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    My experiences with the student body have made me more confident, instilled patience and a sense of leadership in me which I believe will be invaluable to me in the future.

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    My experiences with the student body instilled confidence, patience and leadership in me which will be invaluable to me in the future.

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    My experiences with the student body have made me more confident, and instilled patience and a sense of leadership in me which I believe will be invaluable to me in the future.
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    Option 2
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    not the 1st. Between 2nd and 3rd. 2nd is better and to the point without screwing over your character limit.
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    Third one
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    I like 2
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    I would pick 3, but would use the word 'consider' rather than believe - I'm quite picky, but I think it reads just a bit better
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    I like number 2 :yes:
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    (Original post by pjb13)

    My experiences with the student body have instilled confidence, patience and leadership in me, which I believe will be invaluable assets for my future_________.
    Fill in blank, e.g. career, etc.
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    the 3rd one reads better, but if you are struggling for space, 2 is also good.
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    Number 2
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    instilled leadership doesn't sound right
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    (Original post by contauri)
    instilled leadership doesn't sound right
    yeah
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    Either 2 or, if you wanted to make it sound less like a list, I would probably say:

    My experiences with the student body have made me more confident, instilling patience and a sense of leadership in me which I believe will be invaluable in the future.
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    go with 3...but get rid of "in me" you have already made it clear its you at the beginning good luck
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    My experiences with the student body instilled confidence, patience and leadership in me which I believe will be prove to be invaluable skills for to me in the future.

    Or maybe just :

    My experiences with the student body instilled confidence, patience and leadership in me, all of which are will be invaluable skills for to me in the future.
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    Second. You can say leadership skills.
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    2nd
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    I'll put three cuz I dont want to say instilled leadership...a sense of leadership makes it more realistic.Thanks for ur help guys.Am done!...one day before deadline
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    My experiences with the student body have greatly enhanced my confidence, patience and ability to lead, and I believe such qualities will prove invaluable to me in the future.
 
 
 
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