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    Hi everyone.

    I'm not doing RE as a full GCSE, but it is compulsory to do a half GCSE in it. At the end of Year 8 (Last year), I got a 6a. My target for the end of this Year is a 7a or a C at GCSE. I have a diary to write for homework, and I need a bit of help deciding what to write.

    Will I get downgraded if my writing quality isn't great but I still include everything needed?

    I have to write a diary extract as if I were a young Hindu in India. I have been asked to write it as if I'm a Kshatriya.

    I'm going to have to explain how I live my life, but how would I get this across in a Diary entry?

    I guess I could do like a regular day as one of their jobs and what they do and then write lots of thoughts and stuff?

    I'm not great at diaries. What would I do to definitely get a level 7a? If some of you could help, it would be great.

    Thank you. =)
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    if you want a good mark, research further via a real hindu or google. if you want to be funny however... just write "prayed today, no reply again"
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    I think what I'll do is write the diary on here a little later and then see what people think I need to add and improve on.
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    Here is my diary extract...

    I woke up with many thoughts and feelings swirling through my head. Some thoughts were great although some were dull and pressurising. I feel quite protected being in a Caste as we can't marry Hindus from other Castes or eat with them. Yeah, this is quite bad for socialising, but I do feel quite happy at times. On the other hand, I feel stressed out and pressured all the time as I, as a Kshatriya, have a responsibility when things go wrong in Society. I can't stand this! Why is it just one Caste that get's picked out to do such a thing. I think every Caste should be responsible for when something goes wrong as that would make it a lot more fairer. I also have to fight and protect people from harm (especially women, children and Brahmins). I feel quite scared when protecting the Brahmins as if I accidently do something wrong, I would feel rotten and bothered and annoyed. It feels good to know that we're trusted to protect them, but it's quite a responsibility and one that's hard.

    I go downstairs after having a bath, praying to symbolise purification of soul and preparing for work. My job is hard, and I struggle and get confused at times, although it's nice to see people around me helping me out when I'm in need. I want to change things in life, as prime minister, but I don't feel as though I should change Hinduism and the way we live. It wouldn't be right, and some people might not agree with my decisions and others would prefer to stick to tradition.

    Sitting down at work thinking about how I could change India, and how I could make it a higher class country is a hard thing to do. My mind tends to just drag away into it's own little world. It's hard to understand that everyone had different views on the Caste System, although this is probably because there are four different Varnas and each have different roles and responsibilities. The lower ranks like The Shudras are likely to think that it's unfair because they end up with all the rubbish jobs and duties that none of the other Castes have to do. They have to work as servants, which I'm sure they don't want to and also have to provide the needs of the people in higher Castes. On the other hand, higher ranks like The Brahmins may love the Caste system as they are the highest rank and are allowed to have the highest professions such as teachers and doctors. They are also highly respected as they are the highest rank and they study Hindu Scripture and set a good moral example for others. The Vaishyas and The Kshatriyas may have mixed feelings about the Caste system as they're in the middle so aren't the best nor the worst. I think though that every Caste is different and unique, and every Hindu should be proud of their Caste - whether it's the highest or the lowest, they should feel happy and secure. The untouchables which are not in a Caste, should not feel happy. They have usually done something very bad and they're everything no one wants to be. They're horrible beggars who cannot be touched.

    Later on, after a non-stop day of work, I get home and sit down ready for tea. I feel quite privileged being a Kshatriya as we're allowed to eat meat and drink alcohol. None of the other Castes can do this, so I kind of feel more special and unique. For tea, I'm having a lamb dinner with whilst looking at the candles celebrating Diwali (the festival of light) on the table. It's such a beautiful festival and is a prime festival of Hinduism.

    After all that, I manage to find some time to sit down and have a rest before praying and going to bed. The thoughts and feelings from the day tumble through my head one last time...

    So, do you have any improvements or good points for me? Tell me if I haven't included any of these: detail and explanation about how the caste lives their life, why some people think the caste system is a good thing for society and why others think it's unfair, and what I think.
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    ...Hello?? What do you people think?
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    (Original post by Dougieowner)
    Here is my diary extract...

    I woke up with many thoughts and feelings swirling through my head. Some thoughts were great although some were dull and pressurising (choice of word). I feel quite protected (same, maybe use "isolated" being in a Caste as we can't marry Hindus from other Castes or even everyday tasks like eating together. Yeah, this is quite bad for socialising, but I do feel quite happy at times. On the other hand, I feel stressed out and pressured all the time as I, as a Kshatriya, have a responsibility when things go wrong in Society. I can't stand this! Why is it just one Caste that get's picked out to do such a thing to do what thing?. I think every Caste should be equally responsible for when something goes wrong as that would make it a lot more fairer. I also have to fight and protect people from harm (especially women, children and Brahmins). I feel quite scared when protecting the Brahmins as if I accidently (spelling) do something wrong, I would feel rotten and (use a comma) bothered and annoyed. It feels good to know that we're trusted to protect them, but it's quite a responsibility and one that's hard.

    I go downstairs after having a bath, praying to symbolise purification of soul and preparing for work. (Sentence structure) My job (your job is?) is hard, and I struggle and get confused at times, although it's nice to see people around me helping me out when I'm in need. I want to change things in life, as prime minister, but I don't feel as though I should change Hinduism and the way we live. So what would you change?)It wouldn't be right, and some people might not agree with my decisions and others would prefer to stick to tradition.

    Sitting down at work thinking about how I could change India, and how I could make it a higher class (more developed?) country is a hard thing to do. My mind tends to just drag away into it's own little world. It's hard to understand that everyone had different views on the Caste System, although this is probably because there are four different Varnas and each have different roles and responsibilities. The lower ranks (castes) like The Shudras are likely to think that it's unfair because they end up with all the rubbish jobs and duties that none of the other Castes have to do. They have to work as servants, which I'm sure they don't want to and also have to provide the needs of the people in higher Castes. On the other hand, higher ranks like The Brahmins may love the Caste system as they are the highest rank and are allowed to have the highest professions such as teachers and doctors. They are also highly respected as they are the highest rank and they study the Hindu Scriptures and set a good moral example for others. The Vaishyas and The Kshatriyas may have mixed feelings about the Caste system as they're in the middle so aren't the best nor the worst. I think though that every Caste is different and unique, and every Hindu should be proud of their Caste - whether it's the highest or the lowest, t (New sentence)hey should feel happy and secure. The untouchables which are not in a Caste, should not feel happy. They have usually done something very bad and they're everything no one wants to be. They're horrible beggars who cannot be touched.

    Later on, after a non-stop day of work (you've said work for multiple paragraphs now), I get home and sit down ready for tea (evening dinner). I feel quite privileged being a Kshatriya as we're allowed to eat meat and drink alcohol. None of the other Castes can do this, so I kind of feel more special and unique. For tea, I'm having a lamb dinner with (remove) whilst looking at the candles celebrating Diwali (the festival of light) (you're a Hindu, you don't need to put the meaning translated in English) on the table. It's such a beautiful festival and is a prime festival of Hinduism.

    After all that, I manage to find some time to sit down and have a rest before praying and going to bed. The thoughts and feelings from the day tumble through my head one last time...

    So, do you have any improvements or good points for me? Tell me if I haven't included any of these: detail and explanation about how the caste lives their life, why some people think the caste system is a good thing for society and why others think it's unfair, and what I think.
    I've made my points.
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    You wrote in present tense, yet you're writing about past events.
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    Thank you for your help and comments. I'm going to edit now and also make sure it's changed to Past Tense.

    I'm just wondering, as it's a Diary, do I need to have it in Present Tense as aren't diaries wrote as you go along?
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    (Original post by Dougieowner)
    Thank you for your help and comments. I'm going to edit now and also make sure it's changed to Past Tense.

    I'm just wondering, as it's a Diary, do I need to have it in Present Tense as aren't diaries wrote as you go along?
    I think your diary entry is over a span of 1-3 days? Something like that.

    So it is appropriate to write it in the past tense as you contemplate over issues and wait till the "end" to make your entry.
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    tehforum - My diary entry is actually only one day. It's kind of wrote as though I'm writing in my free time during the day and stuff. =)
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    (Original post by Dougieowner)
    Hi everyone.

    I'm not doing RE as a full GCSE, but it is compulsory to do a half GCSE in it. At the end of Year 8 (Last year), I got a 6a. My target for the end of this Year is a 7a or a C at GCSE. I have a diary to write for homework, and I need a bit of help deciding what to write.

    Will I get downgraded if my writing quality isn't great but I still include everything needed?

    I have to write a diary extract as if I were a young Hindu in India. I have been asked to write it as if I'm a Kshatriya.

    I'm going to have to explain how I live my life, but how would I get this across in a Diary entry?

    I guess I could do like a regular day as one of their jobs and what they do and then write lots of thoughts and stuff?

    I'm not great at diaries. What would I do to definitely get a level 7a? If some of you could help, it would be great.

    Thank you. =)

    I should point out that your day (according to the extract) is excessively preoccupied with caste. (I am not sure Hindus even think of caste on a regular basis). In any case, you must understand that caste has nothing to do with Hinduism. It is a phenomenon that has become ingrained in Indian culture over thousands of years (and as a result is erroneously associated with Hinduism). Hindu’s, however, do have the concept of Varna (from which the concept of caste has evolved). Indeed in ancient times this created a four part social structure. In order to understand why this was necessary you need to understand a little more about Hindu Dharma:

    (1) The ultimate aim in Hinduism is to achieve Moksha (release from bondage or Samsara - the cycle of life). [Hindu’s do not believe in salvation since our view is that the soul is eternal]

    (2) Moksha is achievable through three means:

    a. Karma Yoga (Karma this for our purpose may be defined as the totality of good and bad deeds over all lives). Therefore this process involves the achievement of Moksha though selfless activity

    b. Bhakti Yoga (Bhakti is simply selfless devotion)

    c. Jnana Yoga (Jnana means knowledge of The Self)

    Note that all three means of achieving Moksha involve the destruction of ego (“I”) or Aham in Sanskrit. In fact rituals in Hinduism are designed to focus symbolically on Atma (the soul) (and activate the path towards involution).

    Since your diary is about caste let us focus on Karma and why Varnasrama (the classification of society into strata) is meant to enable Hindu’s to achieve Moksha. How is this possible? Well, let’s consider this in the context of the diary extract that you are currently writing. Hindus’ would state that you are not the doer. That is this belief that the diary is written, and the distinction between the writer and the written, is a function of Maya. That is to say, the belief that you are the doer is a product of ignorance i.e. ego. [In fact Hindu’s may argue that an essential part of evolutionary biology is the creation of this ego].

    By dividing tasks across four strata and then subdividing the tasks within the strata the objective was (and is) to enable each person who performs his or her task to focus on the activity selflessly and ultimately through this process recognise that he or she is not the doer. [Note that Hinduism created the strata on the basis of inherent mental capacity and not necessarily on the basis of family lineage].

    Hindu Upanishads make the case more powerfully; the Upanishads universally state that all activities are transient and therefore ultimately unreal.

    All of this ofcourse must raise many more questions than it answers but there is at least one that is relevant to your original post. Where does this accumulated Karma reside? Hindus believe that the empirical universe (i.e. pertaining to information from observation, experiment and experience) is accompanied by a non-empirical universe in binary configuration. Similarly conscious entities throughout the universe are part of a binary embrace involving a physical body (Sthula sharira) and a subtle body (Linga sharira). Accumulated Karma attaches to this subtle structure and, in doing so, enforces its reincarnation. This we believe will continue as long as there is ignorance of the Self (and therefore as long as there is the false recognition that “I” am the doer).

    The ultimate irony is that the very purpose for which Varna was created has been inverted – that is to say the caste system, and its repercussions to which you have alluded above, arise as a result of the false ego that Varnasrama was meant to eliminate!

    Consumption of meat and alcohol:

    Hindu’s (regardless of “caste”) are recommended to be vegetarians and avoid alcohol. Perhaps you can look at the following:

    http://www.sivananda.org/teachings/p...hreegunas.html

    Daily routines (Pancha Maha Yagna):

    http://www.hindunet.org/day_as_hindu...aha_yagnas.htm

    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Puja_(Hinduism)

    http://www.hinduism.co.za/tilak.htm

    I have no idea whether any of the above made any sense but I do think it is important to understand some of the concepts to give your diary extract an air of authenticity. I think a visit to the above sites might help in this regard.

    Best of luck
 
 
 
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