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Hi there, my name's Bobby Singh. Just did a mock essay for the January exam I got soon, I would highly appreciate your thoughts and opinions!
Any criticism would be much appreciated! Spent 45 minutes.

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Bob

[0|4] The World's Wife - Carol Ann Duffy H/JAN11/LTA1C
01/01/2013
"Hell have no fury like a women scored."
How far do you agree that Duffy presents only angry women in the collection?
Refer to three poems in detail. (45 Marks)

Throughout Carol Ann Duffy's collection "The World's Wife", Duffy presents aggressive and unsatisfied women due to their male partners being obnoxious.

In Queen Herod, Duffy explores her views of feminism, she stresses the inadequacies women incur within society. This is supported in the third stanza through Duffy's use of simile; "a star in the East - a new star pierced through the night like a nail.", Duffy depicts the biblical story of Jesus' birth however endorsing her own views by replacing the new born son Jesus, with a vulnerable daughter; "no man, I swore, will make her shed one tear", Duffy depicts three "queens" ironically replacing the three kings in Jesus' biblical story, who instead of giving the gifts of myrrh, frankincense, and gold with "grace, strength and happiness". Duffy presents the Queens to eradicate the potential threat the destined male-born child will bring to her new-born daughter, the Queen's "do our best" as "mothers" to eradicate the threat of men by having "men and horses, knives, swords" to "spare not one" male new-born child who would later harm her daughter.

Similarly in Duffy's "Little Red Cap", Duffy retells the child-hood story of "Little Red Riding hood". Duffy's use of emotive language "at childhood's end" connotes that the female character "little red cap" has entered the phase of adolescence. Duffy depicts little red cap encountering a "wolf" who "in his drawl, a paperback in his hairy paw", is a poet. The tragedy in which little red cap experiences of "sweet sixteen... my first" her sexual encounter with this male character resulted in her own poetic voice "dove" in which Duffy's metaphor connotes, gets devoured by the animal of a partner that Duffy depicts. Similarly to Queen Herod, little red cap "took an axe to the wolf" and eradicated the inconvenience of hr partner as he later after "ten years" forced her into the stereo-typical female domestic role "breakfast in bed", clearly Duffy is addressing her views of obnoxious men and the tragedy they are capable of bring about which fundamentally causes their aggression.

it may be argued that Duffy is voicing her opinions of obnoxious men in their lives. It may be argued that Duffy is addressing female inadequacies. This is further established in Duffy's poem "Mrs Sisyphus". Duffy's first stanza supports the frustration men bring generate within relationships; "that's him pushing the stone up the hill, the jerk." Duffy's use of emotive language "jerk" connote that the frustration women feel when their partner doesn't show their love and affection. It may be interpreted that Duffy is addressing the frustrations of relationships in the twenty-first century society, as men "the jerk" are stereo-typically at work and do not take the time and courtesy to enjoy their relationship. Further into Duffy's poem "Mrs Sisyphus" Duffy's use of frustrated tone "when you haven't the time to pop open a cork" in the second stanza supports that women throughout centuries in which Duffy's poems are based upon, men have always caused frustration to women due to their obnoxious and careless behaviour.

In addition within Duffy's poem "Queen Herod", Duffy depicts an aggressive women who feels as if the male sex is a contribution towards women's progressive aggression within relationships. Duffy depicts Queen Herod's husband as a "fusty bulk", she further disregards his presence within the poem. The image Duffy endorses of Queen Herod's husband "Herod's fusty bulk" supports that men are regarded as a nuisance to women as their obnoxious behaviour infuriated women throughout all of history. This is further supported in Duffy's poem "Mrs Sisyphus" through Duffy's use of rhyming couplets; "jerk, kirk, irk, birk, dirk", this may infer that the couple Mr and Mrs Sisyphus are deteriorating as the male partner depicted in the poem is "pushing the stone up the hill" similarly to how the male character was punished by the Greek God and forced to spend eternity pushing a rock up the hill, which could allude to the men in the twenty-first century society as they spend they are the source for women's frustration and aggression due to their absence within their relationship "he is giving one hundred percent and more to his work" and their inability to love as women do, which subsequently causes them to become frustrated and progressively aggressive.

Conclusively Carol Ann Duffy presents women in her collection "The World's wife" in the poems "Queen Herod", "Little Red Cap", and "Mrs Sisyphus" as women who are frustrated with the obnoxious behaviour men consist of and their carless nature which fundamentally fuels their frustration and causes them to become aggressive.