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    I would be suited to the job of a restaurant assistant as I have many of the necessary skills and qualities that are essential within the job. I am also always willing to learn and acquire new skills.

    I was appointed as a ‘pupil mentor’ at the Sentimus Robotics Roadshow for Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics. My role involved helping several pupils use specialised computer software to programme a robot that would participate in a “robot race” at the end of the course. Undertaking the role of a pupil mentor allowed me to acquire several skills that would be vital in the job of a restaurant assistant. Some of these include leadership skills, team working skills, time management skills and lastly- how to use my initiative in unfamiliar situations. I believe that having a good initiative would be essential within the role of a restaurant assistant; for example- if there was a spillage or breakage, I would be able to use my initiative to ensure the incident is dealt with immediately with causing minimal fuss and disruption.

    Once a week I tutor pupils in Chemistry and Physics. Through doing this I have gained skills and qualities that I believe are integral within the role of a restaurant assistant. The most significant skill I obtained was the ability to communicate with others in a pleasant and effective manner. A restaurant assistant must have excellent communicating skills to maintain a good relationship with all the customers and create a pleasant friendly atmosphere.




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    I would be the perfect candidate for the job of a restaurant assistant as I have many of the necessary skills and qualities that are essential for this job. I am also always willing to learn and acquire new skills. Both words in red are synonyms and mean pretty the same so instead of using both, you could use one. Just get rid off 'necessary' .

    I was appointed as a pupil mentor at the Sentimus Robotics Roadshow for Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics. My role involved helping several pupils use specialised computer software to programme a robot that would participate in a robot race​(stick to one style of the quotation marks either use '.....' or "....." ) at the end of the course. Undertaking the role of a pupil mentor allowed me to acquire several skills that would be vital in the job of a restaurant assistant. Some of these include leadership skills, team working skills, time management skills and lastly (omit the dash as it's not necessary, you could add comma or just leave without both ) how to use my initiative in unfamiliar situations. I believe that having a good initiative would be essential within the role of a restaurant assistant, for example- (use comma instead of the dash) if there was a spillage or breakage, I would be able to use my initiative to ensure the incident is dealt with immediately without causing minimal fuss and disruption.

    Once a week I tutor pupils in Chemistry and Physics. Through doing this I have gained skills and qualities that I believe are integral within the role of a restaurant assistant. The most significant skill I obtained was the ability to communicate with others in a pleasant and effective manner. A restaurant assistant must have excellent communicating skills to maintain a good relationship with all the customers and create a pleasant friendly atmosphere.

    The purple ones are my suggestions but it's up to you to either leave them or stay with the original

    Also, just general thing but when you mention, e.g. restaurant assistant, for the first time in your text, you use article 'a' since it's in the piece of writing for the first time. But when you repeat it several times later in the text, use 'the' as it's already known for the reader. Oh and it looks a lil better than using 'a' all the time


    Basically, I think you've done great work and I couldn't think of anything else to add
 
 
 
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