Rejected P.S. and Reference Watch

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Below is my P.S. n reference which got rejected few days back from LSE ...
but lyk as a matter of fact ..im kinda surprised that they have considered for so long..since i had 2 of the subjects on which r on the black list of LSE...i av 4 totaL...
anyways i just wanted to share it with u guys n wanted to teLL aLL those who are gonna apply next yr.. that dnt write a P.S. lyk that

Having been born into a family where education is given primary importance, I developed an early aptitude and liking towards studies. Learning, as I have been taught, is the first step towards success and this notion has been a great motivation and driving force for all my endeavors. Throughout my academic career, I have been amongst the top few students of my class, and it was during my O-level that I began to develop a special liking to the subject of Economics. Upon completing my O-level, I opted for an internship at Zillion Exports and soon discovered that it was indeed the field of Economics in which my interest lay. There I learnt that the knowledge of the policies and mechanisms of Economics is what affects the progress of an economy and how the proper application of this knowledge can do wonders. Macroeconomic stability not only inspired me but also forced me to accept the challenge of opting for an altogether new subject for my A-level studies.
Fortunately, I was quick enough to grasp the fundamental concepts of Economics and relate matters to them. Within a short span of time, it became clear to me that Economics, in my country, has yet to be fully recognized as an important driving force behind success, on a personal and collective level. Therefore, it became my ever-growing passion to enhance my knowledge of Economics so that in the future I could help instill improved and efficient decision making into our relatively stagnant economy.
On a personal note, I shifted to Resource Academia after completing my first year of A-level from University College Lahore (UCL). Outside of college, I have enjoyed and learned from the experience of managing a number of events: plays, concerts, movies and sports tournaments and most recently the infamous play ‘The Godfather’ for which I was the Assistant Producer. For two years, I was an elected Moderator of the Business Section of a local forum on the Worldwide Web to which almost one thousand O/A Level student members belonged. Feeling strongly for the poor, I also completed 120 hours of volunteer work this past summer monitoring the satisfaction level of patients at the Shaukat Omar Hospital in Karachi. This helped me become a better person, emotionally and morally. My hands on experience showed me what a struggle life is for the poor and do we more privileged want to bring a change for the better to their lives.
I have engaged myself in a wide range of sporting activities throughout my school years. My main interest, however, lies in soccer. I have had the honour of being part of the UCL swimming team and representing both the UCL soccer team as Vice Captain (going on to win a cup) and the Model Town Football Club at the District Level. Furthermore, after winning the Chess Ladder Tournament held at UCL, I was selected to represent the UCL Chess Team as Captain in later tournaments. I believe that I am privileged to have been blessed with such opportunities that have provided me with the valuable learning experiences of managing and leading a group of people while working as a unified team. It has helped me to mature my communication skills and understanding with those whom I interact. Over time, I have also learned to strike a balance between my extra-curricular and academic activities which has helped me to ensure that equal time is given to all my subjects. Such balance has enhanced my capacity to carry out different tasks efficiently and in an organized manner.
After being formally introduced to the education system of the UK in my O-Level, I was deeply impressed. Its prestigious institutions and their quality education with the focused and thorough approach to analytical thinking have always appealed to me. I desire that this progressive growth be continued in higher education. Where better can it be enhanced than in a UK University of repute? This, I know, will not only prepare me for the occupational and practical world ahead, but for a bright future too.


and this is my reference

I have known Ahsan Ali Rai as his A Level Economics teacher at Resource Academia. Ahsan ranks in the top 5% of the class. His medium of instruction was English and he had a good command over the language. Ahsan is a consistent, serious student. His approach towards studies is very focused and thorough. At times though it may be better for him to be a bit less clinical and more relaxed. Nevertheless, he holds a holistic approach to life and indulges in extra-curricular activities as well. His exceptional talent of soccer is worth mentioning.

Besides being intelligent, Ahsan is both creative and independent. He can take initiatives and has unbounded capacity to work. In class Ahsan prefers not to lead class discussions and come out with his comments once he has viewed the arguments floated for and against a particular proposition. However, he never waffles his way through an argument. His concepts are crystal clear and his supporting arguments well reasoned and comprehensive. His analytical skills are incisive and he is not afraid to take sides in an argument and to strongly defend such a stance. However, his maturity shows in that he is always willing to accept a superior argument purely on logical terms.

Ahsan’s assignment work is exemplary. His assignments display extensive research and reading and clear explanations of concepts by giving applied examples. In fact his approach does justice to the aims of the A Level syllabus in that economic concepts are not viewed only as theoretical constructs but as explanations of the functioning of the world around us. Based on his academic keenness and diverse knowledge base, I appointed him as the Head Researcher of the “New Murree Project”. Ahsan is surely capable and prepared to transfer what he has learnt to practical situations. He is a very likeable fellow and works well in both groups and as an individual.

In the final analysis I feel that students like Ahsan do not come by on a regular basis. Ahsan displays great zeal and enthusiasm in all spheres of work and this would help him greatly in his future endeavors. He is exceptional, in many respects. And I would expect him to hone his brilliance as time goes by.
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Sorry to hear about the rejection. But yes, it's stunning to have made it so far with two blacklisted subjects - that's an achievement itself. :P

Apart from having two blacklisted subjects, I guess you might have been rejected because you've talked about yourself too much. Your personal statement is mostly about your achievements and not so much about your love for economics.
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hmm...watever the reason was.....i dont think that wud make any difference now....
yeah n thats y im teLLing aLL u guys not to write a P.S. lyk that ...
n i had 5 subjects A-Levels....URDU i already gave n got an A in that but its not considered as its my nationaL language.....n rest were MATHS ECO ACC. n BUSI ST.....i think the last 2 subjects did aLL this for me ..
LoLz..yeah my application has gne far ...applied in dec. 16th
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I am sorry to hear that. you are a good applicant indeed. n where else did you apply to? How do you get on with those uni? I think you are fine.
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Lol your PS sounds so intelligent. My PS is nowhere near as close to yours. I dont have so much outside activities. My school is failing miserably with activities. We dont have a single sports team in my sixth form. My comiserations! I am waiting for my rejection too.
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Sorry to hear about your rejection but how do you know your PS was the reason behind your rejection? I personally think your A-level subjects may have played a greater part in LSE's decision than your PS.
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to be fair economics at LSE is one of the most competitive courses in the UK and his PS wasn't *that* great...seemed a bit jumbled...the reference was good...but he did have blacklisted subjects- prob the most important thing
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I have no idea why I was rejected, I haven't fallen into any of the obvious pitfalls. My school want to get in touch with LSE for feedback as to why I was rejected, but I don't think they'd actually say anything constructive: "intense competition" is all I'd get back I imagine (not that I don't believe that there was intense competition). It's annoying, as I spent so much time on my PS / UCAS form and getting the right grades in the right subjects.......oh well
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I have just skimmed your PS as it is too long,but still i would like to highlight your major mistake.........
This PS would have worked,if you were considering American universities that count your extra curricular,social activities etc.But,English Universities look more into dedication and motivation for the particular subject ,that your PS was lacking.

By the way,Me from Pakistan too.
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weLL .. aLL my efforts over UCAS thng has gne to waste ....
yeah i shud av made my P.S. a bit more gud....but i got it proof read from my principal even..n she lyked it.....anyways...n use crying over spilt miLk ...

my rest of the Uniz are...
UCL L100... offered AAA
WARWICK L100...Pending ..they asked for confirmation from my refernce
NOTTINGHAM .. L100 AAA/AABB
Manchester Uni. L100 ABB/BBB
Birmingham Uni. L100 ABB

n oFcourse the great LSE.... UNSUCCEEFUL ...

i shud av had Physics and Further instead of Acc. n Business....urghhhhh
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^ no offence but looking at (and trying to comprehend) the post above, I find it hard to believe how you could write a personal statement like the one you've posted
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$ ...
i type fast ....
n hardLy look over what i typed.....
thanku very much
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At least you've still got UCL and Nottingham, which are really good universities.
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I'm surprised by the structure of the PS. It has almost nothing to do with Economics. Still, UCL is alright
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Your PS would have gotten you a place if you had traditional 'A' level subjects. But with only 2 of 'em, this hardly comes as a surprise.
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(Original post by Knogle)
Your PS would have gotten you a place if you had traditional 'A' level subjects. But with only 2 of 'em, this hardly comes as a surprise.
I think that's a bit much to say. The personal statement is a bit too jumbled and vague; it's alright, but hardly stellar.
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(Original post by zxczxc)
I think that's a bit much to say. The personal statement is a bit too jumbled and vague; it's alright, but hardly stellar.
Alright is enough if the grades are good and the student pays the big £££.

(he said controversially)
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(Original post by President_Ben)
I'm surprised by the structure of the PS. It has almost nothing to do with Economics. Still, UCL is alright
I'm sorry to get into this again, but UCL only alright?
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(Original post by President_Ben)
Alright is enough if the grades are good and the student pays the big £££.

(he said controversially)
And he said seemingly quite correctly, too.
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