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    During act 1 scene 3 Iago’s antagonistic motives are exposed to the audience. Referring to Roderigo he says amid his soliloquy ‘Thus do I ever make my fool my purse’. Iago exposes his true motives regarding his co-operation with Roderigo. Iago confessed himself to the audience as a deceitful person who merely makes use of others for ones own self-interest. In the soliloquy it is made clear that his interests lie in

    Can it be worded better? does it make sense? Plz help, doing AS coursework essay in for tommorrow.
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    You may wish to consider varying your use of punctuation - using a semicolon to link related sentences, for example.

    "Iago exposes his true motives regarding his co-operation with Roderigo." - You need to either provide another quote as evidence for this, or to link sentences 2 and 3 to make it clear that the ideas of sentence 3 are backed up by the evidence in sentence two (otherwise sentence 3 appears to be without quite enough explanation.)

    Basically, I think that your ideas and use of quotation are very good, but you need to adjust the punctuation to ensure that the ideas are linked in a way that is clear to the examiner, clearly showing your train of though. You see?
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    Thanks, I'll come back if I have any more queries.
 
 
 
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