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The emotional but inevitable Farewell to my Fringe Watch

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    You may have seen my dilemma last night.

    Every woman, and no doubt some men, go through the heartbreak and fear at least once in their life, when they have to wave goodbye to a hairstyle that they once loved, and grew comfortable with.

    Today, I took the first step in my journey of commitment to growing out my full fringe.

    This poem is an Ode, a Eulogy, a Goodbye, to my full fringe.


    Farewell, my Fringe,
    You’ve served me fine,
    Four years you’ve sat
    Upon my hairline.
    You’ve framed my face
    Like a window display,
    But now you must leave,
    You cannot stay.

    When you’re good you’re the best
    When you’re bad you’re a burden;
    It’s time to remove
    My beloved curtains.

    In a slight gust of wind
    You part like the red sea
    But you’re a saviour for no one
    Just embarrassment for me.
    When I put off a trim
    For just a week or two
    You have a swift growth spurt
    And obstruct my view.

    What’s a life with a hair do
    That controls every day?
    How can I still love you
    When our love makes me pay?
    Don’t resent me, dear Fringe,
    For forcing you to grow,
    We both know this is best
    Though painful and slow.

    Things will get worse
    Before they improve,
    For wounds must be opened
    Before they’ll be soothed.
    But believe me, old friend,
    This I’m doing for us both,
    Farewell to my Fringe,
    Once loved but now loathed.
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    Hi,
    First of all thanks for posting this rather entertaining look at getting one's hair cut. I rather enjoyed reading this poem. It's funny, entertaining, but also has a great deal of emotion to it so it's got great balance. I would look to rework the third verse because metrically it seems a little off to me and loses that frothy quality which makes this poem quite light and funny. The final line is a little underwhelming, but I like the word play, but perhaps you could find another way to do this.

    A great poem and with a few tweaks, this could be an excellent poem.

    I look forward to reading your future work,

    toronto353
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    (Original post by toronto353)
    Hi,
    First of all thanks for posting this rather entertaining look at getting one's hair cut. I rather enjoyed reading this poem. It's funny, entertaining, but also has a great deal of emotion to it so it's got great balance. I would look to rework the third verse because metrically it seems a little off to me and loses that frothy quality which makes this poem quite light and funny. The final line is a little underwhelming, but I like the word play, but perhaps you could find another way to do this.

    A great poem and with a few tweaks, this could be an excellent poem.

    I look forward to reading your future work,

    toronto353
    Hi toronto,

    thanks for the feedback - I feel that yet again you have hit the nail on the head! the third verse was a bit bulky and I've removed or had a shuffle around with one or two lines already - I think it sounds a bit better now.

    I'll have a look at the ending also
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    (Original post by sammy-lou)
    Hi toronto,

    thanks for the feedback - I feel that yet again you have hit the nail on the head! the third verse was a bit bulky and I've removed or had a shuffle around with one or two lines already - I think it sounds a bit better now.

    I'll have a look at the ending also
    I think that the third and fourth verses are still a little bulky and you're welcome, but as I always say, without the work, there's nothing for me to review so I should be thanking you all.
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    (Original post by sammy-lou)
    Hi toronto,

    thanks for the feedback - I feel that yet again you have hit the nail on the head! the third verse was a bit bulky and I've removed or had a shuffle around with one or two lines already - I think it sounds a bit better now.

    I'll have a look at the ending also
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    hahaha loved the poem!!! lol made my night
    and i can totally relate x
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    (Original post by Joey_jo)
    hahaha loved the poem!!! lol made my night
    and i can totally relate x
    haha i'm glad you liked it!
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    Sammy-lou have you considered taking this poem to Edinburgh... to The Fringe ?
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    (Original post by the bear)
    Sammy-lou have you considered taking this poem to Edinburgh... to The Fringe ?
    Haha. I LOVE Edinburgh Fringe!
 
 
 
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