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    Hi, i have applied through clearing , and need to get my PS sent off by monday, im 23 so mature student, and dont have many years of experience in the firld ive chosen. Howeve i have had an interview, and been given a provision place.
    please could you give me some advise on my 2 drafts in different styles, 1 which i had help with.
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    I don't know much about photography (I lasted 2 days on an AS photography course, argh), but:

    I would include, in draft two, what you think photography should be 'about', perhaps, to give it that extra enthusiastic kick. Um... also, perhaps say something about the camera that you use, or what sort of developing methods you like to use? Maybe also a bit more about methods that you admire, and what other things you'd like to explore within photography (other photographers of different 'genres' etc).
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    I find the first one more captivating.. just needs a tiny bit of tweaking, i mean just a few or maybe just one grammatical error i think but overall its good
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    Dude, it isn't really a good idea to post your ps up for all to see. It could get copied by some person with no originality, and then both of you'd get into trouble. Ask for people to volunteer to read it, them you can PM them.

    For what it's worth, I think the first one is better. Great first sentence, flows nicely. Like dimexi said, you need to tidy up the grammar a bit though.

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    (Original post by Madprof)
    Dude, it isn't really a good idea to post your ps up for all to see. It could get copied by some person with no originality, and then both of you'd get into trouble. Ask for people to volunteer to read it, them you can PM them.

    For what it's worth, I think the first one is better. Great first sentence, flows nicely. Like dimexi said, you need to tidy up the grammar a bit though.

    Sarah
    ok taken into consideration and removed, but i think most people have already applied along time ago. but better safe than sorry
    thanks for comments
 
 
 

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