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Hello I'm new I just joined you can call me Sarah by the way here's a good one......

*~*I'm not supposed to love you, I'm not supposed to care, I'm not supposed to live my life, wishing you were there. I'm not supposed to wonder where you are or what you do, I'm sorry I just can't help myself, I fell in love with *~*

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I cried reading it.
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pretty impressive....did u write it or copied it ???
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Pink pink

Hello I'm new I just joined you can call me Sarah by the way here's a good one......

*~*I'm not supposed to love you, I'm not supposed to care, I'm not supposed to live my life, wishing you were there. I'm not supposed to wonder where you are or what you do, I'm sorry I just can't help myself, I fell in love with *~*

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*******s - its called lust/infatuation and its a very feminised view created by our socialisation.
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*******s - its called lust/infatuation and its a very feminised view created by our socialisation.
i wouldn't go that far (i.e. callin it the rude word JSM used) but reading things like that does make my skin crawl. i hate reading other peoples feelings in poetry etc
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i wouldn't go that far (i.e. callin it the rude word JSM used) but reading things like that does make my skin crawl. i hate reading other peoples feelings in poetry etc
no, its not not good poetry, but its the sentiments expressed that i disagree with. In fact it is quite good poetry.
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alright

http://www.livejournal.com/userinfo....ajmgirlloveife

http://www.wright.edu/~wirick.5/

http://www.wright.edu/~wirick.5/
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no, its not not good poetry, but its the sentiments expressed that i disagree with. In fact it is quite good poetry.
i know its well written, i was just saying that the term you used to discuss the subject matter was rude and unfair. I think it is well written, but it's like when boybands sing impromptu on tv or to fans etc, you just feel all embaressed and like you really shouldn't be watching, or in this case reading it.
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*******s - its called lust/infatuation and its a very feminised view created by our socialisation.
prehaps, but if it makes people happy whats wrong with it? besides it is surely good even if you dont agree with the emotions expressed since they are a least expressed well (i suppose you acknowledge this when you said that you thought it was good poetry altho i not sure what you think of good poetry and to avoid bring this up i have made this point)
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You know they say love is an emotion created by chemistry in the brain perpetuated by sexual attraction - once that is gone there is only familiarity - and familiarity often breeds contempt - ergo similarly the reason we want to get away from our parents pretty damn quickly although they offer more in the way of emotional support as they are our blood relatives
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no, its not not good poetry, but its the sentiments expressed that i disagree with. In fact it is quite good poetry.
How is it good poetry??

Its cliched, has a childish rhyming scheme, an extreme lack of imagery, the sheer 'love' part of it comes across very badly etc.
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How is it good poetry??

Its cliched, has a childish rhyming scheme, an extreme lack of imagery, the sheer 'love' part of it comes across very badly etc.
most good poetry has a 'childish' rhyming scheme, although i agree with the second point.
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Pink pink

Hello I'm new I just joined you can call me Sarah by the way here's a good one......

*~*I'm not supposed to love you, I'm not supposed to care, I'm not supposed to live my life, wishing you were there. I'm not supposed to wonder where you are or what you do, I'm sorry I just can't help myself, I fell in love with *~*

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Well done, i bet you could sell that for millions.
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(Original post by rednirt)
i know its well written, i was just saying that the term you used to discuss the subject matter was rude and unfair. I think it is well written, but it's like when boybands sing impromptu on tv or to fans etc, you just feel all embaressed and like you really shouldn't be watching, or in this case reading it.
its not in any way rude, despite the fact, search for the first line and you find it millions of places, it would have been nice if it was attributed
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most good poetry has a 'childish' rhyming scheme, although i agree with the second point.
Do you study english? I certainly hope not if you think most good poetry has a childish rhyming scheme.

Take Eliot / Donne / Shakespeare / Marvell / Harrison / Plath etc.
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Do you study english? I certainly hope not if you think most good poetry has a childish rhyming scheme.

Take Eliot / Donne / Shakespeare / Marvell / Harrison / Plath etc.
i dropped english after GCSE because it is all about opinions and i tend to take the minority opinion, which is not good in english. Key word being MOST.
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something similar from the top right corner:
My soul is crushed, my spirit sore
I do not like me anymore,
I cavil, quarrel, grumble, grouse,
I ponder on the narrow house
I shudder at the thought of men
I'm due to fall in love again.
-- Dorothy Parker, "Enough Rope"
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This poem's nothing to do with love but I've had it in my head for more that ten years!

"I eat my peas with honey,
I've done it all my life,
It makes the peas taste funny,
But it keeps 'em on my knife."

I don't know who wrote it but I kinda like it in a weird/childish way (but I don't actually eat my peas with honey, thas just weird!)
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Do you study english? I certainly hope not if you think most good poetry has a childish rhyming scheme.

Take Eliot / Donne / Shakespeare / Marvell / Harrison / Plath etc.
very true... poems do not always have to rhyme to be beautiful/good. that 'poem' mentioned is most effective through it's repetition of words. and i think there is some imagery involved (not metaphorically) by using the language of 'life', 'love' and so on, showing how important the 'you' is.
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i dropped english after GCSE because it is all about opinions and i tend to take the minority opinion, which is not good in english. Key word being MOST.
Minority opinion is good in English! As long as you can back up your position, its fine. In fact if you ask me, a minority opinion is better, it demonstrates originality and perhaps a deeper insight, and if you can back it up with quotations etc. then examiners will definitely be impressed. Perhaps you should have taken English after all
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