English - Horror Story

I'm apparantly quite good at English but this time I'm clueless where to start. I've been given the task of writing a story containing 1000 words, the genre has to be horror. I am not sure how to write a story plan or to keep going and keep the attention of a reader. :confused:

Here is my attempt so far:

"Into the hills
It was a awful night. Rain smashed like a loud drum against the windows, the noice of a monster occasionally appeared, well the thunder I mean. The storm was like an untrained animal in a cage, trying to cause as much destruction as possible. I knew there wouldn't be any sleep that night. Nevertheless, I tried to get to sleep, tucking in slowly preparing for the night ahead. I did nothing but worry and worry. The worst possible thing happened, it is back haunting me. It was like a projection but on the ceiling, it had a green jelly-like body and spoke in a tough, loud voice. This night two years ago my Mother vanished, there was a national search for her but nothing happened, it must have got her. "You are the chosen one" roared the frightening projection. You would think it's just a cinema, but there's no projector and there's no film."

How can I attempt it, change it, make it better, and carry on? Any ideas for what could happen or to happen??

Thanks for any help to get my imagination going wild

Reply 1

rt

OP

11

Sorry for bumping but this is quite urgent for me - I gotta get it in on Tuesday :/

Reply 2

GhanaGapper

5

calum141

I'm apparantly quite good at English but this time I'm clueless where to start. I've been given the task of writing a story containing 1000 words, the genre has to be horror. I am not sure how to write a story plan or to keep going and keep the attention of a reader. :confused:

Here is my attempt so far:

"Into the hills
It was a awful night. Rain smashed like a loud drum against the windows, the noice of a monster occasionally appeared, well the thunder I mean. The storm was like an untrained animal in a cage, trying to cause as much destruction as possible. I knew there wouldn't be any sleep that night. Nevertheless, I tried to get to sleep, tucking in slowly preparing for the night ahead. I did nothing but worry and worry. The worst possible thing happened, it is back haunting me. It was like a projection but on the ceiling, it had a green jelly-like body and spoke in a tough, loud voice. This night two years ago my Mother vanished, there was a national search for her but nothing happened, it must have got her. "You are the chosen one" roared the frightening projection. You would think it's just a cinema, but there's no projector and there's no film."

How can I attempt it, change it, make it better, and carry on? Any ideas for what could happen or to happen??

Thanks for any help to get my imagination going wild

Hi,

I think its a good start. Maybe you could try using a few more metaphors instead of similes... builds tension and is more dramatic and also try using shorter sentences as it slows the pace and increases tension again. Using rhetorical repetiontion (similar words in threes) is also good for a horror story.

eg.

Rain drummed against the windows, the deafening thunder snarling like a monster as I lay in the darkness, frozen by terror. The storm was an untrained animal in a cage. Crashing. Roaring. Tearing at the battered house, trying to destroy everything in its path. As I watched the eerie shadows dance across my wardrobe doors, I reluctantly resigned myself to the fact that I wouldn't be able to get any sleep.

Hope that helps!

Reply 3

rt

OP

11

Hi,

That has helped me quite abit with how my story structure can be improved.

Thankyou :smile:

Reply 4

no1mohsin

13

I'm only GCSE but I would say that try to get away from clichés (e.g. the monster thing, untrained animal). Try and make the language decidedly delicate and understated as that is the kind of language that makes an audience think. Also, an interesting verb choice is always good - try and make it understated as i just said. The post above for example, has "shadows danced" - a particularly good example. Hope i've helped :smile:

Reply 5

Sellby

1

this is really good! try and use some more emotive language to really get the reader tensed up and eager to carry on reading on until the next chapter.

Reply 6

the bear

20

Original post by Sellby

this is really good! try and use some more emotive language to really get the reader tensed up and eager to carry on reading on until the next chapter.

i think that OP has given up after 12 years :emo:

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