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    (Original post by Lawlser)
    Just some advice for Civil Rights,

    1945-55 has come up three times, and on the last examination on it (June 2012) they said candidates had a secure grasp of the topic so I think it's highly unlikely it will come up!

    I have a feeling something on Opposition will come up and whether it was the MOST IMPORTANT factor for failure, so I'd argue:

    Opposition, how it led to failure. Try not to focus on one type of opposition, maybe use Police Forces (Pritchett and Connor) and the FBI (COINTERLPO and how their infiltration led to divisions) and Congree (Weaking Bills, Filibusters, HOWEVER, they did back the 64 and 65 Bill, so there's nice evaluation)

    And then do for the other two factors:

    Internal Divisions - Destructive tensions BUT also Creative Tensions so you're providing a nice counter argument.

    Failure of Presidents - Domestic issues not as important as international ones - Johnson occupied with Vietnam war - HOWEVER, you could argue this failure was due to MLK for criticising the war and so the failure can't all be attributed to Presidents. Talk about Kennedy and maybe Eisenhower (depends on the timeframe, they will probably do the 1960's so Eisenhower and LR9 shouldn't be mentioned) AND THEN counter argue that and say how they did pass bills which led to almost de jure desegregation blah blah.

    Great tip, thanks! I've almost given up at this point - the examiner's reports are very discouraging, they're so harsh
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    (Original post by Lawlser)
    Just some advice for Civil Rights,

    1945-55 has come up three times, and on the last examination on it (June 2012) they said candidates had a secure grasp of the topic so I think it's highly unlikely it will come up!

    I have a feeling something on Opposition will come up and whether it was the MOST IMPORTANT factor for failure, so I'd argue:

    Opposition, how it led to failure. Try not to focus on one type of opposition, maybe use Police Forces (Pritchett and Connor) and the FBI (COINTERLPO and how their infiltration led to divisions) and Congree (Weaking Bills, Filibusters, HOWEVER, they did back the 64 and 65 Bill, so there's nice evaluation)

    And then do for the other two factors:

    Internal Divisions - Destructive tensions BUT also Creative Tensions so you're providing a nice counter argument.

    Failure of Presidents - Domestic issues not as important as international ones - Johnson occupied with Vietnam war - HOWEVER, you could argue this failure was due to MLK for criticising the war and so the failure can't all be attributed to Presidents. Talk about Kennedy and maybe Eisenhower (depends on the timeframe, they will probably do the 1960's so Eisenhower and LR9 shouldn't be mentioned) AND THEN counter argue that and say how they did pass bills which led to almost de jure desegregation blah blah.
    Oh, so on a question whether opposition was the most important factor for failure, would you talk about the role of opposition along with two other different factors (division and presidential failure) whilst stating the successes of them?
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    (Original post by sasunerd)
    Oh, so on a question whether opposition was the most important factor for failure, would you talk about the role of opposition along with two other different factors (division and presidential failure) whilst stating the successes of them?
    Indeed exactly, on a "most important" question it will always be multi-factoral so you should have 3 main paragraphs each with a different factor.

    And also, if internal divisions comes up, you can do exactly the same just have internal divisions first, then opposition and then presidential failure!
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    (Original post by Hlyono)
    Great tip, thanks! I've almost given up at this point - the examiner's reports are very discouraging, they're so harsh
    I think they're good to see what they look for.

    So a nice intro - stating the points you will cover, maybe make a judgement in introduction.

    Main body - should always keep linking back to question and at the end of each paragraph a mini conclusion that links to question.

    Conclusion - most important factor and why, should be quite extensive.
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    I'm doing Vietnam/Korea and the African American Civil Rights Movement.

    I love the content! I find it so much more interesting than Unit 2 (The Nationalist Challenge in India). I got an A in my mock and all my recent essays. I found it really hard to do well at first but then I got the technique down.

    My top tips (a few stolen from my history teacher but he's brilliant)

    - Make a judgement in the introduction. No sitting on the fence! Make it brief- a sentence will do.
    - Read the question. I know this is cliché and sounds patronising but it's so important. I know one girl in her A2 year who got a D on this exam because despite writing some of the best analysis the examiner ever read, she didn't answer the question properly. She read the wrong dates. Date boundaries are really key, in this exam.
    - Use specific facts and statistics to give your answer depth but don't go too overboard. Personally I don't bother with historian quotes, I think they seem a bit like tacked on desperation/ pretentiousness- but whatever floats your boat.
    - Range- make sure you cover both sides or all the factors, and the most significant points. You have to cover all the main points, not just a variety. So if you are doing an essay on Civil Right 1945-55, you must mention the Brown Judgement. I know this might sound obvious but it is really important.
    - Judgement. If you sit on the fence, you will lose marks. If you don't have a balanced conclusion, you will lose marks. If your judgement is ridiculous, you will again lose marks. So save time for your conclusion. It's better to bullet point your last paragraph than rush your conclusion. Make it decisive, analytical and balanced.

    Hope those are useful! Good luck everyone! I'm terrified about something going wrong!
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    (Original post by Lawlser)
    I think they're good to see what they look for.

    So a nice intro - stating the points you will cover, maybe make a judgement in introduction.

    Main body - should always keep linking back to question and at the end of each paragraph a mini conclusion that links to question.

    Conclusion - most important factor and why, should be quite extensive.

    Structure, I'm not worried about. It's just the content. I can only come up with four-five points each for economic, political and ideological reasons for the FYPs, and none of them are particularly strong, they're all too general. I have a terrible feeling that the Plans and the Terror will come up, but I don't think I can stuff a Plans essay properly.
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    (Original post by Lawlser)
    Just some advice for Civil Rights,

    1945-55 has come up three times, and on the last examination on it (June 2012) they said candidates had a secure grasp of the topic so I think it's highly unlikely it will come up!

    I have a feeling something on Opposition will come up and whether it was the MOST IMPORTANT factor for failure, so I'd argue:

    Opposition, how it led to failure. Try not to focus on one type of opposition, maybe use Police Forces (Pritchett and Connor) and the FBI (COINTERLPO and how their infiltration led to divisions) and Congree (Weaking Bills, Filibusters, HOWEVER, they did back the 64 and 65 Bill, so there's nice evaluation)

    And then do for the other two factors:

    Internal Divisions - Destructive tensions BUT also Creative Tensions so you're providing a nice counter argument.

    Failure of Presidents - Domestic issues not as important as international ones - Johnson occupied with Vietnam war - HOWEVER, you could argue this failure was due to MLK for criticising the war and so the failure can't all be attributed to Presidents. Talk about Kennedy and maybe Eisenhower (depends on the timeframe, they will probably do the 1960's so Eisenhower and LR9 shouldn't be mentioned) AND THEN counter argue that and say how they did pass bills which led to almost de jure desegregation blah blah.
    Cheers gonna plan this now just incase! Since not much can be done now, should I focus on the period 1955-68 and just look over the reasons for success/failures 1945-1955 and forget black power, as it came up in January. I got my mock back which was a high B so I'm happy with that just hope edexcel don't give us a tough question like this, so its good to plan it beforehand.
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    If they ask for the reasons behind fyp what other factors could I discuss other than ideological, political and economic?


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    Question predictions, for civil rights:
    I think something on the 3rd topic- how the success of the movement was limited. I agree with earlier posts about something on opposition. They haven't asked a straight question on Black Power (how far it helped/hindered the movement) or internal divisions.
    I actually do think 1945-55 is a possibility but something factor based- maybe on the federal government? The June question was a question about importance which is why it was so easy.

    For Vietnam or Korea.
    I think a question on Korea may be due. It's hard to predict what question, as they have asked a different one each time. They haven't asked an outright question on why the war broke out, so that's definitely a possibility
    For Vietnam the questions were early in January, so I suspect something late. Perhaps on why the US withdrew? or why they lost? Possibly Tet?

    Just predictions though, good luck!
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    (Original post by Sara_A)
    If they ask for the reasons behind fyp what other factors could I discuss other than ideological, political and economic?


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    The revision guide puts fear of war as a separate point. But the edexcel book put it under political reasons. I think you can make that a separate factor, I personally would. Though I'm unsure.
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    (Original post by Hlyono)
    Structure, I'm not worried about. It's just the content. I can only come up with four-five points each for economic, political and ideological reasons for the FYPs, and none of them are particularly strong, they're all too general. I have a terrible feeling that the Plans and the Terror will come up, but I don't think I can stuff a Plans essay properly.
    I had to flesh my points out with both the internet, access to history textbook and prescribed edexcel textbook.

    For the reasons for economics:

    Scissors Crisis,
    Grain Procurement
    The fail to industrialise fast enough - NEP wasn't producing sinews of war that exceeded Tsarist regime
    then counter - it did help improve agriculture after devastation of civil war

    Political - consolidating Stalins power - abandoning bukharin, appealing to radicals within party who didn't favour NEP in first place.
    developing his cult of personality to exceed Lenin - "myth of two leaders" - only way to do this was to abolish NEP and bring in his own personal economic plans,
    Stalin was worried of western countries attacking - needed FYP to rapidly industrialise.

    Ideological:

    NEPmen - their capitalist views in conflict with state - communist party members resented them - getting rid of them would mean stalin becomes more popular and only way to get rid of them is to abandon NEP and introduce FYP.
    Allowing proletariat to prosper
    Socialism could only be achieved through radical industrialisation which NEP wasn't doing and FYP was.
    Stalin used ideologies for political gain - "socialism in one country" vs "permanent revolution" - make trotsky weak - link it back to previous point, because socialism only achievable in highly industrial economy, FYP needed to be brought in and because trotsky was perceived as against it, Stalin consolidated power.
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    (Original post by Lawlser)
    I had to flesh my points out with both the internet, access to history textbook and prescribed edexcel textbook.

    For the reasons for economics:

    Scissors Crisis,
    Grain Procurement
    The fail to industrialise fast enough - NEP wasn't producing sinews of war that exceeded Tsarist regime
    then counter - it did help improve agriculture after devastation of civil war

    Political - consolidating Stalins power - abandoning bukharin, appealing to radicals within party who didn't favour NEP in first place.
    developing his cult of personality to exceed Lenin - "myth of two leaders" - only way to do this was to abolish NEP and bring in his own personal economic plans,
    Stalin was worried of western countries attacking - needed FYP to rapidly industrialise.

    Ideological:

    NEPmen - their capitalist views in conflict with state - communist party members resented them - getting rid of them would mean stalin becomes more popular and only way to get rid of them is to abandon NEP and introduce FYP.
    Allowing proletariat to prosper
    Socialism could only be achieved through radical industrialisation which NEP wasn't doing and FYP was.
    Stalin used ideologies for political gain - "socialism in one country" vs "permanent revolution" - make trotsky weak - link it back to previous point, because socialism only achievable in highly industrial economy, FYP needed to be brought in and because trotsky was perceived as against it, Stalin consolidated power.

    Sir, you not getting 100% in this exam would be a tragedy on so many levels.

    How would you order them, as in most to least? Because I thought economic was the most important reason but there aren't as many examples for it.
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    what do you guys think will come up for

    D3: Russia in revolution- i was kinda hoping for something on the 1905 revolution or the civil war?
    and
    D4: Stalins Russia- i really want something like 'What were the reasons for the FYP's' or something on the great retreat e.g women, education etc
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    (Original post by Lawlser)
    I had to flesh my points out with both the internet, access to history textbook and prescribed edexcel textbook.

    For the reasons for economics:

    Scissors Crisis,
    Grain Procurement
    The fail to industrialise fast enough - NEP wasn't producing sinews of war that exceeded Tsarist regime
    then counter - it did help improve agriculture after devastation of civil war

    Political - consolidating Stalins power - abandoning bukharin, appealing to radicals within party who didn't favour NEP in first place.
    developing his cult of personality to exceed Lenin - "myth of two leaders" - only way to do this was to abolish NEP and bring in his own personal economic plans,
    Stalin was worried of western countries attacking - needed FYP to rapidly industrialise.

    Ideological:

    NEPmen - their capitalist views in conflict with state - communist party members resented them - getting rid of them would mean stalin becomes more popular and only way to get rid of them is to abandon NEP and introduce FYP.
    Allowing proletariat to prosper
    Socialism could only be achieved through radical industrialisation which NEP wasn't doing and FYP was.
    Stalin used ideologies for political gain - "socialism in one country" vs "permanent revolution" - make trotsky weak - link it back to previous point, because socialism only achievable in highly industrial economy, FYP needed to be brought in and because trotsky was perceived as against it, Stalin consolidated power.
    Thanks for those really good points, I was wondering of they ask for the reasons behind fyp if I use those points and link my answer back to the question would it be ok?


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    (Original post by Chlo55)
    what do you guys think will come up for

    D3: Russia in revolution- i was kinda hoping for something on the 1905 revolution or the civil war?
    and
    D4: Stalins Russia- i really want something like 'What were the reasons for the FYP's' or something on the great retreat e.g women, education etc
    I'd cry if those were the D3 options, they're exactly what I'm hoping for!

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    I'd cry if those were the D3 options, they're exactly what I'm hoping for!

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    I know, they're like the ones i'm most confident on hopefully it'll be something like how were the divisions amongst the tsars opponents responsible for the failure of the 1905 revolution. And then something like how was trotskys role important to bolsheviks victory in the civil war or something:')
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    Do you think that anything will come up on the Great Retreat - if it is about women and children, education and all that I will cry with happiness?
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    (Original post by Hlyono)
    Sir, you not getting 100% in this exam would be a tragedy on so many levels.

    How would you order them, as in most to least? Because I thought economic was the most important reason but there aren't as many examples for it.
    I've focused on it so much that if it doesn't come up I'll be so upset haha!

    Well, you'd order them according to the question. e.g.

    How far were political causes the main reason why Stalin implemented the First FYP.

    You'd do Political first, then whatever you feel fit.

    Always lead with the factor stated in the question.

    Economic has a substantial amount, it's all about explanation so for example.

    The Scissors crisis - peasents profits decreased - led to substinence farming - fears of famine but ALSO, the decrease in grain meant that the proletariat were suffering because they weren't recieving generic foodstuffs and due to Stalin believing proletariat should prosper it can be argued he never wanted this to happen in the future which led to the FYP and Collectivisation so he could take away power from the peasants and move them into urban areas while his supporters managed the farms.

    See where I'm going? trying to go in depth but always relating to question..?
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    (Original post by goodmorningworld)
    Do you think that anything will come up on the Great Retreat - if it is about women and children, education and all that I will cry with happiness?
    Maybe about whether women/children were the most important reason to the strengthening of the economy or how far did the position of women change during soviet russia?
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    (Original post by goodmorningworld)
    Do you think that anything will come up on the Great Retreat - if it is about women and children, education and all that I will cry with happiness?
    I don't know but i would be so happy if it was all you have to do is mention the womens role, family life so like divorce and marriage, and the education!
 
 
 
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