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bigmouth1414
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my personal statement

I am applying for a degree in textiles because i am very interested in this subject. The structure of the degree courses at the universities I have chosen will give me a broad base from which I can specialise later.

I am really looking forward to studying textiles at universities and learning more and gaining more experiences. I enjoy being a creative but i am also a practical person. This is shown in my work.

I am currently at great Yarmouth College studying a foundation art and design course.iam a very hard working person and always give the best of my ability.
I am excited to be putting my theory into practice.

Outside hours of a typical college day, I take an interest in reading, drawing and listening to music. My other interests participating in clubs in which I often enjoy meeting new people and I participating enjoy visiting exhibitions.

My qualifications are a GNVQ Art and Design intermediate part 1 with key skills at level 2. I also have a BTEC national diploma in fashion and clothing.
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(Original post by bigmouth1414)
my personal statement

I am applying for a degree in textiles because i am very interested in this subject. The structure of the degree courses at the universities I have chosen will give me a broad base from which I can specialise later.

I am really looking forward to studying textiles at universities and learning more and gaining more experiences. I enjoy being a creative but i am also a practical person. This is shown in my work.

I am currently at great Yarmouth College studying a foundation art and design course.iam a very hard working person and always give the best of my ability.
I am excited to be putting my theory into practice.

Outside hours of a typical college day, I take an interest in reading, drawing and listening to music. My other interests participating in clubs in which I often enjoy meeting new people and I participating enjoy visiting exhibitions.

My qualifications are a GNVQ Art and Design intermediate part 1 with key skills at level 2. I also have a BTEC national diploma in fashion and clothing.
Just a suggestion, why not expand a little more on some of the paragraphs? e.g, where it says I enjoy being a creative but i am also a practical person. This is shown in my work. , give a couple of examples of how. Try to show your enthusiasm for the subject though the whole thing.
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(Original post by bigmouth1414)
my personal statement

I am applying for a degree in textiles because i am very interested in this subject. The structure of the degree courses at the universities I have chosen will give me a broad base from which I can specialise later.

I am really looking forward to studying textiles at universities and learning more and gaining more experiences. I enjoy being a creative but i am also a practical person. This is shown in my work.

I am currently at great Yarmouth College studying a foundation art and design course.iam a very hard working person and always give the best of my ability.
I am excited to be putting my theory into practice.

Outside hours of a typical college day, I take an interest in reading, drawing and listening to music. My other interests participating in clubs in which I often enjoy meeting new people and I participating enjoy visiting exhibitions.

My qualifications are a GNVQ Art and Design intermediate part 1 with key skills at level 2. I also have a BTEC national diploma in fashion and clothing.
try not to start all sentences with "I" and make the paragraphs longer, and perhaps use more sophisticated language?
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I'd try to work on your first sentence because they'll assume you're interested in textiles or you wouldnt be applying for a degree in it. Try to say why you're interested in the subject, tell them why you'd be dedicated to your subject and work hard at it.
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(Original post by bigmouth1414)
my personal statement

I am applying for a degree in textiles because i am very interested in this subject. The structure of the degree courses at the universities I have chosen will give me a broad base from which I can specialise later.

I am really looking forward to studying textiles at universities and learning more and gaining more experiences. I enjoy being a creative but i am also a practical person. This is shown in my work.

I am currently at great Yarmouth College studying a foundation art and design course.iam a very hard working person and always give the best of my ability.
I am excited to be putting my theory into practice.

Outside hours of a typical college day, I take an interest in reading, drawing and listening to music. My other interests participating in clubs in which I often enjoy meeting new people and I participating enjoy visiting exhibitions.

My qualifications are a GNVQ Art and Design intermediate part 1 with key skills at level 2. I also have a BTEC national diploma in fashion and clothing.

yeah dont use 'i' all the time. i think you would prob be best of starting with what courses you are studying and where, or why you are suited to the course, not just that you enjoy the subject. try to include as much extra-curricular info as poss as they love that sort of stuff. watch out for ur spelling and grammar too, great yarmouth needs to have a 'G' and a 'Y'. also, try and get a teacher or sumone to go over it. they may be able to help with sentence structure and extending it.
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maybe talk a bit about some of the artists/ designers who you like/ have influenced you? some particular techniques you feel you excel at? what you get your inspiration from? a particular project you really enjoyed and why? fill it out a bit!
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another thought- where you would like to take it after degree level - i.e. industrial textiles, theatre, cottage industry, independent artist etc
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(Original post by bigmouth1414)
my personal statement

I am applying for a degree in textiles because i am very interested in this subject. The structure of the degree courses at the universities I have chosen will give me a broad base from which I can specialise later.

I am really looking forward to studying textiles at universities and learning more and gaining more experiences. I enjoy being a creative but i am also a practical person. This is shown in my work.

I am currently at great Yarmouth College studying a foundation art and design course.iam a very hard working person and always give the best of my ability.
I am excited to be putting my theory into practice.

Outside hours of a typical college day, I take an interest in reading, drawing and listening to music. My other interests participating in clubs in which I often enjoy meeting new people and I participating enjoy visiting exhibitions.

My qualifications are a GNVQ Art and Design intermediate part 1 with key skills at level 2. I also have a BTEC national diploma in fashion and clothing.
Mayb you should give evidence that you are hardworking,give the best,etc to back up your statements.The overall statement doesn't seem like you are saying enough.Every bit of the statement should carry significant weight.This would convey a stronger sense of your potential,etc. Be more specific.What clubs?Any leadership positions in these clubs?Any specific exhibitions? What experiences/inspiration did you gain from these activities?
i'm guessing the grammar mistakes are just typos,carelessness, whatever
Anyways,just my suggestions.hope all goes well.g luck.
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I am applying for a degree in textiles because i am very interested in this subject. The structure of the degree courses at the universities I have chosen will give me a broad base from which I can specialise later.
Can't you write some thing like,
Textiles as an industry has always been of great interest to me, following designers such as... and an introductory bit about what you like about the Art world! etc

I am really looking forward to studying textiles at universities and learning more and gaining more experiences. I enjoy being a creative but i am also a practical person. This is shown in my work.
The subject areas that i have studied during my foundation course such as... have given me a broad perspective on how much enthusiasm and work goes into a degree in textiles. (mention skills that will benefit your course!)
I am currently at great Yarmouth College studying a foundation art and design course.iam a very hard working person and always give the best of my ability.
I am excited to be putting my theory into practice.
Your art course prob wasn't about theory... more of hands on design so mention more like, life drawing has improved my ability to record ideas,+ elaborate on the actual things that will benefit your course!


Outside hours of a typical college day, I take an interest in reading, drawing and listening to music. My other interests participating in clubs in which I often enjoy meeting new people and I participating enjoy visiting exhibitions.
Mention recent exhibitions that you have been to and what inspiration you got from them, designers that you aspire to may be good!
My qualifications are a GNVQ Art and Design intermediate part 1 with key skills at level 2. I also have a BTEC national diploma in fashion and clothing.
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all of the other stuff that people have said is true too!
I reckon that you can portray loads more enthusiasm on the ps...!
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