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    Could you read my summary, check how I have done, what to improve/ is it bad-good ? etc What mark will I get, Is it B grade /C/A grade. Thanks, would like to read your advises and comments. Read Passage A carefully, and then answer Questions 1 and 2.
    Climbing the Nose of El Capitan
    Dean Potter is a famous rock climber whose speciality is speed. He often refuses to use any climbing equipment, relying only on his agility and lack of fear. This is Rob Buchanan’s account of watching Dean and his partner O’Neill climb one of the most difficult mountain faces in America.
    “Three, two, one, go!” Dean Potter punches a button on a plastic wristwatch looped around his climbing harness. His partner leaps at the rock before him, jamming freshly taped fingers into a slender crack. Above them, soaring into an azure sky, is the great, granite, curved wall of the most famous climb in Yosemite Valley (or indeed the world): the Nose of El Capitan. Climbers either fear or loathe it, but all of them respect anyone who has the ability to negotiate its incredibly difficult layout. After a gruelling vertical climb of over 2,000 feet, the rock face begins to curve out above the climbers – indeed like the underside of a large nose – and they must attempt to overcome this overhanging shelf in order to get to the top.
    Potter often climbs without the benefit of ropes or protection, but on this late autumn day their goal is speed, so the two are carrying hardware. Still, by any sane standard, they’re ridiculously under- equipped: no packs, no shirts, no food and no water. A single 200-foot length of rope between them, plus a handful of spring-loaded devices to be placed in cracks for protection, are their only concessions to safety. Even Potter’s climbing harness is minimalistic: a homemade thing fashioned from 11/16 inch webbing and stitched together with dental floss.
    Potter doesn’t wait for his partner to reach the safety of the permanent metal peg at the top of the first stage, but instead starts climbing straight away. This is a risky procedure, but it’s the fastest way to climb. Five minutes later, the two are already 200 feet up, and my neck is sore just from watching them. As I back away from the Nose to get a better view, I hear it – a horrible scrabbling of hands and feet on rock, followed by a desperate yell: “Falling!” Looking up, I see O’Neill dropping through space, arms flailing, legs splaying like a manic puppet out of control. Suddenly, he jerks to a stop. This puppet now looks as though someone, out of pity, has cut all of his strings except one, and he hangs there, stunned, after plunging more than 25 feet. I can’t believe he hasn’t hit the bottom.
    There’s a moment’s silence. Potter has arrested his partner’s fall by holding on to the rope from his position 70 feet below. The bass boom of his voice echoes off the great sounding board of El Capitan. “Go!” he yells. “Get back on it! Go! Go! Go!”
    The intensity is startling. Potter is normally a very calm person, slow talking and sometimes painfully shy. One man who knows him well, his promotions manager, calls him ‘a gentle giant’. In Patagonia, he has a different nickname: Tarzan. Potter says that’s because of the monosyllabic way he speaks Spanish when he’s on an expedition in Argentina. Maybe, but the name seems to capture a lot of Potter’s other qualities too. With his wide-set brown eyes, prominent and slightly battered-looking nose, tumbling mane and barrel chest, he could be the original Tarzan come back to life: a brooding inhabitant of the wild who is occasionally roused to fantastic bouts of action and daring stunts.
    Whether propelled by Potter’s war cry or his own desire to get back on solid ground, O’Neill surges his way upward, simultaneously pulling himself hand over hand and ‘walking’ up the cliff.
    © UCLES 2011 0500/21/M/J/113
    Tiny, distant figures now, Potter and O’Neill swarm up the face. Sometimes they almost seem to be running, gaining speed with each step, springing past obstacles that every rock climber knows by heart. A little before noon they reach the final wall, rhythmically snapping their metal clips to the last string of metal pegs placed by Warren Harding on his laborious 45-day first ascent completed in 1958. A minute later they disappear over the top.
    “Three hours and twenty four minutes,” I mutter to myself as I look at my watch in disbelief. “Incredible!”
    1 Imagine that you are the reporter, Rob Buchanan. You interview Dean Potter after the climb and ask the following questions:
    • Incredible! How did you manage to climb the face so quickly?
    • How do you answer people who say that what you do is foolish?
    • Can you tell us about your relationship with your climbing partner, O’Neill?
    Write the words of the interview.
    Base your interview on what you have read in Passage A and be careful to use your own words.
    Write between 11⁄2 and 2 sides, allowing for the size of your handwriting.
    Up to fifteen marks are available for the content of your answer, and up to five marks for the quality of your writing.
    2 Re-read the descriptions of:
    (a) O’Neill’s fall in paragraph 3;
    (b) Dean Potter in paragraph 5.
    Select words and phrases from these descriptions, and explain how the writer has created effects by using this language.
    [Total: 10]
    [Turn over for Part 2]
    [Total: 20]
    © UCLES 2011 0500/21/M/J/11 [Turn over
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    Passage B
    Part 2 Read Passage B carefully and re-read Passage A.
    Then answer Question 3, which is based on both passages.
    Paintballing – a birthday treat?
    Recently, for my birthday, my teenage children ceremoniously handed me an ordinary envelope and urged, “Open it quick!” A postcard-sized coupon dropped out, and on it was an invitation to ‘Come Along and Blast Your Cares Away!’, accompanied by a cartoon drawing of a person in combat uniform, armed with a large rifle. The image unsettled me. Had my offspring signed me up for the army as a birthday treat? I looked at their laughing faces as the eldest declared, “It’s a morning’s paintball session, Mum! Don’t worry. Dad will explain everything on the way to the venue this afternoon.” I was soon to discover what this birthday ‘treat’ was all about, and pretended to play along enthusiastically with everyone else’s excitement.
    “Don’t worry, I’ve already checked this place out,” my husband said, once we were in the car. “Paintball is good fun, but it’s also a game of action and skill. Families, friends and even work colleagues are organised into teams. Each team has a different colour paint to fire at their opponents, and the object of the game is a make-believe battle where everyone tries to ‘hit’ the other side whilst avoiding getting hit themselves. The winner is the last person standing.”
    ‘What else could I be doing on my birthday?’ I thought, as we sped on.
    Arriving at the paintball site, a sprawling area of woodland with a log cabin used as an office, we were ushered in and had to fill out medical forms which checked we were fit and healthy. Then we were given our protective clothing and headgear, which included an eye mask. Our guide told us, “Every manufactured paintball mask must be made to withstand a paintball travelling at least 300 feet per second – that’s about 205 miles per hour – so you don’t have to worry.” I was already wondering how much a paintball travelling at that speed would hurt the rest of my body and began to regret my earlier bravado. Reading my thoughts, my husband started quoting details of the sport that were pinned to the wall.
    “Listen to this, Zena. The paintballs aren’t like bullets, they are gel capsules – made of gelatine and food colouring – and they are completely edible. There are paintball eating contests all the time at tournaments and events.”
    “Great, if we get hungry we can lunch on a yellow one,” I replied, still unconvinced.
    Once we were ready, we were quickly introduced to our instructor, Ravi, who was an enthusiastic mine of information. “It is my job to guarantee that you have an enjoyable and safe experience,” he began. “Paintball has regulated itself. We have developed rules and guidelines, and all paintball facilities in the world adhere to them strictly. You must keep your masks on at all times, including the introductory session inside. You must make sure that your marker, which is what we call the rifle, is shooting under the legal speed limit, as we shall demonstrate later. Our company and players also ensure that the equipment is in good shape and well maintained.” I must have looked worried because he turned and said, “Some people associate this sport with ‘war games’ but, believe me, it’s really enjoyable out there and the only danger you might encounter is falling over a tree root! There are more injuries reported from basketball and baseball than from paintball in any given year. Once you get out there you will become totally immersed in a ‘friendly fight’. Go on and enjoy yourself – you’ll be surprised!” With that he led us to the indoor demonstration area.
    Two hours later, I emerged smiling, my overalls spattered in bright crimson and my face a healthy glow. I felt like a child who had been out playing in the countryside and was now, reluctantly, being called in for supper.
    © UCLES 2011 0500/21/M/J/11
    5
    3 Summarise:
    (a) the ways in which paintballing is a safe sport, as described in Passage B;
    (b) the reasons why climbing the Nose of El Capitan and the way Dean Potter makes this climb are dangerous, as described in Passage A.
    Use your own words as far as possible.
    You should write about 1 side in total, allowing for the size of your handwriting.
    Up to fifteen marks are available for the content of your answer, and up to five marks for the quality of your writing.
    [Total: 20]
    Mark scheme at bottom.



    My summary Q.3
    1. Climbing the nose of El Capitan is very dangerous and one small mistake can result in death. Potter is one of the most professional and is highly knowledgeable of mountains. However the Nose of El Capitan has an enormous length, a mountain climber has to climb more than two thousand feet. The mountain strangely has a layout of a human nose, making the mountain more risky then the usual mountains around the world due to its overhanging*. A climber has to climb then push through the obstacle " Nose. Nothing makes a day for that cunning mountain then a person who has miscalculated his steps and died during climbing it.

    Potter is hugely confident. To climb that mountain is one thing but to have the fastest time of climbing it, he chose to abandon safety of ropes. Which by the standards of a professional or average climber is highly dangerous. Incase an avalanche or snow blizzard strikes, Potter had brought no food or clothes. Potter, chose to discard anything that may slow him down, however those things might protect him. He chose ounces instead of pounds, so he can reach faster to the top. Potter even made a homemade harness which is extremely light but durable that has been attached to dental floss which can rip if he is surrounded by jagged rocks whilst climbing.( * Should i put a conclusion ? )

    Paintball :
    No matter what anyone says, Paintball is a safe sport. Paintball bullets are called capsules that mark or tag and opposite team player. Players can be as few as 2 and could reach the max, above twenty players. Paintball rifles are called markers, for instance so people would not stereotype that paintball is a war game. It is in fact a new form of catchers or hide and seek.
    Instructors around the paintball field hover near the players to make sure the two teams will have an enjoyable time and safe experience. Any bad behavior, is dangerous to other players and the instructors will evacuate that team member who misbehaves and will be off from that game. Paintball bullets are very safe and non toxic that many times a paintball eating capsule contest happened.
    Equipment is used to protect you from paint bullets are always used are new and safe. Masks are worn to protect against bangs or misproperly aimed shots from a player, usually directed to the lower area of the body or to the head. Paintball instructors persist and vex new players that for a point to occur/ player is tagged. A center to the chest area will tag a member and he will be out for a certain duration until the round ends.

    Instructors and many others, such as clients and doctors stress the fact paintball is a healthy cardiovascular exercise, a good sport and an excitable game. An annual report of a local magazine wrote that paintball injuries were non existent whilst people who played football had shin splints and many other muscle injuries or cramp that required to rest and recover in bed after a visit to the doctor.




    *( Will marks be deduced because I wrote "overhanging" from the text ? question is for the summary of potter, mountain and nose el capitan. )





    Question 3
    This question tests Reading Objectives R1–R3 (15 marks):
    • understand and collate explicit meanings • understand, explain and collate implicit meanings and attitudes • select, analyse and evaluate what is relevant to specific purposes
    AND Writing Objectives W1–W5 (5 marks):
    • articulate experience and express what is thought, felt and imagined • order and present facts, ideas and opinions • understand and use a range of appropriate vocabulary • use language and register appropriate to audience and context
    • make accurate and effective use of paragraphs, grammatical structures, sentences, punctuation and spelling.
    A CONTENT
    Give one mark per point up to a maximum of 15.
    Summarise:
    (a) the ways in which paintballing is a safe sport, as described in Passage B;
    (b) the reasons why climbing The Nose of El Capitan and the way Dean Potter makes this climb are dangerous, as described in Passage A.
    Use your own words as far as possible.
    You should write about 1 side in total, allowing for the size of your handwriting.
    Up to fifteen marks are available for the content of your answer, and up to five marks for the quality of your writing.
    (a)reasons for considering paintballing to be a safe sport
    1 activity suitable for families 2 ordinary people/business people play 3 medical form must be completed 4 protective clothing/headgear provided 5 eye masks must be worn 6 paintballs made of gel 7 strict rules/guidelines 8 instructors give guidance 9 practice session first 10 rifle (marker) speed below legal limit 11 equipment in good order/checked 12 accidents very rare 13 other sports more dangerous 14 only a friendly fight/game
    © University of Cambridge International Examinations 2011Page 8
    Mark Scheme: Teachers’ version
    Syllabus
    Paper
    IGCSE – May/June 2011
    0500
    21
    (b) reasonsforconsideringPotterclimb dangerous
    15 most challenging/notorious climb in America/the world 16 over 2,000 feet vertical climb 17 overhanging shelf/‘nose’ 18 poor handholds/‘slender crack’
    19 under-equipped 20 homemade/insubstantialharness 21 rushing/quick start/not waiting 22 speed of the climb 23 falling could pull partner down
    Marking Criteria for Question 3 B QUALITY OF WRITING: CONCISION, FOCUS AND WRITING IN OWN WORDS
    Use the following table to give a mark out of 5.
    It is important that candidates follow the instruction about writing a side in total for the summary, allowing for the size of the handwriting. The guidelines are as follows: large handwriting is approximately five words per line, average handwriting is eight words per line, and small handwriting is eleven and more. Typed scripts consist of approximately 15 words.
    Note: A few candidates will copy the text word for word or almost so. These candidates will be penalised.
    Band 1: 5
    Both parts of the summary are well focused on the passage and the question, and are expressed concisely throughout.
    Band 2: 4
    Most points are made clearly and fluently. Own words are used consistently (where appropriate). The summary is mostly focused on the passages and question but may have an inappropriate introduction or conclusion.
    Band 3: 3
    There are some areas of concision. There may be occasional loss of focus or clarity. Own words (where appropriate) are used for most of the summary. Responses may be list-like or not well sequenced.
    Band 4: 2
    The summary is occasionally focused, but there may be examples of comment, repetition, unnecessarily long explanation and/or some quotations in lieu of explanation. The response may exceed the permitted length.
    Band 5: 1
    The summary lacks focus and is wordy, or is over long. It may be answered in the wrong form (e.g. a narrative or a commentary). There may be frequent lifting of phrases and sentences.
    Band 6: 0
    Excessive lifting; no focus; excessively lon.




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