help wit my psWatch
Because Im only doing 1 A level.
hey. Im applying for a diploma course in nursing, just wondered if anyone can help improve my personal statement - as I know its pretty crap atm.
Here's what I got so far:
In choosing what may be a worthwhile ..........study the Nursing Science course. The experience of working in a hospital in a city environment is something I look forward to, as well as contributing to university life.
hey. i read this over and i think it's good. however i think you should perhaps (see what other people think too coz im not sure) rework the 1st paragraph a bit. it sounds like you're applying to this course simply for a good chance of a job and money after (im not saying that you are) but that's what it sounds like and even if its true, perhaps make it more that you want to nurse and the fact that the nhs has so many oppurtunities...you know? let me know what you think. dearyxxx
I mean, if i was a university tutor selecting cadidates, i would rather reject someone who wants to come on the nursing course, simply because of the motive of getting a job straight away. It is your job to show them that your desire, (which you have done quite well) is to do nursing "for the sake of nursing!"
I may be wrong in what i say, and i am sure others will help you to the best personal statement possible.