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Let's do Haiku

as you may know Haiku are a traditional Japanese verse form;

the typical syllable pattern is

5
7
5

and the subject matter often features Nature or Landscape. the tiny poems evoke deep feelings of longing and can be read on several levels.

Here are a few to get you started... please post your own !!

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a green lizard waits
on a brick red plant pot
his tiny feet ache

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the mussel shell gapes
shameless slutty mollusc
flashing salty sex

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dusk falls on Cambridge
mist fingers Scudamore's punts
Laundress Green exhales

(edited 10 years ago)

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Reply 1

Platinum Mech

Here's a haiku
But it's so very pointless
As it says little

Reply 2

Dunc1

Original post by Platinum Mech

Here's a haiku
But it's so very pointless
As it says little

Sometimes you say more
Forced by the economy
Of the strict structure.

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Wind blows through London
It would gently stir the trees
If there were any.

Reply 3

the bear

Original post by Platinum Mech

Here's a haiku
But it's so very pointless
As it says little

Platinum Mech is playing the 4-7-4 configuration :s-smilie:

Reply 4

the bear

Original post by Dunc1

Sometimes you say more
Forced by the economy
Of the strict structure.

--

Wind blows through London
It would gently stir the trees
If there were any.

Very good Haiku
Sir Dunc1 has done us proud
Is he Japanese ?

Reply 5

PreppyNinja

I don't get this
But I'll pretend that I do
though it's hard to.

Reply 6

+ polarity -

It'sGrey envelopes me
Freezing droplets assail me
But why always me?

Reply 7

Platinum Mech

Original post by the bear

Platinum Mech is playing the 4-7-4 configuration :s-smilie:

How?

I've read it back to myself and it seems a 5-7-5 configuration to me.

Reply 8

the bear

a man hits a girl
what is the world coming to ?
Jane Austen it ain't

Reply 9

the bear

Original post by Platinum Mech

How?

I've read it back to myself and it seems a 5-7-5 configuration to me.

it's just how it sounded to me.. : here's = 1 syllable... you could say "here is" for 2 syllables

little can be pronounced either as 1 syllable or 2

Reply 10

Platinum Mech

Original post by the bear

it's just how it sounded to me.. : here's = 1 syllable... you could say "here is" for 2 syllables

little can be pronounced either as 1 syllable or 2

I've always thought that "here's" has two syllables, as it's pronounced "he-er's". And I don't think I've ever heard "little" pronounced as one syllable, is that a regional thing? :s-smilie:

Reply 11

the bear

Original post by Platinum Mech

I've always thought that "here's" has two syllables, as it's pronounced "he-er's". And I don't think I've ever heard "little" pronounced as one syllable, is that a regional thing? :s-smilie:

it's just RP.... "here's" is pronounced as 1 syllable as is "cheers" or "spears"...

"little" is compressed to 1 syllable

Reply 12

Dunc1

Building huge train lines
That will carve through our landscape
HS2, Brute?

Reply 13

Kallisto

Entertainment Forum Helper

It's my turn now!

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A flamingo flies
across the sea and the land
and lands in Brazil

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A good idea to create such a thread. I remember me to have written two Haikus in German.

Reply 14

Kittiara

Fireworks go pop,
felines hide under the couch;
noisy Guy Fawkes night.

Reply 15

Kallisto

Entertainment Forum Helper

Here is another haiku:

I can see a wall
on which a spider scrabbles
but I have no fear

A haiku is a good chance for a foreigner like me to train the literary skills in English. :smile:

Reply 16

Platinum Mech

Original post by the bear

it's just RP.... "here's" is pronounced as 1 syllable as is "cheers" or "spears"...

"little" is compressed to 1 syllable

Okay, I've done some online research on this subject and many sources report "here" as having one syllable. I'm pretty surprised, though. I'll have to re-educate myself on what a syllable is to see if I'm slightly confusing it with something else. I still don't see how "little" can be pronounced with just one syllable, though - isn't it pronounced "lit-el"?

Reply 17

the bear

Original post by Dunc1

Building huge train lines
That will carve through our landscape
HS2, Brute?

you are on the right track Sir Dunc1 :wink:

PS some readers will think that Brute is one syllable. The Bear says it is fine for 2

Reply 18

the bear

Original post by Platinum Mech

maybe we will allow you to have 1 and 1/2 syllables for little :angry:

Reply 19

the bear

Original post by Kallisto

Here is another haiku:

I can see a wall
on which a spider scrabbles
but I have no fear

A haiku is a good chance for a foreigner like me to train the literary skills in English. :smile: