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    (Original post by Tha_Black_Shinobi)
    o gosh another TSR Immortal Technique bum boy. I notice that as usual Tech's flow is very substandard on that song. Actually just listened more and his flow is actually BAD. The guy has some thoughtful lyrics but at the end of the day his delivery is wack it doesnt help that his so called great lyrical content is filled with conspiracy theories that may or may not be true
    hey i like it makes a change from people rapping about guns,hos and how they're hardcore.

    I also like lowkey
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    Seen 3 1/2 good verses so far in this thread.
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    (Original post by whatajoker)
    This is probably my second verse i have written, my friend who is a local rapper wanted me to do a song with him. So i thought id write a little...how is it?

    Listen… I cant control when it is my time ends
    That’s why my rhyme sends lyrics so vibrant.
    Cause when I spit I want the world to hear my voice
    Sit and rejoice and listen to the sound of my voice
    listen to my problems so they can make a different choice
    sometimes its like whats the point, but I continue on
    reminiscin on all the places that ive been and gone.
    **** in this song is true feelings its more than text
    Not ready for whats ahead I cant afford whats next
    Im absorbin in the **** around me tryin to drowned me
    In tears lookin at my fears its astounding.
    But death comes… I mean I know **** happens
    I know its tragic but I just cant quit askin.
    Man its magic, one-minute im alive and well
    High as hell, then the next minute I might as well
    Be dead my lifes gone stale, its like a nightmare
    And right there is a bullet my head just might wear.

    PS.I AM WHITE.

    do you sing the "ps i am white" bit or rap it?
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    (Original post by Milan.)
    Dont talk to me about lyrics,
    I know all your little gimmicks,
    I know about rhyming dictionaries,
    And I know about rhymeszone dot com please,
    Go write some intelligent bars,
    Show man you know more than just cars,
    Shanks, money, Shanks, gash,
    Shanks, weed, Shanks, please,
    Thanks
    lol using JME's bars. Bad, bad bad.
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    (Original post by whatajoker)
    This is probably my second verse i have written, my friend who is a local rapper wanted me to do a song with him. So i thought id write a little...how is it?

    Listen… I cant control when it is my time ends
    That’s why my rhyme sends lyrics so vibrant.
    Cause when I spit I want the world to hear my voice
    Sit and rejoice and listen to the sound of my voice
    listen to my problems so they can make a different choice
    sometimes its like whats the point, but I continue on
    reminiscin on all the places that ive been and gone.
    **** in this song is true feelings its more than text
    Not ready for whats ahead I cant afford whats next
    Im absorbin in the **** around me tryin to drowned me
    In tears lookin at my fears its astounding.
    But death comes… I mean I know **** happens
    I know its tragic but I just cant quit askin.
    Man its magic, one-minute im alive and well
    High as hell, then the next minute I might as well
    Be dead my lifes gone stale, its like a nightmare
    And right there is a bullet my head just might wear.

    PS.I AM WHITE.
    **** is terrible.
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    (Original post by whatajoker)
    This is probably my second verse i have written, my friend who is a local rapper wanted me to do a song with him. So i thought id write a little...how is it?

    Listen… I cant control when it is my time ends
    That’s why my rhyme sends lyrics so vibrant.
    Cause when I spit I want the world to hear my voice
    Sit and rejoice and listen to the sound of my voice
    listen to my problems so they can make a different choice
    sometimes its like whats the point, but I continue on
    reminiscin on all the places that ive been and gone.
    **** in this song is true feelings its more than text
    Not ready for whats ahead I cant afford whats next
    Im absorbin in the **** around me tryin to drowned me
    In tears lookin at my fears its astounding.
    But death comes… I mean I know **** happens
    I know its tragic but I just cant quit askin.
    Man its magic, one-minute im alive and well
    High as hell, then the next minute I might as well
    Be dead my lifes gone stale, its like a nightmare
    And right there is a bullet my head just might wear.

    PS.I AM WHITE.
    "man is magic... I might as well" good lines
 
 
 
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