length locks, to which he had applied some of his mother's shampoo that very morning. Its luxurious golden camomile formula builds body and brings out natural highlights as it cleanses for fullness, bounce and radiant shine.



    Some of the ingredients seemed puzzling; Deionized water, coconut oil-corn oil soap, hydrolysed soy protein (made from organic, non-GMO soybeans), organic aloe Vera, carrageenan, Roman camomile oil, organic rosemary oil, organic sage oil; extracts of camomile, nettle, horsetail, coltsfoot, fennel, hops, balm mint, mistletoe and yarrow; panthenol (vitamin B-5), inositol, niacin, Aubrey's preservative (citrus seed extract, vitamins A, C and E), carrot oil.



    Ben hoped that they had not used a real horse tail. The mistletoe and carrot oil sounded nice.


    "Here Mum you can have some Cider, there is still some left in the flagon. You can finish it. The Doritos have all gone. Sorry. "You are a good boy Ben" said his weepy parent "I can't believe that you are the son of that layabout North Korean.

    "What was I thinking? I could have had the pick of North London estate agents, but no not me I had fall for that wastrel at his so-called language school. I don't even remember why I wanted to learn Korean in the first place" ”That's all in the past Mum" said Ben" we must look to the future. You are still a fine looking woman and your breasts are very hot "Ben you are so good to your mother, But do you know what kiddo we’re going to be all right just the two of us, anyway why do I need some dumb bloke in my life when I have you” Karen said as she gave ben a motherly type kiss
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    (Original post by sharkbate633)
    i know that this has nothing to do with the story and i'm asking memomemootoo this you know that pic of the woman resembling karen and the one resembling her and her son ben I was just wondering are there anymore pics, now this bit applies to everyone i think that karen could break up with this bloke cause i want it to continue which is a bit that i rewritten for my own entertainment combining some of your ideas starting form this bit

    suddenly Karen was snapped out of her day dream, as she turned round and saw that ben who had decide to come inside after he'd finished playing in the garden and was now standing next to her wondering what his mum was doing with his toys,


    Ben was furious when he saw his favourite synthetic friends canoodling with his mother. In a moment of rage, Ben snatched Mr Changeable away from Karen. But Mr Changeable held on so tightly to Karen that her synthetic breast also became detached. Once Karen recovered from the shock and realised what had happened, she put her top, bra, ring and bangles back on and she told him


    "Ben I have something to tell you" said Karen as she tossed her flaxen locks. Her hairdresser had told her only the day before that her hair was blunt cut for easy maintenance and blow-waved to add waves to the ends for bounce and movement. The roots are teased at the crown making it a great hairstyle to frame a round face and will need a small amount of product for hold and shine.



    "What is it Mum?” Ben asked” “well darling mummy has always had this intention to breastfeed cause when you were little and every time that you were due a feed you wouldn’t latch on to my breasts, The second thing is that, Well Ben you know I said that your Daddy was kidnapped by aliens shortly before you were born and that he has been teleporting money to us from Alpha Centauri each month?"

    "Yes Mum... it sounds strange but it must be true if you said so" Ben said to which Karen replied "Well Sweet pea he actually works as a carpet fitter in Luton. He is living with an Internet Moderator called Jeff."

    "Mum that’s disgusting... my Dad... living with a Moderator! "Ben asked "I knew you would be upset Honey bunch so I waited until you were 7 before breaking the news to you... now here is £10; why don't you pop down to the shops and buy us some Genuine Cider ?""Thanks Mum you are totes awesome! I will get some Doritos as well” Ben asked” “Yeah I see why not, and don’t forget to get some Irn Bru, “Mum” “yes Ben” “I am sorry about your breast btw ... that was just an accident" ” I know” Karen replied back as she smiled at him, then gave ben a motherly type hug



    Later that day and as soon as ben had got back from the shops, not long after he'd popped the bag down by the door suddenly he heard crying so he went into the living room and saw his mum crying on the sofa ben walked over, sat down next to her and asked what was wrong, so she told him,



    "you know that I told you about your dad, well the thing is darling the real truth is that, both daddy and I split up just before you were born and the reason why is because daddy didn't want to have a child in our relationship and he was angry, not only that but he wanted me to get rid of you, But I refused, so he decided to leave me to have you on my own and I never heard form that stupid man ever again, But we don't need anyone else do we darling cause me and you get along fine don't we



    “Oh Mum please don't cry" said Ben, anxiously fingering his shoulder-length locks, to which he had applied some of his mother's shampoo that very morning. Its luxurious golden camomile formula builds body and brings out natural highlights as it cleanses for fullness, bounce and radiant shine.



    Some of the ingredients seemed puzzling; Deionized water, coconut oil-corn oil soap, hydrolysed soy protein (made from organic, non-GMO soybeans), organic aloe Vera, carrageenan, Roman camomile oil, organic rosemary oil, organic sage oil; extracts of camomile, nettle, horsetail, coltsfoot, fennel, hops, balm mint, mistletoe and yarrow; panthenol (vitamin B-5), inositol, niacin, Aubrey's preservative (citrus seed extract, vitamins A, C and E), carrot oil.



    Ben hoped that they had not used a real horse tail. The mistletoe and carrot oil sounded nice.


    "Here Mum you can have some Cider, there is still some left in the flagon. You can finish it. The Doritos have all gone. Sorry. "You are a good boy Ben" said his weepy parent "I can't believe that you are the son of that layabout North Korean.

    "What was I thinking? I could have had the pick of North London estate agents, but no not me I had fall for that wastrel at his so-called language school. I don't even remember why I wanted to learn Korean in the first place" ”That's all in the past Mum" said Ben" we must look to the future. You are still a fine looking woman and your breasts are very hot "Ben you are so good to your mother, But do you know what kiddo we’re going to be all right just the two of us, anyway why do I need some dumb bloke in my life when I have you” Karen said as she gave ben a motherly type kiss
    hey sharkbate it's coming along really well. Are we going to meet Albert soon ?
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    thanks the bear for your reply and no i don't think so, i'm only going to leave that character here in the one that i done i just want to focus more on both Karen and ben and the relationship between them and want them to bond and do things together
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    Over the next week Ben thought deeply about the conversation he had with his mother. He realised that she was the only woman who has ever truly loved him.

    Ben entered the living room, where he suddenly noticed the beauty in his mother's saggy physique which was reclined on the sofa. "mama", he said innocently, "I have been very curious about the nature of the bond between you and I. You're well fit, mama, and I was wondering if you would like to re-inact the Oedipus complex with me"
    "Aww sweetpea, I would be delighted", said Karen. "But what about your plump playground girlfriend, Chantelle?"
    "Oh, she won't mind", said Ben, "we're in an open relationship. It's totes cool, just chill mama".

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    It's good but i meant the relationship between parent and child i didn't mean the romantic sort that normally happens between two grown ups, anyway on with the story, but if any of you want to continue with karen's boyfriend Albert in then you can but please also write bits for this story that i'm doing for my own entertainment as well
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    i will never be good enough.
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    yes you will cause i think that you are a great writer, and don't take this the wrong way but i don't think it maks any scene of a mother and her child falling in love
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    Ben sipped thoughtfully at his double skinny macchiatto with chocolate sprinkles and toyed with his luxuriant curls. He was delighted with the new conditioner which his mother had brought back from the salon in an unmarked jamjar. It was like gluey yoghurt and there was just a few teaspoons in the jar when he stole it from the fridge.
    There was a handwritten label; "To Karen from Simon xxxx".
    Simon was his mother's stylist at the salon.
    She seemed very happy after her sessions with Simon.
    Ben had put the special conditioner on his hair while his mother was out at the shops. He replaced the odd-smelling substance with some mushroom soup left over from lunch.
    It was Tuesday afternoon. That morning the postman had delivered a letter from school. Ben removed it from the pile and hid it in his dressing gown. In the bathroom he tore it open. Bad news. The BFL was lifting bis suspension and expected him back on Thursday. Ben tore up the letter and flushed it down the glowing peach khazi. No way was he returning to St Jude's. He would have to invent some more accusations about members of staff again. Last time it had been the Senior Dinner Lady; Ben reported her for organising orgies in the kitchen.
    Perhaps one of the teachers this time...
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    (Original post by sharkbate633)
    It's good but i meant the relationship between parent and child i didn't mean the romantic sort that normally happens between two grown ups, anyway on with the story, but if any of you want to continue with karen's boyfriend Albert in then you can but please also write bits for this story that i'm doing for my own entertainment as well
    but if anyone is going to continue the one that i'm doing then can you make sure that you pm me if it's the one that i'm doing for my own entertainment and please don't have ben and karen falling in love with each other, also if it's to do with anyone like albert then please keep it to the fourm

    just one last thing that i kept on forgetting to say and that is I’m amazed how the story has turned out cause when I first started it was like a toy story type thing, so many great ideas any way I decided to continued just a little bit which is something that I put in the first bit so I’m going to put the bit where I last left off which was from a motherly type kiss

    At that moment Karen was over whelmed that she had forgotten to tell ben that his room was a mess and needed to be cleaned and tidied, not to mention that she had found Mr changeable lying on the floor
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    but before continuing with any of the story, there is something, You know how this story has developed I was thinking about rewriting the first part but I’m going to leave the part where Karen enters ben’s room along with the weather, and here are the bits that I want to do starting from

    Mr changeable was a plastic action figure that was about 7 inches tall and unlike any other action figures that wear the same outfits all the time because Mr changeable can change clothes for different looks which meant that he could be dressed up into all sorts of different outfits from a wrestler to a superhero, He lived in the bedroom of a 2 floor house. Mr changeable was the toy of a
    8 year old boy called ben that has had him ever since he was given to ben by Ben’s mum

    Karen on his 5th birthday, she had bought Mr changeable for her son after he kept on bugging and pestering her for a Mr changeable action figure for weeks and months before his birthday, Out of all the toys Mr changeable was the most played with toy that ben had and because of it most of the other toys didn’t always get a change to be played with, Some of the games which ben often played whenever he played with Mr changeable was mostly superhero type games from flying to the rescue or fighting a super villain using some other toy

    It was a bright, sunny, Saturday morning, the weather was perfect to be outside and enjoy the sunshine instead of being stuck inside, after Ben had dressed Mr changeable up as an army man and left the room to go outside and play in the back garden
    As Mr changeable was sitting on Ben’s bed with the soft toys that Ben has had ever since he was little, Karen had bought them just before ben was born and whenever of them got dirty and was starting to smell, because they was washable Karen would take them into the kitchen and give the toys a twirl in the washing machine, they would come out all clean and looking like new

    Mr changeable was feeling a bit board so he decided to sneak down stairs to the living room so that he could see some of the toys that ben played with but left down stairs without ben if he decided to come back in from the garden or Karen knowing, there were a few scattered around one or two toys sat on the coffee table while others like the little green plastic army men lay on the floor just waiting to be stepped on by either ben or Karen

    Thinking that it was such a great idea Mr changeable got down from the bed and headed for the bedroom door, he was half way there when suddenly Mr changeable heard footsteps fast approaching, as they grew louder and louder, he along with the other toys stopped and quickly froze back into their inanimate state just as the door opened and Karen stepped into the room,

    So which parts need rewriting and which parts should I keep, so if anyone can help me to rewrite the start of it then I will be grateful
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    also you know at the start of the story where i put karen's earrings, well here are what her earrings look like?

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    i have gathered my contributions to this story here:

    http://longspoon.wordpress.com/2013/...t-all-started/
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    thanks for giving me credit, but you left a fwe bits out like when she walked into ben's room and seeing the mess, also there is something that you didn't put and that was when she fell pregnant with ben and her life after her son was born
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    i am not an expert on childbirth etc... maybe memo would be able to tackle the miracle of life aspect of Ben's story.
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    ok, but which one of you are going to put the bit where karen walked into ben's room and seeing the mess also things like her hair have been missed out
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    The title is just wrong !
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    (Original post by the bear)
    i am not an expert on childbirth etc... maybe memo would be able to tackle the miracle of life aspect of Ben's story.
    i just hope that memomemootoo would reply to this
 
 
 
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