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I'm doing a story in English and I'm writing about a guy who has agoraphobia (phobia of leaving a safe place eg. Home) anyway at the begining he's standing infront of the door and for the first sentence I put 'I've been here many tomes before' and then I want to start describing the door but I don't know how to start the description, I was hoping you guys could help me.

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Once upon a time there was a door...
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Erm you could start by maybe exaggerating how it seems to him, like a massive, tall wall, locking him out of the outside world. It depends how you want to describe the door, if you want to make it something negative in relation to him, you could maybe compare it to the Berlin Wall? How its got the better of him many times before? Also, you could maybe mention something about all the people who have gone through before him, all the lives who have passed through it and he only has to make a giant leap of courage to traverse it also?

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Use loads of hyperbole. Talk about how the door handle has teeth, how each little grain that makes up the door is staring at him, inducing fear. How the blackness that seeps through the gaps is reaching out to him, trying to find him.
Just some ideas: be creative
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Thank you The ideas are really helpful

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The door was brown. That is all.


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The door was brown. That is all.


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Wow, that's just screaming A* isn't it?

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talk about what the door represents to him, being agoraphobic, i.e. the contrast of it being scary for him but the way to freedom for everyone else. Talk about him feeling the handle, the potential it holds as an object for him to leave his house etc. I would try to connect his emotions to what the door represents to him...

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talk about what the door represents to him, being agoraphobic, i.e. the contrast of it being scary for him but the way to freedom for everyone else. Talk about him feeling the handle, the potential it holds as an object for him to leave his house etc. I would try to connect his emotions to what the door represents to him...

hope this helps
That was actually really helpful, thank you!

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Wow, that's just screaming A* isn't it?

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Well, if this is for GCSE, then there's more than a good chance that it deserves the A* grade.


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Oh yeah does this sentence make sense 'My feelings are juxtapose; I feel free, finally in control but the fear of leaving my sanctuary still succumbs me' I don't know :/

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The door was all that stood in my way, shielding me from the perilous and almost alien world beyond its thick oaken panels. My hands trembling, I guided my finger ever so slowly around the delicate arched etchings along the top of the door. My hands began to sweat and my breath loudened - why is it all so disquieting! Its golden hinge, dusty and worn, glowed with proud age as I admired the technical intricacies in its ornate structure - once again I was distracting myself. I started and glared directly at my tantalizing egress, my long tormentor, my ancient foe. Dare I choose to liberate myself from this anxious state of introverted woe? Or more to the point, can I?

:pierre:

*cue applause* *cue female screams* *cue crying* *cue the throwing of roses*

OPTIONAL MUSIC TO SET THE SCENE - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DUT5rEU6pqM - note this music was intended for comedic effect, it is in fact horrendous when paired with the tale of the man and the door
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Oh yeah does this sentence make sense 'My feelings are juxtapose; I feel free, finally in control, but the fear of leaving my sanctuary still succumbs me' I don't know :/

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I'm not sure about juxtapose, just doesn't quite sound right, how about ambivalent? And an extra comma is needed
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Oh yeah does this sentence make sense 'My feelings are juxtapose; I feel free, finally in control but the fear of leaving my sanctuary still succumbs me' I don't know :/

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If you change juxtapose to juxtaposed and say 'the fear of leaving my sanctuary still overcomes (overpowers?) me' it would make more sense, but I feel it might work better if you just say his feelings are conflicting rather than juxtaposed.
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The door was all that stood in my way, shielding me from the perilous and almost alien world beyond its thick oaken panels. My hands trembling, I guided my finger ever so slowly around the delicate arched etchings along the top of the door. My hands began to sweat and my breath loudened - why is it all so disquieting! Its golden hinge, dusty and worn, glowed with proud age as I admired the technical intricacies in its ornate structure - once again I was distracting myself. I started and glared directly at my tantalizing egress, my long tormentor, my ancient foe. Dare I choose to liberate myself from this anxious state of introverted woe? Or more to the point, can I?

:pierre:

*cue applause* *cue female screams* *cue crying* *cue the throwing of roses*

OPTIONAL MUSIC TO SET THE SCENE - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DUT5rEU6pqM

p.s. don't listen to these english/english lit **** - I'm a scientist and I just owned this ****
Wow. That was AmAZinG!

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If you change juxtapose to juxtaposed and say 'the fear of leaving my sanctuary still overcomes (overpowers?) me' it would make more sense, but I feel it might work better if you just say his feelings are conflicting rather than juxtaposed.
Yeah I'll change it, I didn't think I made sense haha

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what if the door was not something to be scared of but something to be exited about only its locked. how would you describe it then?
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Use loads of hyperbole. Talk about how the door handle has teeth, how each little grain that makes up the door is staring at him, inducing fear. How the blackness that seeps through the gaps is reaching out to him, trying to find him.
Just some ideas: be creative
This was very helpful, thank you very much
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The old oak door stood tall towering over me, as I reached out to grab the rusted handle, the door opened hardly sending out a loud ear piercing creek from it's hinges. Allowing me to see the black emptiness behind the door that is now wide. I walked forward carefully pulling the door close behind me with another deafening creek as the lightly lightened room turned nightly once more.


That's a way, cause I'm writing a short story and that's a way how I'd describe a door.
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