Opening lines on med personal statements Watch

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UCAS Apply 2006 starts the week commencing 13th June! Yay! Finally I can start my (second) UCAS form lol.

As the title is a bit of a giveaway, I need a catch first line (which all the med school books seem to emphasise...) for my UCAS form so does anyone have any inspiration? Unfortunately I left my creative writing skills back when I dropped English language after GCSE :p:

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Heres my one which imo is actually not good at all. I did manage to get 3 interviews though so it cant be that bad.

The importance of good health in our lives cannot be understated. Continuous advancements in the field of medicine help pave the way for better health for future generations. Medicine is an engaging career due to its diversity, academic challenge and connection with individuals.
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My desire to study medicine at university was re-affirmed when I spent the summer volunteering with young people who had disabilities or were socially disadvantaged. I was fortunate to spend a considerable amount of time with a child with autism and the satisfaction on the child’s face when we were able to successfully communicate was exceedingly rewarding. Whilst working in this environment, I learned to work through the frustrations of failure, making me more determined to succeed – not just for myself but also for others. My involvement with these young people confirmed to me that perseverance leads to breakthrough – a key concept within the medical profession. this was mine!got me three interviews!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!
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What makes me laugh is that most books say you need a catchy start and finish, when in reality most ATs skip the first and last sentances as they're usually pointless openers and finishers

Save the words for actually adding something positive about you to your PS...
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UCAS Apply 2006 starts the week commencing 13th June! Yay! Finally I can start my (second) UCAS form lol.
huh so can we apply from the 13th june? Hmm well my opening line so far is: "I have been focussed on medicine my whole life." And then it gets too dreamy and needs to be changed :albertein:
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Have they changed it for this year then? UCAS usually only opens it's next session after clearing for the previous session has closed - normally mid-September...
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According to UCAS it's not changed:

http://www.ucas.ac.uk/getting/how/appflow06.pdf
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huh so can we apply from the 13th june? Hmm well my opening line so far is: "I have been focussed on medicine my whole life." And then it gets too dreamy and needs to be changed :albertein:
Don't say that.

I can't remember what my first line was but really, you're not going to come up with anything that they haven't seen before, or that's going to get you in just on the strength of that.
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Don't say that.

I can't remember what my first line was but really, you're not going to come up with anything that they haven't seen before, or that's going to get you in just on the strength of that.
yeh i changed it to 'ive been focussed on paediactic my whole life' and yea i think its not so great but its also true. i wrote a first draft today and if you want to i'll PM you it?

there is no straight forward answer to this Q, it depends on what follows and the whole style of your PS, and it probably doesn't matter enormously either.
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"Little pig little pig, let me come in"!

Sorry exams have finished..and i'm bored (but loving it!) My first line was something like "Everyone has an opinion about healthcare, and i went on to talk about medicine constantly being in the headlines which led on to media which led on to my love of books which led on to my love of medicine. I think. Seems like so long ago. Right now i can't even remember my name.
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Not by the hairs on my chinny chin chin!

Sorry, exams haven't fininshed and I'm very close to insanity.

I really have nothing to contribute to this. I can't actually remember what I wrote in my PS and don't have any copies
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"My fascination with medicine began..."

oh yes, i was one of those.. :p:

presumably the rest of the content was a little more inspired..
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Not by the hairs on my chinny chin chin!

Sorry, exams haven't fininshed and I'm very close to insanity.

I really have nothing to contribute to this. I can't actually remember what I wrote in my PS and don't have any copies

At least you have an excuse I'm just being randomly random
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Oooh oooh, I've found my ending paragraph. Not the same, but meh, here it is:

From my various social and voluntary activities, I have learned to cope with a demanding schedule and how to juggle my various academic and social requirements. I believe my life so far has equipped me with the skills to face the rigours of a medical course, and I look forward to the challenges and opportunities that university will offer.
Bet they didn't see others like that!!! Oh wait...
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(Original post by Loopz)
yeh i changed it to 'ive been focussed on paediactic my whole life' and yea i think its not so great but its also true. i wrote a first draft today and if you want to i'll PM you it?

there is no straight forward answer to this Q, it depends on what follows and the whole style of your PS, and it probably doesn't matter enormously either.
Hmm, I dunno - it's not the "focussed on X" thing that I think is bad, it's the "my whole life" bit - even if it is true, they'll have heard it all before and also it implies you've been going into it because it's what you've wanted to do since you were 5 (when you're not really informed enough to make a career choice) rather than making a more mature decision. PM me it if you want me to have a look. I didn't write mine until September though, this is very organised!
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My opening and finishing lines were just some cheesy cliched lines about wanting to do medicine since I was a wee nipper lol. I got 3 interviews so must've been alright. As long as your opening/finishing phrases read ok I think that's all that matters. It's unlikely that you're going to get an interview on the strength of that alone, because as has been said, they'll have heard most of it before. I concentrated a lot more on my extra-curricular activities and work experience sections which are the main things they're looking for IMO.

But you've got ages to go yet. I wrote and re-wrote my PS about 10-12 times I think till I 'perfected' it.
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many weeks after i submitted my ucas form, i realised that my first line didnt actually make any sense:

"I aspire to be a good doctor because I am empathic, intelligent and hardworking."

duno why leeds and newcastle let me in, i reckon they just didnt bother reading that first line
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Looking back on my PS, I think it's ***** and I could have done witout the opener and closer...

Gaining my first degree in genetics, working for 13 months in the pharmaceutical industry and completing my D.Phil. research in the molecular progression of cancer inducing events, have given me the confidence to further my career in the direction of clinical medicine.
Vomit!
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The starter of mine..


"Inspired by a fascination in...."


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The starter of mine..


"Inspired by a fascination in...."



Oh! Is this like one of those games where you add the next bit of the story?

...old ladies wearing...
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